You know what? You are converting me to ships I shouldn't like. :/ I adore Harry and Ginny, but this, wow. I think that Dean really loves Ginny, but she loves Harry, and it's causing him a lot of pain, I could tell whilst I was reading this that I'm going to start reading lots of Ginny/Dean stories. I sort of feel like Dean is being cheated, he would do anything for Ginny, but she loves someone else, it was always someone else. Thank you for writing this! Love Livvy xxxAuthor's Response: Of course, and thank you for reviewing it. I honestly hate writing Hogwarts Era ships, but I like going outside of the box. It words pretty well sometimes. I'm glad you think that it turned out well :) Report Review
Hi! BrightStar here with your review!
I am so sorry for the delay, it's almost been a week. You said you were worried about writing Ginny, I was delighted to be able to help you, Ginny is my favourite character to write! You write her a little differently to me, but believably. Hopefully I'll be some help!
Just a little canon point - Ginny had gone out with Michael Corner for a good while, though kept it secret. They were going out when Harry and Cho were, I THINK. You might just want to check that.
I love the idea for this, I had forgotten about this scene from HBP, and there isn't enough Ginny/Harry when she's with dean - AND you've written it very well, I was delighted to get the chance to read this.
Coherence: There were just a few little things, but they didn't take away from the story at all.
"Ginny Weasley gazed from her down window" - I presume you mean she gazed DOWN from her window. That's just a little thing, anything like that you will pick up yourself no problem, I know you're a good writer from this and other fics. Overall, spelling and grammar were fine, flow was great.
Characterisation: I really felt for Ginny there, and also Dean. The one thing I didn't like about Ginny was when she said "There isn't anything special about me". Now thats perfectly valid. She's a teenage girl, and shes in love with Harry Potter - you're right, its important to emphasise this feeling of "why would he like me, I dont save the world" or whatever (obviously not those words!). However, the way it is here, it just seemed very cliched. Sometimes writers who arent half as talented as you use that, and its just really a way of defending the fact their characters are mary sues. I really would reword that. Ginny is insecure, and is hurting a lot over aArry - this line just didnt sit right with me, sorry for ranting so much on it!
Having said all that, her guilt over leading Dean on made me really like Ginny :)
Context: Great, maybe you could say something about about the start of the war, but it was grand really. You said she didn't just like Harry because he was the boy who lives - I was really happy that was included, as a lot of the girls in her year in HBP liked Harry for that.
Credibility: Very believable, Dean especially was believable. This is a girl who just doesnt know what to do, you could really relate :)
I've said a good bit, hopefully it isnt too confusing!
Really glad I read this, well done :)Author's Response: Teehee, you're not confusing at all, dearest. I've never written Ginny in my life, and honestly, I was horrified to do so. I'm really glad that you have so much advise, because I hadn't a clue where to go with her...i always characterized Ginny as a quiet, confident girl, but I guess I didn't write her as so, hmm? :) Thank you so much for the wonderful advise. Love you to bits! Report Review
Great story! Poor Ginny... You did a really good job!Author's Response: =D Thank you, love. Report Review
The story was very good. It makes me think that might be why Ginny and Dean where always fighting.Author's Response: Aww, thank you :) And yes, it does, doesn't it? Report Review
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