Reading Reviews for Picking Up the Pieces
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Review #1, by AeroFerrarro shattered.

6th January 2014:
Such an amazing story! Favorite times 100

Author's Response: Oh gosh, I can't even read this anymore because of how cringeworthy it is... I'm glad you liked it though! And thank you so much for reviewing :)

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Review #2, by shoveitsunshine shattered.

2nd June 2012:
I really liked this! It's not really the most original of premises, but I did like the first person narrative, and how we were able to see and feel Rose's acute pain through her own eyes. I thought the metaphors about the sky were interesting and it was nice how Scorpius fell for her first- usually it's the other was around. Also, Rose saying, "I... love you?" was freaking adorable. Great job!

Author's Response: I do agree this probably isn't the most original of premises. When I wrote this story I knew it wouldn't be but I figured I'd try to make it as original as possible. Anyways, I'm so glad you liked how I portrayed Rose's emotions and I'm happy you liked reading this! When I wrote the part where Rose told Scorp she loved him I squealed a bit, so you're not alone in thinking it was adorable :)

Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #3, by the_edge_of_love shattered.

30th June 2011:
I've read this story a while ago and I have to say it has made quite an impression to me.
(Sorry for not reviewing earlier, btw, I had many things to say but no mood to actually write them:/)
I believe that the way it is written is the most special thing about it. The first person narrative is an excellent fit here; Rose's thoughts are raw and honest and real; and you manage to describe them perfectly.
In addition, I feel like I have to tell you that this is the first story I read in fanfiction that I didn't like because of the RoseScorpius storyline but because of its theme and the way it was written. You have a way to describe emotions that makes your reader able to feel them. I can totally understand Rose in this story, I can see why she's so broken, how she thinks she can't be fixed, and of course how she can't understand she's in love with Scorpius until she loses him.
It's perfect overall- I would post here some of my favorite lines but I'd have to post the entire story.
Amazing- don't change a thing; I've seen you got a negative review but I believe that the story is good the way it is; no corrections or changes needed.

Author's Response: I don't know really how to respond, because I just find it so amazing how you liked my writing. But I'm going to try to make this response understandable, because in my head I have a million jumbled thoughts, none of them making much sense.

When I started writing the one shot, I was going back and forth between making Rose in first person. I like first person, but second person is my favorite to write in, so it was quite the predicament. But then I thought that it should be first person, and she should be speaking to Scorpius, because it could almost be like her telling him the story of how they met and everything she was thinking. For all you know, as she's telling this story, she could be an old grandmother sitting on the porch with old Scorp, and they could just be recounting their tale.

I'm happy you can really understand Rose. I was actually going through a pretty emotional time when I wrote it, and I thought for a while that I was broken just like her. I think its safe to say though, that that happens to everyone (hopefully or else I'm just a nutter).

I hardly think this story is as perfect as you say, but probably all writers think that way, because they've had to deal with their story and the intricacies of writing it and once it's over, they're kind of done with it as well (although could just be me again). It still feels amazing to hear and I really appreciate your review.

I'll try not to change anything in the story, although sometimes I do read certain parts and cringe at the wording, but I'll let it go for now because I don't know how I'd change it anyways :)

Thank you for a lovely lovely review!

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Review #4, by Maddie shattered.

28th June 2011:
Wow, that was a great piece of writing! I felt all the emotions rose was feeling and I connected to her really well. The descriptions you wrote for the skies were brilliant metaphors, and the last bit about finally having a third column was definitely my favourite part because it was just so damn sweet! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so so much!

It's amazing to hear that you liked my style of writing and everything, because my oneshots are the parts of my writing that worry me the most, seeing as they have some of my scariest thoughts incorporated into them!

I'm glad you liked Rose's character. I was wondering if maybe it was a bit too different of a Scorose story then people are used to, because Rose was just so messed up and twisted in her way of thinking.

The sky parts were my favorite to write and the column part was the one thing I had in my head before I started writing the one shot. I just knew it had to end that way so its good you liked it!

Thank you for the amazing review!

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Review #5, by k Toor shattered.

24th June 2011:
I absolutely loved this one-shot.It's incredibly cute and very well written. all the description of how rose was feeling, amazing! Looking forward to read more of your work!
P.S. I hope you update the Turning the Tables story soon!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much!

I'm ecstatic you liked my writing. This one shot I was actually really happy with when I finished it, because it had a happy ending :)

I put the next chappie of Turning the Tables into the queue three or four days ago, so it should be out any day now (fingers crossed it's not rejected)!


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Review #6, by McKayla shattered.

16th June 2011:
I loved it! it was very emotionally searing and AMAZINGLY well written.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

You don't know how much it means to me to hear that you liked my style of writing. It was probably one of the hardest things I had to write, because I actually had to pick at my own insecurities and draw from my experiences in order to get the character down pat. I tend to be really insecure when it comes to my one shots because they're some of my deepest and most personal thoughts, so it's great that you liked it!


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Review #7, by baletgir shattered.

18th April 2011:
That was a really nice read. I really liked it. I am a bit confused as to what the numbers were. mini-chapters? I do think you need some separation between each part, but the numbers don't seem like the right choice. So obviously Rose was the girl and Scor was the guy she ended up with, but I would love to know who she was with originally. And I would also love to know more about that relationship, why did he break it off, was it really as awful as she described it or was she just bitter? But to include these I think you would have to expand at least into a short story. This is currently even a bit long for a one-shot, so you may want to consider breaking it up into chapters for a short story.
Good Job!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Yes maybe numbers were not the best way to separate everything, I was so tired of how I always separated things with *'s so I wrote out the numbers instead. I might go back and edit that.

I didn't give much information as to who the guy was originally because I wanted the reader to kind of come up with their own ideas about the guy and what he did. I have my own idea of what a guy could do that would break my heart the most, but I want the reader to imagine it's their worst nightmare happening to them, not mine.

I do agree it could've been better if I had developed him more as a main character and I'll probably go back and add in a scene about him, I just have to figure out where to fit it.

Thank you for your helpful review! I really appreciate it :)

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