Hiii it's preeah from the forums here with your long-awaited review! so sorry for that btw.. anyway, onto the review!
So yeah, that was seriously adorable!! I truly found myself thoroughly enjoying this story and its cuteness. I don't know, I just found Audrey to be such a sweet and lovable character, and considering how Percy was portrayed in the books, I can see him marrying someone as good as she is. I can see her balancing him out and keeping him grounded... I think my favourite part was the moment where Arthur asks if he can walk her down the aisle, with Audrey's backstory in mind, that part totally gave me goosebumps! :) It was adorable... and the simple 'I love yous' from the two of them was very very sweet.
I do have some comments though. I feel that you could elaborate a bit more on the emotions, I only mean the beginning bit though, because as you got on with the story, the emotions were more clear. I only say this because when you talked about Audrey's parents dying in the war, it was all a bit quick, you know? Something like that I reckon deserves a bit more emphasis on.. And one last thing, the part about Harry being unforgiving was a little odd, because Harry is probably the most forgiving person. He is always the one to give a person another chance... Ron is the one more likely to hold grudges (obviously not with Percy as he IS his brother).
Annnywayyy, aside from that, I truly did enjoy this story! It was very very cute!! So thank you for writing this :) xxxAuthor's Response: Thank you for your review. In my opinion, I think Harry would hold it against him. Either way, he didn't want to be at the wedding(: It was probably because I forgot about him and didn't feel like just throwing him into the wedding, because that would look terrible. Anyways, thank you. :) Report Review
Hi! BrightStar here with your review! Sorry about this delay!
I really, really enjoyed this. I love weddings, I love films about weddings, I love books about weddings. Love them! So obviously, a fic about weddings by an author I like = happy BrightStar. You've made me very curious about Percy/Audrey, I really want to write a short story about them now!
Coherence: Everything was fine. I just noticed effect instead of affect in the summary and that Fleur had "warn" somthing instead of "worn" it. Thats it though, you had no problems whatsoever with flow.
Characters: I really liked Audrey here. I thought her need for a family after losing hers was excellent, her manners (calling Molly Mrs Weasley) were suited to a wife of Percy's, and her apparent love for tradition suits him too - when she wanted to be married the same as Bill and Fleur.
Context: Speaking about Bill and Fleur, I loved how you mentioned even briedly about how their wedding was during the war and they kind of redid it. It was just a little detail but made it seem REALLY real because you rooted it in the Harry Potter timeline if you get me?
Credibility: Very credible as Audrey seemed a good match for Percy. I loved her closeness with Angelina and Molly - especially since she names her daughters Molly and Lucy! THe fact Molly was bridesmaid was lovely, by the way. The only thing I took issue with was the fact Harry wasn't there. I thought that was a bit OOC of him, but then thats your call. It could happen he could hold a grudge, once its remembered theyre on good enough terms in the Deathly Hallows epilogue.
Overall great fic, it was a pleasure to read and review!
- B xxxAuthor's Response: Thank you :D This realy built up my spirt. In the Deathly Hallows Epilogue, Percy was there, but made no attempt to talk to Harry. I think Harry would forgive him, but not really like him that much. But it doesn't matter really ^-^ Only J.K. can tell us that. Thank you so much for your review :D It's veryyy much appriciated. Report Review
You did great on this wedding!! Great job!Author's Response: =D Thank you so much, honey!!! Report Review
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