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Review #1, by UnluckyStar57 Running.

17th April 2014:
Hi! I already reviewed "Tusk, Tusk," so I decided to drop by again and review a different story. I'd like to inform you that this is the twenty-fifth review that I've written today. I hope that I don't sound too insane. :D

So I'm glad that I picked this one-shot to read, because I TOTALLY get where you're coming from about everything being scarier at night. When I'm alone in my room during the day, I'm alright, but right now I'm having a case of the heebie jeebies. :)

However, this situation is much more chilling than mine is. Your decision to tell the story in second person was a good one--it added to the overall creepy effect! But who was the character that got ambushed by the Death Eaters in the dark? A random, nameless one who decided that maybe the dark side wasn't so pleasant? I'm not really sure, but I think that the air of mystery surrounding the main character is eerie and unique!

Oh dear. Old Voldy's out for a killing spree and his minions are doing the same. This is why we don't go out alone at night, children! Oh no! I mean, what did the blonde person do to incur the wrath of the Death Eaters? Was he a traitor? What's up with that?

As with "Tusk, Tusk," your grammar is spotless. The writing style of this piece differs greatly, but you pulled it off very well! I love how chilling it was!

~UnluckyStar57

For the Huffleclaw-Ravenpuff Eggstravaganza.

Author's Response: omg,twenty five reviews? You're on fire!
(immensely in gratitude of you deciding to review something else :3)

haha, it was that god-awful feeling that officially inspired me. and then it was that I decided to set it on the day Voldemort fell. I just love love love angst, and was trying my hand at a different writing style because I find that I have trouble with description sometimes - so I worked with that here, for the second person is lovely to help you through, as you need to get the reader to feel and breathe and understand everything from an inner-perspective. It was indeed left unsaid to add to the story, although I know who she is, but not her name (you weren't far off.) Basically, they realised on the very day that Voldemort was going to kill the Potters that things were going to go horrible amiss - and tries to escape the whole thing.

NO NEVER GO OUT ALONE AT NIGHT. Death eaters might just surround you in a dark forest! And he planned to desert with her, but chickened out. In the end, she was the one that got the short end of the stick here.

Thank you so so much for the lovely review! This is one of my favourite pieces. :3


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Review #2, by naziza Running.

23rd March 2012:
wow. that was really good writing. really liked it.

Author's Response: thanks so much!

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Review #3, by BrightStar Running.

30th May 2011:
Hi! BrightStar here with your review!

Coherence: Spelling and grammar fine. As usual, your flow is great and very fast paced. Very easey to read. You dealt so well with the second person narrative!

Characterisation: I would have like a better idea of who the character was, though I had my suspicions for canon characters. I presume this is a character of your own creation?
Either way, well done, there was a real sense of entrappment.

Context: The same night, obviously that James and Lily died? The fear, the tension that would have been in the air that night for people involved like the death eaters was really well expressed there.

Credibility: Very believable, and it strikes home with everyone. Everything IS scarier in the dark, and the idea that you can run but cant hide/hifde but cant run sells films and books for a reason.

Well done, i really liked this, and so different from your usual style!

Author's Response: HI HI LOVE!

THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU SO MUCH!

about who she is, that's supposed to be a mystery. After all, all we deduce from her is that she is a death eater that wants to leave that life behind. Im very glad that you liked it and all -especially the night part. I was seriously freaked out that night :7

SO THANKS SO MUCH AGAIN! and who knows? Maybe I will write another one like these where it shows more of her life as a death eater :p


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Review #4, by changingfaces Running.

19th May 2011:
Wow. This was really, really good. Short and to the point, but good. I agree- everything is creepier, scarier, at night. I think now I want to know more about her though, because you're leaving it at a cliffhanger. I liked it, other then the fact that I'd prefer more background, but that's my personal taste. Good job, and you write really well in second person. :)

8/10

Author's Response: wow, thanks so much! Everything is sodding scary at night -shuders- and i do like that. She (because she remains nameless) was a death eater trying to reform, but they got to her before she could escape. :D Hehe, yay! btw, i will be starting in your review in a bit, i haven't forgotten -just been busy!

-miss


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