UGH! You can't leave me hanging like that! This chapter was way too short! Who's David? What did he do to Lily? So many questions...not enough answers!

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AH I NEED AN UPDATE!! :D I freaking love this story!! :)

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Im feeding it! Haha. It's ok i understand why you took so long. because i hav exams too!:) I am dying to find out who David is! Come on! Just a little hint. A teeny weeny 1! please! If even Dom was being supportive then David is a really touching subject. Hunter and Lily remind me of two people. And those two people are Lily's grandparents! I just realized! Lily's the same as Lily! And even Hunter is like James!!! you obviously know which Lily and James I'm talking about. :)
RosalieHaleDiggory

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Aw, it was cute but no clue over who this mysterious David is, come on Emily I'm feeding the box now help me out and let out some info on 'David'.

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OMG new chapter ploxxx!
i think the mystery man david part is awesome is lily's supposed to be single and proud of it.
pls continue!

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Seems interesting. I definitely want to read more of it! Waiting to see who this mystery man is...old boyfriend? Best friend? Friend who betrayed? I can't wait! Don't keep me waiting!

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urgh! too short! please update soon.i love this story!!!

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srry, cudnt review, net crashed 4 A WEEK! nyways short chap but gud. i luv chocolate 2! im startin 2 lyk dark chocolate, nyways i think David is an old bf hu went bad (bf: bst frnd or boyfrnd). n Hunter is tru, Lily is all d things he said. btw shes in d 4th yr rite? cnt wait!
RosalieHaleDiggory

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Lily's in fifth year now, HUnter's in sixth. (there's only a year's diff between each of the siblings). As for who David is...that will be revealed much later...thanks for reviewing again! :D

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heehee, he snogged rose because her red hair reminds him of lily...

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Omg! Good story! Love the mystery man part since lily's upposed to be single and proud of it. Great work!

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I LOVE your story so far! please update soon!!!

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yay! Lily's on d quidditch team! awesum! i think its gud tht Irv broke his bac. ik its not nyc 2 say tht, but Lily gets 2 b on d team tht way! frm wht ive read n watched, havin a bf, is alot of drama buut hu am i 2 judge. btw doesnt Lily no tht ignoring a boy makes him only want u more? Mclaggen is such a brat. jus lyk his dad as Ron said. nyway so glad u updated!
RosalieHaleDigggory

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I think you need to add a lot more substance to your writing like more about Lilly's thoughts and more descriptions. The story already has a great plot but I think you can add a lot more to it if you put in the work. Its harder to read sometimes with so much choppy dialogue. I think it will hopefully get better with time.
-N.V.

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Its really good that she proved herself to her brothers

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Darn. I still find it so bloody absurd how I only read it now! Ah, busy lives.

Ha ha! I'm liking Lily by the chapter! If I was in her position, I would definitely act like her! Poor Hunter, so flatly rejected. And I grinned when I read the part when Max said, "You Potters and your Quidditch."

Grammar: Continuously great. Except for the tiniest of spelling mistakes - "Why does he have to but in?" should have an extra 't' in 'but'. But that's really tiny so it's not very important.

And hey, is Max's dad Oliver Wood? I'm too lazy to look back at the other chapters for her surname *looking sheepish*. It came to me when she mentioned Puddlemere United.

Update soon! Make Albus as Max out! :D

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you pointed out my grammatical errors...it helps in further chaps. Oliver Wood is Max's dad, so good guess.
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ahghahahahaha, lily is my kinda girl. and shes almost exactly like ginny

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i bet dey wud definitely win if Lily was in deir team but James n Al wnt allow hr. god it so annoying havin evn 1 protective bro. but poor Lily has 2 hav 2. i feel so srry 4 hr ik wat its lyk 2 hav a big bro n believe me, its no picnic. :) cnt wait 4 mur! srry i was l8 in reviewing.
RosalieHaleDiggory

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loved it :D
no questions~

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Cute story. Check spelling on 'know it all' you missed the K in know . Well done on the story. Kinda feel sorry for Hunter : )

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Hey,hey! :D

I was the first to review *happy dance* and I find it absurd how I only read this NOW. Bloody fantastic ;D

I really love how Dominique is a mean bitch, how Max and Albus have a 'thing' going on, how Hunter sniffed Rose and how Lily is dealing with it all.

Yeah, she is a bit bitter. But it's good, because its being realistic to the character and her background (ie. Youngest in the family and whatnot).

Grammar is still good :) paragraphs are brilliant, but a little too spaced out. That's not really important though, so it's alright.

I love how the story is going and I hope you update soon!!!

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great love it add more it seem interesting about the foil between lily and dom

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wow Rose snogging Hunter? dats kinda a surprise. n Dom is gonna kill hr! poor Lily i understand wat its lyk bein d youngest so i can imagine wat she's goin thru. im a bit sad dat ur not goin 2 rite 4 sum tym, but its ok.:D

Author's Response: Thing is I'm out of town, so it's a little hard to write chapters. but i promise as soon as i'm back that i'll post a chapter on.

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I like it its a good story but I think Lily is a bit bitter actually she's a good character but she seems bitter maybe you could get her to lighten up a bit?

Author's Response: Well yes, Lily is bitter. Being the youngest in her family, with two older brothers had forced her to adapt to situations, thus, her bitter attitude. In many ways, she's like Ginny. But she will lighten up. I'll make sure of it. Keep reviewing!

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THIs is so goood! keep writingg (:

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I like it so far. Chapters are not very long though.

Author's Response: I will work on making them longer. The story is just starting, so chapters might be small. Keep reviewing!

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