Well, sorry, but the first thing I noticed about this story was multiple spelling and grammar mistakes. You should definitely go back and try to fix a lot of those. Also, at one point you switched from first person to third and it was very confusing The actual story seems good. I liked how all of the characters seemed to each have their own personality and not like you just threw them in there. Good job! Report Review
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