when can we get the next part?waiting for
it.d presentation was awesome.!

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Promising plot ya've got out there.Hope we'll here from ya soon.

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The plot was enticing. Good luck with the next chapter.

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Being a girl who writes many storys and fanfics that the world may never will get to see believe me when I say that this looks like the starting of a very good book!
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this story is very interesting and i cant wait for more! I cant stand cliffies so write more soon please!

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except for a few mistakes this is nice

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this is a nice start..looking forward to nxt chapter

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I like it. There where a few grammer errors and misspellings. Also I thought George died in the battle. Good story. I'm looking forward to the rest!

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hey!! its gud!!! let the story be some lengthier.. summm smalll mistakes.. thats it. its tooo gud... all the very best.

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hey!! its gud!!! let the story be some lengthier.. summm smalll mistakes.. thats it. its tooo gud... all the very best.

Author's Response: thnks adi:)
i'll write the further chapters lenghty~!

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quite an interesting start!lets see how it goes..

Author's Response: thanks for the review!plz keep reading!

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This is a nice plot, but you have many, many errors. When you start a sentence with Quotations, you capitalize the leters. Ex: "Hello, I'm Hermione Granger."

Also..Fred DIED in the last book, sweetie...Even if this happened, Fred wouldn't be there. George, yes, but Fred, no. And you seem sort of all over the place with this. For example, the sentence: "er-sorry Harry..anyways,i never expected that i'll be back to Hogwarts"

Author's Response: I just cant write the story assuming Fred is dead..Fred has a role in the story too..
thanks for the review!

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DISCLAIMER: Prepare yourself for some frankness. I honestly suggest that if you are a sensitive person, you should not read this review.



Suffice it to say, I am not very impressed with this chapter. Your writing feels very rushed, and honestly, it sounds like a girl who was texting.

I understand your excitement, and it's a good thing. But please take some time to consider your readers. This is very hard to read, not only because of formatting and grammar, but just stylistically, it felt insincere.

DESCRIPTIVE DETAIL! I see almost know tone descriptions, facial expressions, not even a dreaded but colorful adverb.

Weak dialogue. Formatted incorrectly, and sounded like a recording. Even though they are JK's characters, don't be afraid to breathe life into them.

I am going to proceed to the next chapter, hoping for improvement. I will post another review afterwards.

Author's Response: thanks for ur review..i promise to improve in the next chapters :)

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hey this story is sorta nice
can you please explain me this title..what is going on??

Author's Response: oh thanks a lot!
hmm about this title..im afraid u have to know it urself because its not something i can tell u..as for now u will not understand anything and im sorry for that
please read the next chapters..u'll really understand it
thanks for the review..keep reviewing

love
Lalitya


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an interesting start
keep on writing..waiting for your further chapters

Author's Response: well thanks
i'll update soon.keep reviewing

love
Lalitya

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I like how you have set the scene for "what comes next". Hopefully exciting things. I'll soon find out when I move on to the next chapter. I'll review again and let you know what I think. So far it's looking good.

Author's Response: yeah sure...i hope i'll keep it interesting...
keep reviewing!!

love
Lalitya

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Nice start. Actually I pointed out two mistakes, one that In McGonagall's letter, you mentioned 'after the war last year' it should just be 'after the war last week' since it was only five days since the war. And well, in the same letter, you must mention 'information regarding your seventh year' instead of 'information regarding your second year'. And according to your story Fred didn't die in the war?

Anyways I liked the story. Update soon. Don't mind the errors I pointed out, I'm habituated with doing that.

Keep writing... :)

P.S. Are you from India? Because my friend left you a review in Hindi.

Author's Response: actually i meant that 'the war that had started last year', anyways ive changed it now..thanks for pointing out the mistakes..i didnt realise;)
and yeah Fred somehow managed to live and u'll come across more interesting part about Dumbledore and Snape too..but it wont be until later...
i'll be writing soon...actually im having exams right now..after that i'll write the next chapters...
yes, i am an Indian:)

thanks for the review...


love
Lalitya

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hmm ur works sounds good.
i think there is a lot of excitment is yet to come...isnt it??
well i am waiting for ur further work
keep up soon

Author's Response: thanks:)
yeah there's a lot of mystery yet to come...
im trying to wind up the story around lucius..having a hard time:(
i promise it'll be interesting
thanks for the review

love
Lalitya

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its nice that you included fred too.
mein aapke agle chap ka intezar kar rahi hun.(i guess you know hindi!!!)
want to see how draco and hermione come together.
update soon.:):):)

Author's Response: yeah sure..
mai hindi jaanti hun:)...next chapter will be coming soon..im working on it..
aap ki review ke liye shukriya
keep reading..i'll update soon

love
Lalitya

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hey this is a nice one.i think this is gonna be interesting
its nice you made Fred's character alive..it'll be sad without him
hope you finish next chapter soon...cant wait:)

Author's Response: Thanks Sarah!
yeah it will be interesting.and yeah i will always keep Fred alive for my stories...i just like him a lot
yeah next chapter will be in a while
keep reviewing

love
Lalitya

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I like this a lot! I am guessing that English isn't your first language though. Forgive me if I'm wrong; because it doesn't detract from your chapter. Your title promises a lot; and I believe you will deliver. Looking forward to your next update!

Author's Response: yeah...ur guess was right..my mothertongue is an Indian lanuage..
actually i have no experience in writing stories...this is my first one..
Thank u for ur opinion..i'll try to improve my language:)..and yeah i promise to keep it to ur expectations i suppose
hmm the next chapter will be up soon..im having my exams right now..so i'll update as soon as possible
thanks for ur review

love
Lalitya

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