Julia's banner is so Julia (and I love it, as I always do). This one looks interesting, I haven't read a Pansy story where is solely focuses on her, and placing it after the war makes it even more interesting as she is largely ignored in fics that focus on post-hogwarts. I am looking forward to this.
Okay, the first paragraph is just beautifully written. The imagery is gorgeous. I don't know why, but I'd never really viewed Pansy as a character with feelings before - she always seemed to remote and mocked by both canon and fics, that she just seemed 'there but not there'. This description in the first paragraph has made her seem more human than I think anything else could have done. Wowzers.
"Funny that - love being embodied by something so cold and clear." And that's what she would have got if she had married Draco. A cold love, and one that she knew was cold. And that's actually quite sad, that that would have been her reality and she was fine with that.
"Pansy searched once more amongst the moon and the stars. In the day, all of this lay beneath her feet. The thought terrified her." How have I never thought of that before?! That is terrifying. Endless space and time is at our feet for 12 hours a day, and we don't even give it a second thought. Not only have you enlightened me (thank you very much, Miss Clever Helena), but this really conveys how much Pansy has grown that she is actually thinking of things other than her own small world. But of course she should be thinking this, it's only natural that after her own small world has been utterly shattered, she turns to the real world - the solid earth beneath her feet - and realises that that too is suspended, and that any shift in the Universe could completely change that. Wow. Again.
I love the ending line. Kind of sums up the entire story, but is so poignant in describing the way that Pansy would have to let herself change and be changed if she wanted to find a place for herself in the 'new world'.
As ever, Helena, your imagery and words fill me with awe and jealousy. I wish I could conjure up such rich and meaningful thoughts and actually convey them coherently to the reader as you have done. You are fantastic and I am insanely jealous ♥ Report Review
This is lovely, really really lovely. You've captured a restless, almost child like side to Pansy, with her letting go of something that she has struggled with once before. This is a beautifully written piece, congratulations. ♥Author's Response: Hello! I'm sorry that I didn't reply to this sooner, it's not because I don't realize how incredibly lovely you are to say these things, it's just that I haven't logged in for a long long time. I just thought that maybe she would go through this phase of almost maturing but being too lost and confused to be able to mature. Stuck somewhere between wanting or needing to be an adult, and yet still wanting to be, and being a child. Really happy you were willing to embrace my interpretation, and thank you so so much x Report Review
I really liked this, I thought you did a great job capturing the mere essence of Pansy. It was nice reading a character that otherwise does not get a whole lot of attention in the realm of fanfiction; and when she is mentioned it's usually in a negative light with a nasty attitude like we see in the book. But here, I like how you made her more human with flaws of her own, peeling back the layers she's built on to prevent outsiders from seeing the true her. Anyway, great job. 10/10 (:Author's Response: Thank you so much for this thoughtful review - I'm sorry it took me so long to answer it, I've been on a semi-break from HPFF for a while due to school work. I really liked writing Pansy and glad you support me in thinking her character has such great potential for writing. 'Peeling back the layers' is exactly what's so fun to do - adding depth to a character and I'm really pleased you could believe in this version of Pansy. Thank you so much for such a supportive and friendly review, I'm very flattered that you took the time to read and review this, it really means a lot :) Report Review
Helenoriariar McDudderz, it had only just occured to me that I've never reviewed you. But, instead of retreating to the shame cave and whopping on my britney records, I resolved to swan over to HPFF and re-read this, so admired it is, so lame I'd been for not leaving a review the first time round. In the words of the great and ever quotable Nelly Furtado, 'she's a maneater, make you work hard, make you spend hard'. What happy, joyous days those were.
I think I have to stop spreading crack wherever I go. Onto your fic.
Firstly: Slytherins and post-hog? Me gusta. It's my favourite genre :3 Pansy, as well, gets a bit of a rough deal in fanfic. Yeah, she was proper nasty, but a lot of people dismiss her as a silly bimbo, often little more than a plot device to get in the way of Draco and Hermione. I'm always very interested to read about her post-hogwarts, or even in school, to see how she's written around her friends - so, yeahh.
And this -'She was suffering from a lazy impatience. She felt it, that nameless, impending thing. That tangible suspense.' fave quote # 1.
Also - 'With the crashing waves she imagined the old Pansy rushing out of her body, laughing into the night, carrying dusty dreams knotted round ghostly fingers.' fave quote # 2. That little quote is just all kinds of beautiful.
'She spread out her arms against the swirling white fabric of her night dress, and to the watchful moon she seemed to have wings.' - fave quote # 3. Dude, this is just...
I'm slightly blown away (but as Nelly Furtado also once said, I'm like a bird). This is just...this is a beautiful little emotional piece with a depth to Pansy that's rarely ever explored in fanfic, like, ever. Applause and squees aplenty ♥Author's Response: AH JULIA I DIDN'T KNOW THAT YOU HAD READ THIS OR REVIEWD IT AND I WAS KIND OF HOPING I'D GOT AWAY WITH NICKING YOUR BANNER FOR IT AND HOPING YOU WOULDN'T NOTICE ITS EXISTENCE.
EEE. I'm torn between emotions because I don't know whether to be a) pleased that you have left me such a lovely review especially as you are all sorts of awesome.
b) really embaressed because my writing is really clichÃ© and mostly I spend my time hoping none of skypeland ever read it because it is far, far below their standards so yeah. I'm blushing a bit.
c) a duck or a frog.
No really, embaressment at my poor teenagery attempts at a fic aside, thank you so much for this review lovely ♥ It is definately appreciated, I'm glad you chose me over Britney and the shame cave.
I'm also glad you filled this review with Nelly Furtado quotes. But as All good things come to an end so must this review response.
Thank you for putting up with my attempts at something, it's all very cheesy but this review gave me the confidence I need to consider trying to write something I can be more proud of in the future.
basically, aww shucks & gee thanks. the next round of tea and biscuits is on me :) ♥ Report Review
This was gorgeous and made me think of what the other Voldemort sympathizers might have done in the aftermath of his defeat. I don't normally read very many songfics, but you did such a nice job, I might go find the song.
"She was suffering from a lazy impatience. She felt it, that nameless, impending thing. That tangible suspense. Sometimes she felt like she needed to shout, or scream, just to make people move, just to prove that they could."
Deft description of an emotional state which is hard to pin down. Great job.Author's Response: Hey! Thank you very much for this review, a lovely end to my day! I like to think about that too, whether people adjusted or they stuck to their beliefs or whether they ever really believed in the cause to begin with.
The song is a little odd, and was one that grew on me rather than liking it from the beginning. It's sad, but I really like the strings on it. This isn't really a song fic, but I just liked the title and I like the lyrics of the song. I'd be interested to know whether you think the song suits the fic anyway :)
That's very kind of you to say, I'm glad you understood the emotion I was describing.
This review was really very lovely, thank you. Report Review
I do believe that you meant 1998 and not 1988 since it's Post-Hogwarts. That's really the only error I picked up on, and that's the story description not in the story itself.
Being a grammar Nazi it made me happy to see no grammatical errors or spelling mistakes, but I expected nothing less of you, my dear Helena.
This is beautiful!
I love, love, love when people try to get into Pansy's head - and for once you portrayed her as something other than a bratty child. A selfish dreamer, perhaps, but I've never seen a ficlet with Pansy as a dreamer.
To be quite honest, I've never seen her as one. I rather like the change from the usual characterization, yet you still manage to keep her in character with her bitterness and self-centered behavior. I like that.
I've been gone for far too long, but it's nice to see that you came up with something during my long hiatus. I really like this, and you should be proud of yourself!
I really like how fluid this is. It is poeticism and flows quite nicely. I rather like that.
This is a really nice piece.
If I had any criticisms it would be the length, I do like longer pieces. That and Pansy didn't really seem to confront anyone - but maybe that's just shown that she's matured a bit.
I quite like it!
LindersAuthor's Response: Haha, you are absolutely right. Thank you so much for picking up on that, I'll edit straight away. Perhaps I'm not as much of a cautious researcher as I thought eh? Haha! :D
No grammar/spelling mistakes! You might not have expected them, but I certainly did. I'm shocked, in the best way ha! Hopefully I'm -gasp- improving, slowly and surely ;)
Pansy! Yes, I love trying to get inside her head also. Especially as a Slytherin, their characters are so much fun to muse over.
I'm really glad you were open to this dreamer version of her! I think bratty child Pansy is also justified, in a lot of canon she is that part. But it's fun to try and write something more. It's a huge compliment you think I kept her in character all the same, so thank you.
She is a little selfish, I'm happy you picked up on that, because I wanted her to have this adolescent feel. It's selfish in a nicer way- it's the vanity of being occupied in your own thoughts, trying to understand yourself, and it comes with that comparison of yourself against others. In my mind, I wanted her to see as if she is changing, and that's not necessarily elegant. :)
Thank you very much. I was worried the poeticism seemed forced or insincere... not sure of the word I'm looking for but yeah, I'm pleased you rather liked it! :)
I'll try and write something lengthy for you. I know I'm missing out, but I do try! I'm not sure why she doesn't confront anyone, I think it goes back to that sort-of-vanity and a sense of detachment she's feeling but of course this is all in my head. I think you're right though, she would confront someone at some point.
Thank you so much for the wonderful review again, and the detail and advice you've given. You're incredible, very happy to have you back from your hiatus! (I hope?)
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