wow. that was really good writing. really liked it.Author's Response: thanks so much! Report Review
Hi! BrightStar here with your review!
Coherence: Spelling and grammar fine. As usual, your flow is great and very fast paced. Very easey to read. You dealt so well with the second person narrative!
Characterisation: I would have like a better idea of who the character was, though I had my suspicions for canon characters. I presume this is a character of your own creation?
Either way, well done, there was a real sense of entrappment.
Context: The same night, obviously that James and Lily died? The fear, the tension that would have been in the air that night for people involved like the death eaters was really well expressed there.
Credibility: Very believable, and it strikes home with everyone. Everything IS scarier in the dark, and the idea that you can run but cant hide/hifde but cant run sells films and books for a reason.
Well done, i really liked this, and so different from your usual style!Author's Response: HI HI LOVE!
THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU SO MUCH!
about who she is, that's supposed to be a mystery. After all, all we deduce from her is that she is a death eater that wants to leave that life behind. Im very glad that you liked it and all -especially the night part. I was seriously freaked out that night :7
SO THANKS SO MUCH AGAIN! and who knows? Maybe I will write another one like these where it shows more of her life as a death eater :p Report Review
Wow. This was really, really good. Short and to the point, but good. I agree- everything is creepier, scarier, at night. I think now I want to know more about her though, because you're leaving it at a cliffhanger. I liked it, other then the fact that I'd prefer more background, but that's my personal taste. Good job, and you write really well in second person. :)
8/10Author's Response: wow, thanks so much! Everything is sodding scary at night -shuders- and i do like that. She (because she remains nameless) was a death eater trying to reform, but they got to her before she could escape. :D Hehe, yay! btw, i will be starting in your review in a bit, i haven't forgotten -just been busy!
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