OH MY GOD! They are the cutest couple EVER, even if they aren't technically real. But that is just a minor technicality. Anyway, you. Update. ASAP. Because this story has made me squeal and laugh and want to hit some people over the head. Yeah, it's that amazing! Report Review
Hi! I want to thank Mazblue for getting me seriously interested into this story with her take on the audio of it. She really brings Spencer to life, doesn't she? :)
ANYWAY! I've been following along with the audio and this story and I wanted you to know that I really enjoy it! I love how snarky Spencer is and how real you keep her as a teenage girl. I also like James and how he had to lie just to see her again. I think it would actually be kind of cool to get to see into James' life and see what his parents think about this whole thing, but I also understand that this story already has some story left for me to read in it lol ;).
I think my favorite character besides the obvious two is Spencer's dad. I love him so much! I would be Spencer's new step-mommy if that wouldn't mean her father was doing the same thing her mother was doing with Freddy ;). Is that stepping over boundaries? Oh well haha. Anyway, I just love how he's a Facebook stalker (something I take full pride in being) and he still pines over his ex-wife. He just seems, really out of all of the characters so far, the most real to me! Not that the others aren't awesome, but I think you know what I mean? :D He loves his daughter very much, but the real world gets in the way sometimes.
I love the obvious connection with this story and the real Wonderland...Well, the Wonderland that we all know of...because Wonderland isn't real... Or is it? DUN. DUN. DUN. And I think that you summed up how she felt about Platform Nine and Three Quarters being her Wonderland perfectly. I'm sure if she ever stumbled upon Hogwarts though, her opinion of which place was her Wonderland would change quickly. This is where I relate with this character however, because I honestly realize the importance of needing and wanting to have an amazing place to go back to and think about, even if you think it is just a dream. That's why I continuously re-read the Potter books. It's my own personal Wonderland!
Honestly, the only thing I think I do not like about this story, and it is so minor it is absolutely worth not mentioning, but I will anyway just so I seem like I'm doing my job as a reviewer... AHEM. I don't really like how Spencer is portrayed as five foot. I feel like every female character ever is short, assumably under the height of five foot two and I think it's because a lot of people have the image of this perfectly adorable, small girl being absolutely defenseless and fitting perfectly in the masculine man's arms. That's just a personal pet peeve of mine. Probably because I am a five foot eight girl who would love to read about stronger girls who can STILL get the guy, but yeah... ;)
Still loved the story though, and I'm not going to stop reading just because I have a thing against fun sized people. (I don't really, I just thought that would be fun to say...) You've done a great job so far and I really can't wait to finish catching up with the rest of it! Report Review
MY GAWD WOMAN, IS IT REALLY THAT HARD TO UPDATE?
but seriously, update soon before i cast a spell on this damn website for having so much control over my life. Report Review
I can't believe I never read this story before!
I've been putting it off for ages thinking that it's about a muggle so it's just going to be silly and stupid. But I love it!
It's completely hilarious! You've had me laughing out loud so much.
James is just amazing, and when I found out that her mum was going out with Freddy. You should have seen my face - it was the perfect O shape! And Robyn being a witch, I really didn't see that coming but it just fits in so well!
I can't wait to see how Harry's party goes and all the Spencer is going to get up to there.
I really can't wait to see what's going to happen next, and just incase I haven't mentioned this enough. I love it! Report Review
THANK GOD A CHAPTER I HAVENT REVIEWED.
I didnt think those existed.
OH MY GOSH JESS WHERE ARE YOU? EVERY SINGLE READER WHO HAS READ THIS BEAUTIFUL MASTERPIECE MISSES YOU AND WANTS YOU TO COME BACK BEFORE WE GO INSANE.
Er… I mean… Whats up? Hows it been going? PLEASE COME BACK I LOVE THIS STORY. I really hope you get time to update soon, because you have no idea how much I love this story. I need it back in my life!
and yes it goes to show you how much free time I have…
Please, dont laugh :P
Clea :) Report Review
JESS YOU HAVE TO UPDATE OR I WILL DIE!
Well, not die, but you know... I am just really anxious in my waiting for 18.
By the way, I think I love you... I mean, your story & your writing style, of course. ;)
Okay, I am done being creepy for today.
UPDATE SOON. (: Report Review
I am in love with this story! I really enjoyed the reaction that Spencer had to James's being a wizard. Keep writing any chance you get! Report Review
Oh gosh, gotta love Spence. She's all like 'so what? My boyfriend's a wizard, we sometimes go to the loo together and never come out. That's just how we roll.' And where's Freddy? My gorgeous Freddy! Jess, you must update soon! Not that I'm forcing you or anything, I actually don't have that power. I just really love this story, it's soo soo addicting! SO UPDATE SOON.
-VICKY! Report Review
Oooh, such a good start :D
I'll admit, I kind of groaned when I saw the first few lines in the first chapter -- another fic starting at the platform? SERIOUSLY?! -- but it was totally different. I always wondered why muggles didn't just fall through the barrier, so it worked really really well.
(so yes, I stopped groaning and started grinning, haha)
I think you've got a great handle on the writing aspect... just make sure you edit a little more carefully, because I caught a few grammar mistakes and missing commas. I'm sure those are just typos, though.
Characters: I think you developed Spencer's character well, but James is sort of... hmm. Well, we just don't know him well enough yet, other than the fact that he's really sweet and good looking. Which is fine for now, because Spencer just met him. And it's totally fine that Spencer already likes him, because she's basically just physically attracted to him, but be careful when/if she falls in LOVE with him. By that time, she and James both had to have gone through major character development.
Sorry, I just think that characters are a HUGE part of the plot/story. I'd be happy to help you with characters anytime you want. :)
I noticed you posted this as a novel... do you have intentions of stretching out their romance? Make sure you pace these things well, keeping readers intrigued for the entire story :)
I love the sarcastic humour you've got. It just seems to come naturally for you, with Spencer's somewhat dreamer/cunning/naive character.
The banner... it's really pretty, but it doesn't exactly fit the story's atmosphere :P I'd recommend looking for a banner with brighter colours, perhaps simpler? But that's not that important, haha.
Umm... basically, I really like what you've got so far. Keep going :D Report Review
FRED?! Um, what? Isn't Fred the same age as James? Or at least, that's the age he's usually portrayed. If he is, that is beyond disgusting and... arghhh. *shudders*
I have to admit, I laughed at the last two lines. XD
This is hilarious, keep going :D Report Review
HAHA! I laughed so hard in this chapter -- of course she would meet Fred in his underwear and get in a fight with him, and then get punished for attacking him, not to mention straddling him. NICE. ;)
I like how you wrote her thought process for recognizing the word "Gryffindor", that was well done :) So now she knows "Wonderland" is real. Ooh. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Update soon :) Report Review
I love this :) Spencer is probably one of the only crazy characters that I actually LIKE to read ;) I really like your writing style; it's very descriptive and gives a clear picture of what's going on, as well as having funny inner monologue/commentary. Great work! Report Review
HOW DID I FORGET TO REVIEW THIS CHAPTER? I'm so sorry. I loved it, I promise. I love how much word vomit comes out of Spencer and how James loves it and it's all just so fluffy and cuute!
She's getting closer to figuring it out, isn't she? Ah! Can't wait for more! :) Report Review
Hilarious chapter, as usual. I loved her rant, that was absolutely and utterly adorable. And James was just like... WHAT WAS THAT. So funny. And then her mom, and her dad, and Danny... oh, I love this story.
One thing I really really really want to see: that James likes Spencer just as much as she likes him. Because right now, there's an imbalance, and that never works well in a relationship :)
Yup. Anyway, I love the name Ned Knickerbocker. Kind of made my day.
Love you! Update soon ♥ Report Review
YES JAMES, YOU WORD-VOMIT ALL OVER HER!
... that sounded absolutely disgusting, I know...
I loved this chapter. I loved the google and Freddie and James' word-vomiting and how he actually really likes her and that's adorable and I was giggling throughout the entire thing.
Can't wait for moree ♥ Report Review
GAH I'M STILL GOING "AWWW" (EXCEPT A LOT MORE W'S BUT THIS REVIEW BOX WON'T LET ME DO THAT).
So. Freaking. Cute.
Loved this so much. Update soon! :) Report Review
Love you, love this chapter, do not love homework gotta go study BYE! Report Review
DUN DUN DUNNN. *claps hands*
Jess, as you already know, I loved it :D
NEXT NEXT NEXT ONE PLEASE! ♥ Report Review
I really like this story just please keep updating! I wasn't expecting him to tell her on purpose, but that's sort of sweet.
Please just keep updating.
As quickly as you can.
Thanks. Report Review
I love this, it's absolutely amazing. And I can't wait to read how the party goes, hopefully not too bad. Report Review
Jess! Guess who finally crawled out from under that rock labeled 'School' only realise you'd updated? (If you guessed me, you guessed right.) This was so good. I had totally forgotten how much I loved your James. And I swear, Spencer is my spirit animal. But I love that James has told her, and you wrote the whole scene really well. I can't wait to see what happens at Hogsmeade (talk about throwing Spencer in the deep end!) because I can just imagine her reactions to all the wonderful and whacky stuff they have in the Wizarding world. Ahh, Jess, it's been too long and I've missed you and your stories. Update soon! (And I swear I won't take so long to read and review next time!)
- Adele ^_^ Report Review
I love your story.
not enough positive adjectives to describe.
I'm really excited to find out what's gonna happen in Hogsmead so update as soon as you can pwetty please :D Report Review
So far I like this. I've seen your story every now and then a while back and I wanted to read it, and finally I got to. Well, the first chapter anyways. I really like it. You style of writing is very nice and it makes me happy, plus you took something interesting and made it super cute. I can't wait to continue reading. :) Report Review
This chapter made me happy like right when I read it a chorus of angels started singing in the background, a unicorn covered in daises appeared and took me on a ride and while I was sliding down a rainbow leading into a pot of gold/bacon/ice cream I decided this made me so happy it needs a review. So I not only like to thank god but Jesus for this grantastic story and hope you update soon. Ill be waiting *creeper smile* 10/10 would recommend Report Review
Please hurry with update! I have the patience of a fish and you totaly hooked me on this story! Report Review
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