Oh crap what happened to Ron?! Please update soon I wanna know what happens next. (: Report Review
Please finish your book off its so good.Author's Response: Thanks so much, dracos lover. I just haven't had the motivation or enough interest in the HP world in the past while to do so.I'm sorry. Thank you so much for reading. Report Review
I like your story it's fun to readAuthor's Response: thank you so much! Report Review
Good chapter. I like the newer, softer version of Draco.Author's Response: Thank you! And who doesn't like a Draco with a soft side? :-) xx Report Review
I'm glad that Draco and Hermione are finally talking. If you don't mind a little constructive criticism, the tenses are a bit off in the beginning.
'Though Hermione knew she could have went along with Harry and become an Auror like him easily, she had felt like shifting her occupational and educational goals in a different direction: Hermione had wanted to spend her life learning, and so had become a researcher who studied the dynamics and history of the relationship between Muggles and wizards, how they interacted with each other, how they perceived each other, and even what they unconsciously dreamed about each other.'
For one this is an incredibly long sentence, it should be broken up a bit. You tend to use had a lot - she had felt, she had wanted. Does that mean she doesn't want to anymore? That sentence can be shortened and broken into two by feeling the tenses the same.
You state that she wanted to drive a car to live life to the fullest, yet she's a sad workaholic who doesn't seem to have any friends and spends her nights in the library. She seems stuck in a period of depression and self-pitying. She broke up with Ron, she says he can't accept it, but she doesn't seem to be doing that so well herself.Author's Response: I don't mind constructive criticism at all! I have a rather imperfect writing style that I am okay with, that I sometimes like even if it is grammatically incorrect. Thank you though! :)
Hermione does -try- to live life to the fullest through the little things, however the break up was a major negative event that wasn't necessarily what she had wanted..Just because she did it, doesn't mean she really wanted it truly...I guess you shall see! Thank you! xx Report Review
Nice chapter, if a bit short. I would have liked to see more about the wedding and perhaps a bit of her interactions with the other Weasleys. We don't know much about break up yet, so I can't wait to read more about it. I didn't like her moping so much, perhaps she should have told Ginny she couldn't do it instead of moping about the wedding.Author's Response: Thank you for the review!
We shall see what will occur, won't we?
Haha, and some of the other chapters are way too long, >_< :P
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This was creepy
I will be around waiting for you to think of a good way to say... The end.
back to collage myself also, write when you need a break, trust me, it helpsAuthor's Response: I think I will be more tired this semester, I just started another part-time job >_< But I will write the ending someday, and thanks for the tip! Thanks for your continual support :) xx Report Review
No, no, no, no, NO! That is evil in it's purest form! What a cliffhanger! Still, excellently written and fully enjoyable. :) xAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, :D
An awesome review :) xx Report Review
Haha just a head's up, but it's spelled "Avada Kedavra". :P
Anyways, this chapter did, in fact, make me tear up a bit. :') I'm glad all the intense stuff is over, and they've defeated Cavalian...
And I like how you put off Draco noticing Hermione wasn't there until later. (I mean, I did realize there was something wrong before he did, but that's because I'm the reader XD). It really showed how determined he was to defeat Cavalian and save everybody, and that was his priority over everything else.
And Cavalian's screeching about love...Somehow that reminded me of Bellatrix...And the part where Draco jumped in front of Hermione to block the spell...that was perfect. :) Cavalian's shock really showed that he had no idea of those kinds of feelings...
Haha overall, a satisfying chapter, I can't wait for an epilogue! :DAuthor's Response: Woops, I will go and fix that right after this reply, thank you!
Thank you for your kind words! This chapter was pretty difficult to write, in addition to it getting erased one or two times due to extraneous events. I had the chapter summary all written out, but executing the writing of the details and emotions was pretty hard for me, and I lacked motivation so! To be honest, I think the Draco not noticing Hermione and his foggy awareness of the events was a bit of a stretch, like it wasn't written so well that it -really- fit the events occurring in the scene, but oh well... I still don't think it's good enough, but your nice words and support for this story is very nice. Thank you so much for sticking it through with this story! You are awesome! xx Report Review
In PPP Rons voice. Wow!Author's Response: I'm sorry, I don't know what you mean by "In PPP Rons voice." But if the "Wow!" is a compliment to the story, then thank you! Report Review
I just read the rest of this story and it was flawless! Kind of like criminal minds, but in the Wizarding world. Loved the story, you are a fantastic writer! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Omg, thank you for the continued support, I hope you loved the story! I've never seen Criminal Minds, but if it's famous and good, then I don't mind the comparison. :P
Thank you so much!! xx Report Review
I love all of Draco's teasing! How do you come up with this genius? It captures Hermione and Draco perfectly! 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: From the wonderful writers of HPFF, they are very inspiring and influential! Thank you so much, Cassie! :-) xx Report Review
MERLINS PANTS THAT WAS FREAKING AMAZING. Just wow. I applaud you. Best dramione fic i've read in a while. Read it all in one sitting and I am just speechless. Wow.Author's Response: Wow, that comment has me smiling from ear to ear! Thank you so much Emma! I really appreciate you reading and reviewing my fic like that, and I am super glad that you really liked it! Thank you so much!! :D xx Report Review
Nice chapter! I like how you gradually introduce us to new characters. 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Thank you so much, Cassie! Hope you like the rest of the chapters! :)
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I have seriously missed the story! This chapter was so intense and amazing, I'm just awestruck about what just happened! Please update whenever you can! I will be waiting anxiously to read the epilouge. Brilliant job!! :DAuthor's Response: Wow, thank you so much, Spaz!! And for your continued support! :D
Was it that amazing? lol. Maybe I read the beginning too many times so it's just okay to me lol. Thank so much, hope the epilogue won't let you down! xx Report Review
Gahh!! Such a good ending. You've done an incredible job with this story. Can't wait to read the epilogue but figured I'd let you know you still have dedicated readers out there. You've got a talent, don't waste it. I'm right there with you though, starting 2nd semester of "sophomore" year of college and I know how hard it can be to find time to write. Let me tell you this though, squeeze in 5 minutes here or 10 minutes there between classes. You'll be amazed at what you can write even if it's bullet points to expand on later. It's relaxing and distracting. Not nearly as stressful or time consuming as sitting down to write it all at once. I do it all the time during school and it helps. I feel that they're far better written that way as well. ANYWAYS, the story was amazing. You have done a wonderful job. Keep it up. :)
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Thank you so much for continuing reading, and for the good tips. I usually just hang out with my friends and do homework between classes, but I will find time eventually to write the ending. I'm just not motivated enough, ._. Haha. Thank you so much!! Hope I won't let you down with the epilogue!! xx Report Review
That was a really good first chapter! I like your descriptions, and the chapter title. I always have a hard time with those. 10/10
Cassie :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! Whether it's an essay for school or a chapter of fanfiction, I like to think of the title after writing the piece, because then I can just summarize the chapter or think of a good word that describes the central theme or mood of the story.
Thank you so much! :) Report Review
ok i love this story but really it's been a month i check everyday and you haven't posted the next chapter it better be the awesome but then again u haven't disapointed me yet. PLEASE i'm begging u write another chapter asap:) your readers love the story and can't wait another second well i can't anyway. keep writing:)Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! I know I keep saying I'll post the next chapter but I've really been busy with life. I have college finals next week, and I don't want to make any promises that I can't fulfill (like I've been doing), but I'll try to work on the next chapter.I'll write a sticky-note and put it on my desktop! Thank you so much for the nice words and for being a fan! Report Review
Okay, seriously... NEED that last chapter, hun! youre killin' me over here! LOL great work! :)Author's Response: Thank you so much! Last chapter? I've been thinking about if it will be the last chapter...
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amazing, amazing, amazing
please please please write moreAuthor's Response: Will do, thank you thank you thank you! Report Review
Can't wait till the last chappter...Author's Response: Thank you so much :) Report Review
I really really like your writing. You want me to read more and more and not stop. You definitely have my attention.
Good job! Keep writing! Never give up!Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much! Positive reviews from fans definitely motivate me to continue writing. Again, thanks so much and I hope you continue reading until the end, and that I don't disappoint! Report Review
I love it! It is filled with so much emotion! Keep up the good work!Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try! Report Review
First of all, I can totally see the resemblance between your story and Lady Malfoy :) But you, of course have your own ideas, I can just see the mood and the basic plot in there. Don't worry, I'm not disappointed at all, and lots of authors are influenced by works they read and incorporate some elements of them in. :D I do that too.
But your story. At the beginning, I was mostly scanning, because it was more like a descriptive writing story, which I totally love reading, but sometimes when I read fanfiction I just get to hurried in trying to find the Dramione to pay attention at the beginning, even if the writing is super professional and classic-y. So when I find time, I will definitely go back and reread and get all the little details in. :)
Your story's emotional landscape has been really unique in my mind. It's been influencing me a lot since I started reading...to the point that I couldn't play happy songs today when I was practicing violin. XD And that's a good thing! It means the mood is extremely prominent.
The plot and your ideas are very well developed, and I'm so caught up in the story and Ron's possession. (Despite the fact that I suspected it at the beginning :P) Although I think it would be quite nice if you had more than one chapter after this. :D
I also loved reading about the Dramione. It was a very well crafted one, except it's just too common that Draco's already "changed" at the beginning of the story. Maybe you could work on that a bit. But otherwise, I love how slowly their attraction builds (I hate it when stories don't have that, it doesn't represent a true Dramione) and how Hermione kept comforting herself by saying "It doesn't have to mean anything." I think that was a key element, that they both denied the attraction in front of each other because they thought it wasn't mutual. (And of course, that led to a lot of problems like in this chapter, when Hermione wanders into Ananya's part of the house).
Also, I really think you deserve far more reviews and favorites than you already have (I LOVELOVELOVELOVE the story more than you can imagine), so I'm just going to say these few suggestions to get more! First thing is to maybe get a better banner from TDA (no offense! D:) because when banners aren't professional compared to the other ones on HPFF, you get less readers...Second thing is maybe to edit the beginning more. Like in Lady Malfoy, the author wrote a hook, where the story locked you in and couldn't get you to stop reading (when Hermione must go live with Draco). You need one of those!! I saw that your beginning was very rambly and like I said, very descriptive, so I was only skimming and looking for the Dramione XD A hook will keep readers reading even though you have the descriptions. :) But of course, I recommend you cut down on those mostly in the first few chapters too. I persevered to read until the end because I saw the resemblance to Lady Malfoy and that is one of my absolute favorites on HPFF :D So yeah. And maybe just enhance your summary a bit :)
Trust me, your story is AMAZING. And one of the best I've ever read. Don't ever worry about us not liking your story. You just need to find more ways to get more readers (esp. patient ones!) :) I'm on the edge of my seat (literally!) waiting for your next update, I'M SO EXCITED TO READ MOREE :DDAuthor's Response: WHOA. That is seriously the longest review I've ever had on this story/HPFF, lol. I appreciate it greatly!! I really appreciate your suggestions but I don't feel like I can incorporate/change too much, because I have issues with the idea that if people give me suggestions, I don't feel like I can credit the story as totally mine. Haha, sorry, I have a lot of anxiety/ocd issues, but I really do appreciate your suggestions! I do agree that there are problems within the first few chapters - I've read them many times over, and it is a bit boring - you're right, too many descriptions. Maybe one day in the right frame of mind (I have far too many issues lol -_-), I can successfully change them and un-boring-ize it haha.
I know, Lady Malfoy was the first, or one of the first stories I read on HPFF, and it was that story that got me back into writing fanfiction (I'd stopped writing fanfiction back in high school).
Your review is seriously greatly appreciated - it made me laugh and smile. :) And it makes me super smiley to hear such great compliments as the one you gave.
I know people have waited on my last chapter :/ I started it a long time ago, but never got to finish it, and there were complications where it got erased (My computer had a virus, and twice I forgot to save it before my boyfriend erased my computer's stuff to fix it). However, I did get back into writing it a few days ago when a faithful reviewer left me an awesome comment. It's taking a while because of my lack of concentration and because...I want it to be good. I don't want to just write something that's crappy. I feel like I've lost my flair and I don't want to let my readers read something that's bad. So it's taking a while. But I promise, one day it will be posted.
thanks so much Laura!! Report Review
Please put me out of my misery and post the final chapter. You wrote the rest of the story in like 3 months and it's been nearly 4 since you last updated. I LOVE this story, i've read it like 3 times and it kills me that you haven't posted the final chapter. I need to know what happens! Every chapter has been really well written, and I have truly enjoyed seeing Draco in this light. So, I ask you 1 more time... PLEASE POST THE FINAL CHAPTER!Author's Response: Wow! That is such a compliment to know that you've read this 3 times! I know, I've been a bad author and not updated. Life has been pretty busy for me, I'm in my second year of college and work part-time...I'm sorry!! I know I gotta finish writing that last chapter, but complications came up with the first version of the partially written chapter - it got erased...and it was difficult finding motivation to write it again. I had lost my whole outline as well. And then with the second version I started writing, it got erased too... Sorry!! I need to get around to writing it - I promise, I will some day. Maybe during school break. Once again, I'm super sorry. Your misery will end some day! Thank you so much for your continued support! Report Review
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