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Review #1, by xtinjsc But Daddy

10th August 2011:
I wasn't quite sure if you intended the lack of quotations in the spoken lines here, but it really distracted me as I was reading. I would've loved to see a distinction between the dialogue and narration, but if you actually styled the story this way, then I guess I'm just not used to it. :P

It's interesting that your kept you OC's name all throughout the story. I like that trick in stories sometimes. I would've loved to see a little bit more background about her or even her family, though, just to make her more relatable. But I think you've managed to portray her uncertainty and her dilemma fairly well, so that's good. Overall, it was an interesting read for me.

xtinjsc (Hufflepuff)

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Review #2, by leannemariesnape But Daddy

13th July 2011:
This is quite an interesting story- I liked how short and concise it was. However, I noticed that you didn't use speech marks, which would help with the flow. Good first story- It just needs a quick edit for speech marks ^_^

Leanne :)

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