Hi, there! Sorry it took something as major as your Golden Paw award to actually get me to read and review your story, because this is exactly the kind of story that I really enjoy. And congratulations on that award, by the way. Richly deserved.
I really, really enjoyed this piece. As much fun as it can be to read and write angst and drama and action and mystery, sometimes it's wonderful to just read something where everything is as it should be and there's never any doubt that things are going to work out perfectly. Well, not completely perfectly from Ron's point of view, but perfect enough.
I loved your characterization. Ron and Harry felt perfectly in tune with the characters from the book. Harry's thoughts, Ron's reactions and the dialog for both of them was just spot on. Harry's anxiety about telling Ron was a perfect reflection of Ron's general "don't ask, don't tell" policy toward Harry and Ginny's relationship. And the way it sends Ron into a panic about his relationship with Hermione was brilliant. Everything about his reaction was beautifully done.
Hermione and Ginny's appearance was a great way to wrap up the story. I have this image of a bushy-haired Tasmanian Devil tearing through the Leaky, zeroing in on Harry and Ron, and it puts a smile on my face.
Thanks for a wonderful read and congratulations on your Golden Paw!Author's Response: Hello! Thanks so much for this! I hadnt been on in ages so i didnt even know i had gotten the award!
Im so glad you liked this! While I hate fluffy things in my normal reading, fanfiction is the exception. Harry and Ron had such a hard time, I just want things to be perfect for them :L
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Oh, I really liked this, too! It's a really nice portrayal of Harry's friendship with Ron, and I loved the parallel you drew between the wizards duel that never actually happened and Ron being his best man at the wedding. You captured their dynamic perfectly in their little back-and-forth in the Hog's Head - I loved Ron asking Harry why Harry didn't tell him that Hermione was a nightmare to live with (and, for that matter, that Harry and Hermione were roommates in the first place), and Ron's feeling that Harry's proposal to Ginny meant that he would have to propose to Hermione was just priceless.
Excellent job all around. I loved it. :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! I cant remember when I made that connection, but I knew I had to write it! I just had such a clear idea of what happened post-hogwarts for them, practically (who lived with who, etc) i had to include it!
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I can't stop laughing, I just loved this! Ron's reaction wasn't expected but was brilliant beyond belief. I love your little snippets into their every day lives throughout their chit-chat. I really enjoyed the ending. Ron's hilarious and I'm glad he didn't flip for the other reason. And being each others' second was so poetic and perfect. 10/10Author's Response: Hi!
What a lovely review! Thanks so much for reading and letting me know you liked this.
This was a follow on from another story, and I just had to write it - I love Harry and Ron, BFFs etc etc!
I hoped it would be funny, since Ron is hilarious! This is exactly how I imagined it - they weren't poetic in what they said, I'm sure you'll agree, but the lovely thoughts were there I think :D
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AW!! I love this one-shot it's so Harry and Ron :) I loved how Ron was like I'm going to kill you, but it didn't put a damper on Harry's mood.
I know you said it was because Ron was only joking, but I know it was really because he was marrying Ginny.
Because he and Ginny are so awesome and a lot of people don't realize it :) You do though.
LizzieAuthor's Response: Thanks so much! Haha I know from your stories you love over protective ron!
i love harry/ginny :D
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Hey there - its mahalia from the forums, who started the rock n roll challenge! :) i have finally made it to reviewing your work :)
firstly, this was a very beautiful piece. youve made me feel for your characters. your wording is beautiful, and i felt like i was a spectator of the relationships in this story - especially harry and rons. you grab the lyrics i gave you perfectly, and i really enjoyed reading this story.
you were thhe only one who ever came back to me and handed in your entry, but i feel you would have won the challenge anyway. :) so expect a few more reviews for your other stories. thank you for the excellent story brightstar!Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for this!
I'm so glad you liked it, i really enjoyed this challenge.
Thank you for reading and making this challenge :D Report Review
I love. love. love this. absolutely. cutest engagement fic I've ever read. Its not cheesey at all. I love the small details like Sunday dinner at the Weasleys. And I love that Ginny and Harry weren't together directly after the war, it makes it seem more real. This piece is perfect! Off to read all your others!Author's Response: Oh wow, seriously? Thank you! I'm so glad you like these - Ive had all those little details in my head for years :D
Ah im so happy! I hope you like the others. Trains is like this :D Report Review
Loved it! It's easy to forget sometimes how close of friends Harry and Ron really are when writing about them with Ginny and Hermione but you captured this moment perfectly :)
This story particularly caught my eye but now I'm going to go and read some more of your stories!
LittleRose13Author's Response: aww thank you! ive always loved that friendship :)
so glad you liked it so much, hope you like the others :D if you liked this, its kind of a seqel to "trains" :D Report Review
I really enjoyed this glimpse into life after Deathly Hallows before the Nineteen Years Later! really well written and a great spin on the characters! Great!!Author's Response: aww thanks so much! Report Review
I loved this, It was really sweet :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it. Report Review
This is a very unique take on the enagement plot. Your Ron reminds me of a Teddy Bear that I used to have. He was giant, warm fuzzy reed thing that I could always rely in when I would go to the hospital.
Apart from plot-wise (A splendid job, by the way) the only fickle-ish thing I have is the formatting. Sometimes the lines would be right underneath each other when speaking, and it's irking me.
Good job, now I will be reading your other stories. The writing style you have is heart-warming, and I hope the others would have somewhat the same style.Author's Response: Aww thank you! And I love Ron. Sorry about the formatting, I should sort that out. THanks, I hope you like what you read :) Report Review
Hello! Naida here with your requested review! Can I just start out by saying awww! Even though this wasn't a romantic relationship, it has to be one of the sweetest things I have ever read! I loved it! You portrayed the relationship between Ron and Harry perfectly. My favorite line was, without a doubt, "Then children, probably with names that mirror ours or something ridiculous like that.". I had to stop reading from laughing so hard!
In terms of believability, I think you were spot on. Ron and Harry were most definitely in character. Harry's always been the more open one to me, and Ron gets embarrassed easily, but his heart is in the right place. And his reaction: Classic Ron! It was exactly what I think he would have said if it was part of the books!
Your flow was good too, apart from the end, when I got a bit confused as to how Hermione and Ginny suddenly came into the picture. Were they there the whole time? Did Ginny tell Hermione? And if so, how did they know where Ron and Harry were? You don't really even need a lead in, just a sentence of dialogue saying something like "Ginny just told me!" or something to that effect.
Other than that, amazing one-shot, really! Never before did I think a non romantic relationship could make my heart melt as much as a romantic one! Great job!Author's Response: Hey! Sorry I thought I had replyed to this! So glad you got it was supposed to be cute in a different way than romantic!
Hehehe I'm glad you liked that, I always thought that was stupid and so not Ron's idea (though for me Albus later does the same!). So glad I got Ron right, I was so worried about him!
Ooops, yeah at the start I think I said, Ginny and Harry split up to tell Ron and Hermione separately, then Hermione wanted to see Harry :) I should fix that, sorry about the confusion!
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Hey! I'm here with your review, as requested. (:
So this was incredibly adorable. I was smiling through more than half of it; Harry's nerves and Ron's reaction and Hermione being so maternal, aw. (:
At first I thought this was a Harry/Ron and then I realized that there *is* one ship that I'll never read. O.o But it wasn't! Which is good. (:
I loved, loved, loved the line "No destiny awaited them other than one of their own making." It's so Harry; I can hear him saying that exact thing.
Your characterization, I think, was spot-on. All three of them were brilliantly portrayed, and because of that this was a really believable story. I can see Harry asking her like that and Ron being nervous and "hating" living with Hermione and the whole thing played out in my head very nicely. (:
It flowed really well, there wasn't anything jarring that I noticed and it seemed to go really naturally.
A really cute one-shot, all in all. (:
-JasmineAuthor's Response: Hi! Thanks for this!
Awww thank you! Especially about the characters!Oh god, Harry/Ron, could you imagine? That is officially the worst!
I'm so glad you liked that! I know Harry isn't too overdramatic in his spoken language, but I thought a line like that wouldn't be too un-Harry at all!
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This fic just made me want to go "aah" when I finished reading it. I really like the moment that you show between the two friends. I think it is pretty much exactly what would happen when Harry would ask Ron to be best man. The thing with worrying about Ron's reaction was very good- I like how he didn't want Harry and Ginny living together. I think that it fits in with Ron's character well, as he has been known to react like that before- she is his little sister after all.
I liked that you did not dwell on the details of the engagement. By doing this, you ensured that the friendship between the two took centre stage.
It is very typical of Ron to worry about what it would do to his and Hermione's relationship, too, so I liked that. I also really liked Hermione's entrance. I think you showed a side of Hermione that we only get to see occasionally, yet you still ensure that she is not OOC.
From what I know from JKR interviews and HP Wiki, etc, you have also made sure that everyone is doing what JKR said they would be doing, which makes the story all the more believable.
There were a couple of typo's and grammatical mistakes, which I believe you are aware of...e.g. "most of him day; they were’nt worrying; therein peace; chocked," etc.
Apart from this, I can't see any problems. I think you did very good characterisation, the believability was good and the flow was excellent. A thoroughly enjoyable one-shot! :)
LeanneAuthor's Response: Hi! Thanks for this! I really hoped I woulld get Ron right! I didn't want for his reactions to seem OOC, and I'm glad that didn't happen! I'm glad you picked up on the focus I was trying to give Harry and Ron over the romance, I love Harry/Ginny so this was very hard, but important! Hehe that's the side of Hermione that made me love her from the start, but it is a side we don't see all the time!
Thanks for noticing my need to stay in canon! Also, so sorry about the spelling and grammar, how off putting! I'll be sure to edit! Thanks so much for everything :) Report Review
Awww! This is so sweet and so Ron! Hehe, it seems pretty close to canon and was another great one-shot! I feel like I'm getting repetative, but I don't have a one-shot of yours I don't like and this is no exception! Other than the formatting issues, particulairly with the quotation marks towards the second half of the fic, I really liked how you did this and am interested in seeing what else you'll do with them if you have another linked one-shot like this! :D
-AnnieAuthor's Response: Hi! Thanks very much! I owe you your review, dont worry I havnt forgotten! I'm glad you thought it was very Ron! Hopefully it was close to canon, so happy you enjoy this and the others (they're kind of all the same!). Ugh, apologies for the formatting! Thanks a million annie :D Report Review
i love it! i love when harry thinks about how ron means to me -- that's exactly what i wanted out of this challenge! very cute! a few grammatical/spelling/typing error, but nothing big.Author's Response: Hey! I'll be editing to get those things sorted in a while anyway. So glad this is what you wanted, I was so happy to write it! I'm glad you like it so much, thanks! :D Report Review
I found this really well written and it gave me a great big smile to start my day! I enjoyed the pace and the way you went back and forth in the narrative didn't feel ackward at all; it all flowed nicely.
The second half of the story was a bit aharder to read though. There are so many formatting mistakes (pieces of dialogue written without spacing; spacing between sentences in the wrong place; no spacing after a period and the beginning of a sentence...) you deinitly need to have a second look at it.
It is such a nice little moment, so well written and emotionnaly spot on, just check back the formatting and you will deinitly have a great, great story in your hands, Congrats!
AkussaAuthor's Response: Aww thak you!
Ugh so sorry about formatting, I seem to never get that right. I'll edit, don't worry!
Thanks so much for the thoughtful review! Report Review
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