Vert cute story! :) Nicely done :)Author's Response: thanks! glad you liked it! Report Review
YAY, LEE! I finally got around to reading this, and I'm so glad I did.
It was so cute and really adorable. I loved Maddie's character. She was very original and unique, and I was already in love with Albus nearly half way through. You characterized him awesomely, and I liked that he was very good friends with Scorpius rather than mortal enemies.
This was a really good one-shot. It wasn't one of those that has little going on in them and is mainly just insight on a matter and such. It had a lot of depth going on within it and with all of the characters, with Al, Maddie, Lily, and Scorpius. It was very nice, and I loved it so much! You write a nice Albus. ;)
It was awesome, Lee! :)
DrueAuthor's Response: YAY! DRUE!!! I'm glad you did too!!
I'm glad that you enjoyed it and that you liked her. Hehe, and glad that you liked Al as well. Yeah, I just see them being friends for some reason. XD
Thanks Drue, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And I'm glad that you like my Al! I quite partial to him myself :P
AWW, THAT WAS SO CUTE.
I admit, I had lost hope when Lily said that Albus liked Kendra, and when she was sitting there drowning herself in ice cream, but then Albus came in and I was like YAY! HOPE! I think all girls have been in a situation where we're not feeling very pretty and we've lost all hope that "The Guy" will never notice us. So we can relate very easily to Maddie. I like that she isn't perfect, and that she doesn't look like some goddess. She's kind of spunky, too. I can appreciate some spunk in an OC, especially when paired with Albus.
This was an adorable little one-shot. I like Maddie's voice, and your characterization of her and Albus both. This was really fun to read. I adore that this had a happy ending.
:)Author's Response: hey Sarah! I'm glad that you enjoyed it! hehe. yes, I believe that is sometime all girls feel at least one time in their life and I'm glad people are able to relate to Maddie that way. it's what I was aiming for. hehe, I'm glad that you like her and that you enjoyed this. hehe, yes. I love happy endings. I don't think I have it in me to write a sad one :P thanks so much for the lovely review! Report Review
Hi this is Kristen from TGS! :) I just wanted to drop by again and check out this new one-shot of yours. I thought it looked pretty interesting, and I'm glad I had the chance to read it.
I thought this was a really sweet one-shot. I was practically smiling through the whole thing! I had a feeling that Lily was wrong about Albus liking Kendra just because of the way he had been acting beforehand around Maddie. I'm actually glad I was right. This was really enjoyable and a wonderful thing to read at the end of a relaxing day. :)
Some of the sentences were confusing for me to read, but I caught the meaning of them after thinking about it for a few seconds. And this really had the potential to become cliche, but I think you put your own spin on it that truly made it work!
Overall, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for posting it! :)Author's Response: hey Kristen! good to see you again ;) Hehe, I'm very glad that you enjoyed it. and yes, I had to do a happy ending. I can't seem to do sad ones for the life of me. :P Hmm, I'll got back and read it again to fix that. And I'm very happy it didn't become cliche since that is something I always try to avoid. :)
thanks so much for reviewing!
This may just be the most sweetest, enjoyable one shot of an Albus/Oc I have ever read. I'm a sucker for this ship and I think you portrayed it perfectly. Albus was so sweet and stubborn at the end as he tried to find out what was wrong with Maddie. And Maddie was a fresh of air, I liked how she wasn't perfect nor was she crazy either. Just a normal girl. I loved how they got together in the end, I think I would have screamed if this one shot didn't have a happy ending, though It would be interesting to have a full on story with them, I think it would be sweet.
There was one typo I picked up on 'Scorpois'. It's where Maddie in introducing the group when they are going to meet up.
Other than that, it was perfect and I really enjoyed it.Author's Response: Awww! Thank you! I'm glad that you liked how I portrayed Albus and I'm really glad that you liked Maddie. Hehe, yes I myself am a sucker for happy endings. I don't think I have it in me to write a sad ending. :P And as I was writing it I did think about expanding it into a short story or something but decided against it in the end. Though I doubt this is the last time I'm going to write a story with these two. ;)
Really? Grr. That's what my word program was trying to change it to the entire time. Guess it got one on me. Stupid thing. Thanks for pointing it out, I'll go fix that now.
Aww, thank you! I'm glad you liked it and thanks so much for the lovely review! Report Review
Keep writing please! Its awesome . :)Author's Response: aw! thank you! I may write a story involving the two someday, but I don't know yet. I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for reviewing! Report Review
Wow really good!!!
10/10Author's Response: thanks! I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
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