Aw! This is so cute! I love the bit where they fall to the floor, so in love!
The first sentence is a little awkward in my opinion, maybe change it to be "joined in holy matrimony" rather than marriage?
I think you could make this story more dynamic and exciting by maybe including a flashback to when they first met or the proposal or the first date. Or maybe including the point of view of one of the guests, that could be interesting as well.
megan2u (Ravenclaw)Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you love the part where they fall down, it just seemed like the perfect disaster. I will change that first bit, your way sounds better. I might try one of your suggestions, it might make the story more exciting (if I have time, that is) :) Report Review
Nawww, too fluffy! You know, out of all the Next Gen kids, Hugo Weasley had somehow been the least popular for some reason, that's why I was rather excited when I first saw this story. And I think you've managed to set up the wedding scene pretty well.
I liked the little slip up near the end, it added something different to the story and it also made it more realistic. Weddings are almost always portrayed like something out of a story book, but in reality, weddings are not that perfect, really. I was glad that you added that little twist.
It was a quick and fun read for me overall.
xtinjsc (Hufflepuff)Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you were excited that my story had Hugo in it, and I'm glad you thing I've set up the scene pretty well. In order to make it the ultimate wedding, I thought I would put in a catastrophe, because, as you said, not all weddings are perfect. I really appreciate that my story was fun for you to read! :D Report Review
Hi it's preeah here from the forums!! sorry for the delay but here i am so on with the review! this was sweet! it really was, because of how it didn't try to be overly fluffy or romantic. it was just plain cute how hugo tries to do all of that, but ends up falling on top of his bride. i thought that was adorable soo very well done with that! you defo got a smile out of me :) but with that said, i feel like you could make this so much better if you added a bit more detail and emotional emphasis to the story. i know it's a one shot and it's hard to convey everything in such a short space, but i feel like it would make an already cute story that much cuter :) anywhoo, good job either way!! xxxAuthor's Response: Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you like it and that it made you smile. I will work on making this more detailed in the future. Thank you for the challenge :) Report Review
That was sweet. Little Hugo all grown up! The scene with them tumbling down was embarrassing to read because anyone would hate that moment!
More depth could be added to the story as it seemed a bit succinct--put more of Hugo's emotions there or details of what is happening around them. Also, a priest? I know we really only have Fleur and Bill's wedding to go on but for some reason, I don't feel wizards are Catholic.
But it was still a very nice story to read!Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. I just wrote a priest because I'm a Catholic and I forgot about Bill and Fleur's wedding. I'm glad you liked it anyway and I should have taken into account all the things you said. Report Review
good! makes me want to know more about hugo!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
This was so cute it's hardly believable! :)Author's Response: Thank you! :) Report Review
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