Your beginning sentence was captivating. There was something about your writing style that kept me interested as I was reading. It was almost poetic, not to mention emotive. I think this story featured Ginny in her most vulnerable and thoughtful moments, and I liked seeing her in that state. It was refreshing.
I enjoyed that you kept the fireworks theme all throughout the story. It made everything connected. I also liked how you matched one colour to Ginny's emotions - that was nifty. I guess my favourite would have to be this: At the greens, she thinks about the evils upon them. She thinks of the lives already lost in battle, of the forces against good growing every minute, of the uncertainty of every moment.
This was a very touching and clever little piece and I was glad I read it. Great job!
xtinjsc (Hufflepuff)Author's Response: Thanks so much! This was such a nice review; I'm glad you liked my story! Report Review
Your explanations of how Ginny was feeling was good.
Keep up the good workAuthor's Response: Thank you so much :) Report Review
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