This is just so cute :) It's perfect for them. Both Neville and Hannah seemed to need each other from the beginning, never seemed to have much confidence at all, so I'm glad they found each other :) I can't wait to see more of them :)
Great job!Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) I'm glad you liked it, I love writing Neville and Hannah. Report Review
I liked how this was short and (uber) sweet!
I thought your characterization of Neville was almost spot-on, very unsure and shy yet also taking the chance and letting Hannah in on his dreams and his feelings for her (that's the Gryffindor in him!). Very self-deprecating about how he was awful at school the first time around (which isn't necessarily true, he was awesome at Herbology, although Neville would think the worst I believe).
With Hannah, you had a bit more freedom since all we know of her is that she's blonde and tends to blush a lot in the books and that she marries Neville and becomes the owner/patroness of the Leaky Cauldron. You've painted her as someone who seems to fit perfectly with Neville, a bit bolder and more open, yet very encouraging and patient with him. Which is great because it always seemed like a random pairing JKR came up with, but you've made it believable.
I like the fluffy tone, which is very appropriate with the situation and challenge. Some of your descriptions are quite beautiful and eloquent (particularly the first sentence which set the tone well for the rest of the story). I think you could have used more of these descriptions in the middle and the end of the story to keep the level of detail consistent throughout.
No spelling or grammar mistakes!
Overall, awesome job interpreting the challenge! Winners will be announced sometime this weekend, thanks again for participating!Author's Response: Thank you so very much! I'm glad it was believable; that's what I was going for.
I'm so glad you liked it. ^_^ Thank you! Report Review
This is fantastic, and I can't wait to read more! Also this is my 300th review so I'm happy that it was such an amazing chapter :) keep up the good work! 10/10Author's Response: Oh, wow! I'm so glad you think so, and thank you so much for the great review! (:
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Oh wow, this is good! Can't wait for more!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
That is a really good story! I've read several Neville/Hannah stories and I think this will be one of the best. You are a really good writer and I just love the idea.Author's Response: Thank you! Aw, I'm so glad you liked it. That means so much! Report Review
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