First off I'd like to say that I enjoyed reading this story from someone else's POV. We usually see Ginny described through the eyes of one of the characters we already know, that are in canon. But it seems some authors often forget that she had classmates too. She was younger than Harry and the Trio, so it's always nice to read something from her own year. Kudos for that :)
I would also like to point out that in my humble opinion Ginny Weasley is behaving in a way that she never would in canon. I sincerely cannot see her hitting one someone else this shamelessly. I don't think this one shot is stupid, but I do believe you should work on Ginny's characterization a bit more. Maybe if you could keep the scene when she wants to give John something for him to remember her to the kiss only? It would make a lot more sense and be closer to how she is portrayed in the books. Even if she was described as a girl who lots of boys fancied, we were never given the impression that she would give herself this freely to them.
House Cup 2011, End of an Era Review Extravaganza
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House: GryffindorAuthor's Response: Thanks for the great review! And yeah. I just wanted to post a little bit of it, and then go back later and rewrite it and clean it up and make how I portrayed Ginny to be better. I just haven't gotten around to redoing it. Report Review
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