I love this story. All three of the tales so far are just precious :). I like your idea, and the thread that ties them all together of when they think to themselves that they've fallen.
I like the characterization of both of them, its weird seeing Scorpius as quieter than Rose, and Rose as the more forward of the two.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
My favourite line was definitely "then I pounced on him."Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you liked it. I always like having little recurring things through my stories, like you say I kind of think it pulls them together.
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AHHH THIS IS MY FAVORITE ONE.
I am a sucker for Sco/Rose, and I think you wrote this magnificently. I like that you made her a Slytherin, and not Morality Queen. Also this line made me laugh:
but in just a few weeks of his company my Potions grades had risen from a P to an E, something I had never achieved without cheating before.
I like Scorpius as the quiet boy. Your characterization of him is really fitting, I think. We all enjoy the snarky, witty Scorpius; but your Scorpius is actually more realistic. Since his father had been shamed by the wizarding world, his family blacked out by society for their involvement with Death Eaters (or so we can all assume), I think the Malfoys would have wanted to keep their heads down and maintain a low profile. After so much ostracism and family shame, it is definitely the most likely that Scorpius would turn out intelligent but quiet, preferring solitude and not depending on anyone else for company.
I also like that you had Rose as the more forward one, the go-getter who sees what she wants and just goes for it. But my favorite part of the whole thing was the very last part:
And as we made out by the lake, the sun setting behind us to make the most romantic moment in my entire life, I realised that Scorpius was very gently cradling my head to make sure it wasn't banged against the tree we were sat against.
Bam, I thought dizzily. Rose Weasley, you just fell.
That was such a sweet touch. :) This was an adorable chapter. I was really, really rooting for that kiss to happen.
:DAuthor's Response: Ohmygod, thanks so much! I've never tried writing a Rose and Scorpius so different to what people expect before, so I was kind of worried how people would react to it, but like you I just think they are a lot more realistic this way. I adore writing ScoRose, and this was the most fin I've had in a long time. Up next, Scorpius' POV! Thanks for the favourite quotes thing, too, that's ace, I love hearing specifically what people like XD Report Review
THAT IS SO FLUFFY, I WANNA DIE.
You really are a talented writer. I could see everything quite vividly, and I could feel all of Teddy's nervous anxiety and hope and everything was painted just perfectly. And the way that they kissed! I adore it. It's like Teddy just couldn't wait anymore and he had to be put out of his misery. IT WAS JUST SO DARN CUTE.
I love fluffy next-gen stories. They always feel fluffier and happier than any other era, because we don't know what happens in their futures. Anything can happen. In my book, they all grow very old and none of them die young (the reason why I can't bear to read James/Lily), and the author has a lot of freedom for what kind of characterization they want. And I think your characterization of Teddy and Victoire is just spot-on. They're older now, but there is still a sweetness to them, and still an innocence to Victoire, and I am shipping this pair quite fervently right now.
:)Author's Response: Hehe, I'm glad you liked it XD I love writing fluff, and while I originally intended for this story to be more deep and meaningful, I certainly wasn't upset when it turned out sweet instead. I'm glad you liked my characters - I'm really trying to break them out of their molds a bit in this story, make them into more realistic and fun people. Thanks for revieiwng! Report Review
Hi, there! Sorry it's taking me so long to finally come around with your review prizes. I wasn't sure which story to choose, and I'm really glad I'm starting off with this one because it just seems so cute and fluffy!
I like how Victoire is portrayed. She isn't ultra-sophisticated or snobbish. She's very normal, and also very realistic for her age. Often I will read about 15-year-old's who speak and act like women in their thirties, and it's just not realistic. She has a naivety to her, and a buoyant optimism, that leaves me feeling cheerful.
Also, I adore the fact that Teddy was hesitant to kiss her, and that he wasn't enraptured with her or anything, like he sometimes is in other fics. This was a really heartwarming little piece of Weasley history, and I'm really excited to read more!
:)Author's Response: I'm glad you liked Victoire. To be honest, at fifteen, nobody is sophiticated or extremely witty or breathtakingly beautiful. it was fun to write a fifteen year old who was just like me; somebody I would want to be friends with, just 'cus she's a bit silly and essentially nothing special. I'm glad you liked Teddy as well, again I just think it's unrealistic that a guy would be jumping to make out with a much younger girl he'd known all his life - he's just indulging her, really. That said, he will eventually figure out they're perfect for each other.
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REALLY good so far :) keep up the good work :D xAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. Keep an eye out for the next chapter XD Report Review
You absolutely have to update this!!!
10/10Author's Response: Ha, I'm glad you liked it XD I'm having a little trouble with the next chapter, but it shouldn't be too long.
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do I really need to say anything at this point? you already know...
ok, saying it anyway,
Absolutely adorable!!! I kinda thought Rose would make a pretty good Slytherin, people always write her sarcastic, outgoing etc... And it totally makes sense to put her in Slytherin! I also love how you made Scorpious a lot more reserved, his father was either always annoying or really quiet, so he must have gotten the quiet part of the genes :) I can't wait for you to update!! please do soon!! (puppy eyes) lol :)Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying loads of different writing styles in this fic, and I'm glad they all seem to be going down equally well! The next chap will be from Scorp's POV, I'm having a little trouble finding his voice but when I do the chapter will be up straight away XD
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I'm absolutely loving this!! Ahh!! lol sooo so good! I can't even pick out a favorite part because I like it all so much :D
great jobAuthor's Response: Aww, thanks! Report Review
aw...esome!! lol ( i thought the play on words fit best lol ) You wrote this so well! Great job!Author's Response: Ha, very good, I love play-on words XD I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
an interesting depiction of rose... but i liked it all the same. Slytherin, huh. this quiet, gentle but kind version of scorpius is one of my absolute favourites as it tends to contradict all the things you'd assume Draco malfoy's son to be. anyway another fantastic chapter, i really enjoyed it, can't WAIT for the next one, but i will *grudgingly*. Are we still going to get a POV form scorp? even though this one kind of gave us a teaser? i hope so, please! *puppy dog eyes and pouty puppy lips* (I can't do that in real life so i love writing, hehehe) thank-you for writing this.
~ WW ~ ;) & :PAuthor's Response: I'm glad you liked my Slytherin Rose XD I wasn't quite sure about writing her, but I had a lot of fun with it nonetheless. And yeah, next chap will be from Scorp's POV, just sort of going deeper into this, probably talking a bit about his relationship with his father, blah blah blah.
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Aah!!! Yay, chapter 2! everything i'd hoped for and more! it was really wonderful, i particularly liked the non-cliche that he hadn't loved her all along and was only then realising it bugt just fell in love with her then, because to be honest i don't believe that's how it works in real life. nice to know it's going to be one per next-gen chara, cos that means lots of them! Yay!!! Now i'm off to read chap 3 (arh, two at once, this day just got awesome!)Author's Response: Thanks! I really enjoyed writing this, 'cus like you say I thought it was a more real depiction of how life and love work, which is always fun to work with. Hope you enjoy the next hcpater! Report Review
i love this story. the way each of them fall in love is so adorable :D up-date soon :)Author's Response: Thanks! There's plenty more to come XD Report Review
thats grt!!i like the way u described scor and i like the way vic is tooo mostly its like she s akready beautiful and all .keep ploughing!!Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it :D Report Review
This is great! Who is the next chapter about?Author's Response: The next one is Scorpius, basically telling his side of this chapter, and then it'll go on probably to Dom or James - I can't decide which one yet XD
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I love romance! and love how you put Rose into Slytherin i havent read any other stories that have done that, its a refreshing change. This is so cute! i can imagine it as a sltytherin love story, when before I could never imagine a Slytherin falling in love wierd isnt it? ennyways im probably boring you with mypeattling please update fast, im excited for the next one!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I realised I'd never read a Slytherin love story before really either, and neither had I seen a Slytherin Rose, and since I didn't really have any ideas for anything else I thought, why not give it a shot. I also put some elemnts of 'Catch 22' in there, which you'd recognise if you've read it (if you haven't, do - it's beyond amazing), just to see what different ways of writing would go with these characters. Alll in all it was really fun to write!
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OH my lordy lord this is ahmazing!! I am in love with this story! cant wait to see who/what you do next!Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much! I love getting good feedback :D
I actaully just put the next chapter in the queue! It's a little rough but I had to take advantage of the wonderful hour-long queue, so look forwards to that very soon!
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it was good. but if this was the time when james caught them, how come you didn't put that in?? that would have been funny! : )Author's Response: How weird is it that I totally forgot to write James in?! i'm such an idiot, I had that in my plans and everything... thanks for reminding me! I'm gonna revise this once I get all the chapters out, most of which are already in draft form, so that's something to look forwards to, at least XD
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I really like this! When's the next chapter up?Author's Response: Ha, lol, I've already posted two more chapters since you wrote this review XD
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AH! sooo good its the first victorie/teddy story ive read and i really like it please tell me this isnt a one shot because i neeed to know more!!!Author's Response: You'll get Teddy's views on it next chapter, but besides that I'm afraid I'm moving on to the next pairing :(
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this was really good, i was just brousing (is that how its spelt? i fon't think so but oh well) next gen romance fanfics and this popped up. i like the concept that you're going to cover all/most of the next gen charas love lives in a collection of short stories. any idea how many short stories per person? anyway i really liked it, it was light, fun and entertaining/enjoyable to read. i have a feeling it will only improve as it goes on as well, so yay! also i love your depiction of Vic, too often is she portrayed as a cosmetics-loving, supermodel-like popular girl who has all the boys trailing after her. i don't think Teddy would ever go for a girl liek that.
congrats, and please update!Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! It's going to be a chapter per character, describing the exact moment they knew they were in love, but for pairing such as Vic/Teddy obviously there will be two chapters. I'm not aiming for anything too heavy here - just something fun I can write to take my mind off exam stress, etc. Look out for the next chapter - it's Teddy's POV!
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