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Review #1, by Ronsgirl29 She never knew

11th August 2011:
So, Ron/Hermione is basically my favorite relationship in canon, so I just had to read this. And let me tell you, it broke my heart! You're beautiful descriptions just made me so sad, and the way you crafted your words and used the song lyrics made me feel like I was reading a sad poem. I normally am not a huge fan of songfics, but I think the way you did it really enhanced the story.

The part that really got me was when he thinks he hears her voice, I felt like I was going to cry!

Really well done, I loved this even if it was sad!
-Ronsgirl29 (gryffindor)

Author's Response: Thanks! I have this obsession for either write purely sad or purely funny... I'm kind of odd sometimes...

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Review #2, by Capella Black She never knew

6th August 2011:
Aww, this piece is so sad! Poor Ron, and poor Hermione! I really got a sense that they had been together too little, and that made this seem really hard and sad (I said that already!)

The piece does have quite a lot of errors in grammar and punctuation - tense, pronoun use etc. This made it harder to read at points, and so having someone give it a technical beta might be good. Still, it's got a lovely mood to it, and a beautiful use of music interwoven with the plot.

CapellaBlack, Gryffindor

Author's Response: Thanks! I've always had this stupid mistakes... I can't help it, really... :) I'm glad that doesn't stop people from liking my plots, though. :)

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Review #3, by melian She never knew

4th August 2011:
This was truly heartbreaking. It's a really incisive look at how Ron would be feeling in that situation, and in just over 700 words you've really managed to convey that so evocatively. A couple of small typos - you've got "your chocolate eyes" instead of "her chocolate eyes", and it should say she she lay lifeless and cold instead of "lied", but aside from that it was an excellent story. I'm really enjoyng reading your work, you've got a great way of describing things which looks so easy but, as we all know, isn't. Great job all round. :D

melian (gryffindor)

Author's Response: Oh, these typos. I really have to look through all my stories and get them out one of these days...
Anyways, thanks for another wonderful review. :D


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Review #4, by Debra20 She never knew

29th July 2011:
Hellooo!

First of all, congratulations on your story! Only recently have I started reading Ron/Hermione and it's always a pleasure to see different authors takes on the pair.

It was a very touching piece, with Hermione dead as I understood, that reminded me of a poem. The way you phrased your ideas and the words you used seemed like poetry verses were filling the lines. I imagine that it's written from Ron's perspective, and I commend you for that. I have the impression most authors go for Hermione.

There was one instance when you used 'your' and 'her' eyes in the same sentence so I was a little confused. I am sure that both were referring to the same person but it draw my attention. I'm sorry if it was meant that way however!

All in all, a very nice piece!

Author's Response: I'm glad you found this touching! I know that was spotted in the other review, but, yes, I tend to write in a rather poetic style. :D This is a harder things in longer stories, but I still can't hold myself from such. There, I try to have a balance between feelings and action, so it could work. :)

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Review #5, by peace2lovepotter She never knew

15th May 2011:
This was so emotional it wanted to make me cry,(that's a good thing, if you want to score brownie points with me, make me want to cry!) 10/10 :)

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! I wasn't really sure about this story. I'm really too much into writing sad stories...

~Ramona


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