I loved this so far! It's really fantastic! It's great! really well written!Author's Response: Thanks! glad you like it, the next chapter is written so I should be getting it up soon :) Report Review
This has the potential to really be a great story. I love it so far, so please update soon.
Just a few corrections, however, nothing serious just spelling mistakes. I've noticed a few times that when you've meant to write "the" or "her" you've instead written "he". Just something to watch out for in the future to improve your writing. I'll be checking back regularly for updates, so don't disappoint! :DAuthor's Response: Glad you like it so far :D
Thanks for the corrections too :) I actually have the edited chapters lying around somewhere but I haven't gotten them up yet so I'll check for those just in case :)
I do promise to update soon...ish, but I'm participating in Nano this year so it could be a while, or at least until some time late in December... though maybe I'll be able to get my act together sooner :D Report Review
This story is fantastic, I love it!
It's really gripping, and I didn't expect the prisoner to be Astoria Greengrass, that's a clever twist as there must be complications in store for Hermione far as her relationship with Draco is concerned!
I also love the 'Ludicrous Patent Office'! :)
Can't wait to read more!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad the little Astoria twist went well, it'll defnately cause complications, though hopefully those will be pretty twisty too :)
While I'd love to take credit for the Ludicrous Patent Office it actually did come from the books.
The next chapter (as long as school doesn't get crazy) should be up soon :) Report Review
i really loved ur story! cant wait for the next chapter :)Author's Response: Thank you! Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon, right after a few of my other stories are updated, but still soon :) Report Review
I love this.
The way you write Draco is wonderful, I can't wait to read more!
:)Author's Response: Thank you! Draco is definately a fun one to write - he's just got so many layers! The next vhapter is in validation now so it should be up soon :) Report Review
I thought this was lovely! I didn't have the imoression you used too much detail, so you don't have to worry about that. On the contrairy I thought it added to the story, in a way that I couldn't do since I love dialogue so much! I think it's great that you take the time to describe the details and it emphasises the story developpement. I could see it going on, and imagine it perfectly, so that was great, and it wasn't overflowing either, I've read storied where there are so many details I can't finish reading because it tires me, this was just the right amount though! I also have to say, I think both your Hermione characterisation and your Draco characterisation were perfect. ron and Harry where very believable too, though I'm not sure why but Ginny seems a little off, i couldn't pinpoint the exact reason though, sorry, I just felt I needed to point it out. Your plot seems very interesting, and i'll most likely be reading the rest, I'm quite curious as to what happens next! Quite a good story!
~LunarLuna of SlytherinAuthor's Response: Yay! not oo much detail! Thanks so much for the lovely review. Good to know the characterization was good. Personally I think I need to add a bit more fire to Ginny, so maybe that's what was off. Hope you read on :) and thanks again! Report Review
Err...hm, hm... I mean... Hey, Ramona from the forums here!
Some things I'd like to point out:
It's Lucius, not Locious.
aboutgetting - space here.
''he’s been known to get… exited about certain things I wouldn’t necessarily agree with.'' - You mean 'excited', I guess.
Well, this was really much to read... but I can't say I regret a thing. I liked the story. I really enjoyed it. It was really well written, with much description and all. The beginning wit Draco was well thought, although I don't get why where the Aurors after them from the very beginning... I guess I might find out in a new chapter. There will be one, won't it?;)
9/10 for now.
~RamonaAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review :) and for reading the lengthy chapter, sorry about that. And thankyou for the spelling/punctuation notes, I'll edit that ASAP. As far as a new chapter I'm working on it but it's all on paper right now so I have to type it up. But thankyou so much :) Report Review
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