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Review #1, by Kristina Convincing Potter and the Weasel

26th April 2011:
Keep on with this story, please! I think you write very well, and I am usually rather picky. Good work :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I will try to update soon. :)

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Review #2, by Hyenni The Confession

25th April 2011:
Hyenni101 from the forums here! Prepare yourself, it's going to be a long one!

first off, i love stories with Draco, and Harry and Ron, when done well, are brilliant. so this story looks promising! onwards with critique!

grammar: this was, on the most part, flawless. there are just the odd few sentences here and there which might need a little reworking :D
"Under no other circumstances than what had brought him there on this night would the wizard dare ask anything of the one he was seeking." this sounds a little bit clumsy. maybe try something more like "if it weren't for the circumstances he now found himself in, he would never have asked anything of the wizard he now sought." Or something along those lines :D

characterisation: Draco is nicely written so far. Obviously, it's only a short chapter, so i can't really comment much on how the characters have been developed, but I can comment on how close they are to canon.
Draco is clearly the main character, and I think his unwillingness to ask Harry for help is very, very like him, so congrats! I just think if you dragged out in the introduction a little more - perhaps delved more into the Malfoy psyche, it might just make the story flow a little more.
Harry is alright - clearly, it's incredibly difficult to get the Boy Who Lived exactly right, because he's JKR's main focus, but i think you've done a decent job here. I think the way he's more interested in what Draco has to say than letting Ron and Draco bicker is what he would do, so well done! Just perhaps a little more description would really bring the characters to life.

flow: this flowed rather nicely, without anything too sudden, and the description you have done is nice. i just think perhaps a little bit more description would just finish this first chapter off nicely - it'll bring the characters more to life, let the reader get closer to Draco, and just let us experience it more clearly.

areas of concern: i've already addressed your concerns, so i'll just reiterate: lovely characterisation, just a little more description would add nicely to it and just let it flow a little bit more :D

a good start, and welcome back to the world of fanfics! feel free to re-request when you put up the next chapter! ^^

apologies for how long this review got, sorry! O.o

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for taking the time to review my story. I'm glad you think Draco was done well as I was very skeptical about him and thanks for catching my awkward sentences as well. Will attempt to do more with descriptions in the next chapter.

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Review #3, by electricfeel The Confession

19th April 2011:
Hi electricfeel here with your review.

Wow, what a cliffhanger! This was a very short, sharp chapter that grabbed my attention from the very first sentence. It's an interesting premise, to throw two enemies back together after so many years. I especially like how you have Draco, who is probably a more proud character than Harry, being the one asking for help.

Yet, despite the seriousness within this story, there were still a few moments that had me smiling. The lines after Draco asks for help especially. I can see that you're mixing humour throughout your writing and although this is a short snippet of things to come, I think it works.

One thing I would say, however, is that it is short. Personally, I think it works to set up your story, but I wouldn't advise it in following chapters.

That being said, I did enjoy this. It's an interesting premise like I said, and it has certainly piqued my interest. Feel free to request again :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review. I was really skeptical about the chapter because I haven't written in a while, so thank you for the input. I'm glad you liked the premise, the bits of humor and I will try and make the future chapters longer to include more. Thanks again. :)

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