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Review #1, by nott theodore In Azkaban

12th July 2014:
Hi again, Rachel!

Once again, this was a beautiful piece of writing! I've always loved your writing and your writing style so it was lovely to get the chance to read this - you managed to write something which was much darker but really powerful too!

I loved the way that you managed to capture the atmosphere in Azkaban. It was so chilling to read all of the ways that you explored the different senses and appealed to my sense of touch and sound and sight. It was really brilliant the way that you managed to keep building up the atmosphere and write something that was so chilling! You made me really think about Azkaban and the unfairness of it as a prison, which is really powerful and impressive considering this piece was just 500 words long. It must be so terrible to be kept in a place that's impossible to escape from and somewhere so utterly devoid of hope. This was beautifully chilling and horrible but brilliant at the same time!

Sian :)
Gryffindor House Cup 2014 Review

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Review #2, by randomwriter In Azkaban

10th July 2014:
House Cup 2014 Review

Hello again :) Sick of me yet? Haha. Too bad!

This was such a dark and powerful one-shot. Your writing is absolutely marvelous! The more I read your work, the more I am in awe of your talent. This stuff just keeps getting better and better!

I love how you focused on each of the senses and thoughts. For 500 words, you did an incredible job! You took me on a sensory journey, building up the story with various chilling sights, sounds, thoughts, etc. The chills just kept building up as your described each element. You did a great job though, of truly showing us what it would feel like to be trapped in such an existence for eternity, not knowing how long you have. Knowing that escape is impossible, maybe one would choose death? It's a terrible life to lead anyway, but there is no option. One must keep it up. I would list out lines that made an impact, but I'm afraid there aren't enough characters left for me quote your entire story. I love it so much and every sentence, every word added another layer to it. Fantastic writing! :)

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Review #3, by Pretense Of Perfection In Azkaban

9th July 2014:
Hello there!!

Wow, what a dark and powerful story. It's very intense, and I really liked how you managed to incorporate the first paragraph through the rest of the story by describing what your MC sees, smells, hears, and feels. I think my favorite part was the line in the beginning, where the MC talks about the screams from the insane, the dying, and possibly even the dead, inferring that the torture of the prison doesn't ever stop, even in death. I imagine Azkaban to be a bleak and desolate place with no hope or light, and you managed to convey that to your readers perfectly. I maybe would've liked to see the dementors take a more prominent role, as they are essentially what makes Azkaban so terrible, in my mind at least. But overall I completely and totally loved it. The emotions you brought out were raw and real, and I felt like it could've been me sitting in one of those cells. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, and the pace was perfect.

---house cup 2014 review---
pretense of perfection, gryffindor

Author's Response: I definitely think that we see Azkaban differently, and I think you had a good point about the Dementors. Unfortunately, this one-shot was so short that there really wasn't room to put them in here! I could have expanded on this story a lot, I think.

I appreciate your review! Thanks for stopping by!

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Review #4, by slytherinchica08 In Azkaban

18th January 2013:
I loved how you wrote this, each paragraph with the same style and structure to it. It really spoke to me like that and really made this stand out from anything else I have read of yours. There is description and yet not, there is a story and yet not, there is action and yet not. Now by this I'm not meaning that you're lacking description or any of the other things, what I mean to say by that is that while there are all these elements to your story they are told in such a simple and very stylistic way. I really enjoyed this oneshot! Great Job!


Author's Response: This is still one of my favorite one-shots on my page, even after all this time, and I'm so pleased that you enjoyed it so much, too. :) It's extremely different from basically everything else around it, and I really like that; it's not something that usually comes out when I sit down to write something, but I'm pretty proud of it!

Your reviews never, ever fail to make me smile. ♥ Thank you so much for them!

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Review #5, by BKL8008 In Azkaban

30th April 2012:
Well, here it is, review #400. A milestone? And you get it. This is a marvelous piece. One can just see it all around, and every word does indeed count. The description in so few words brings the Azkaban experience into stark imagery, almost as if one can now close his/her eyes and see it. 10/10 for this masterful piece.

Author's Response: I am very flattered that I was your 400th review -- thank you so much! :) I have a fond spot in my heart for this one-shot, mostly because it was the first story I attempted this challenge with, and I remember writing it quite well, despite the fact that it's been a year or so now.

I am really pleased with the way this came out. And I'm so glad you enjoyed it, too! I've really got to thank you for what an amazing reviewer you've been to me over the past few months. It really gives me such a confidence boost to see you returning. :) Definitely hope to hear from you again, and once more, thank you!

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Review #6, by NaidatheRavenclaw In Azkaban

11th August 2011:
Wow, this was great! I'm in awe at the way you wrote this. The emotions and imagery in this was incredible. You really took me and put me in Azkaban. For a 500 word story, you managed to really make me feel fear, and death, and sorrow. I'm honestly amazed. I can't even find a typo to critique XD I think you did a wonderful job of portraying how Azkaban would feel, and why it's such a terrible place. Great job!
-NaidatheRavenclaw, Ravenclaw

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the unexpected and kind review! I am really glad you liked the story, those 500-word pieces are always a lot of fun to write.

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Review #7, by trent In Azkaban

23rd July 2011:
oooh god.. really great fic with so dramatic atmosphere that you begin to feel that! thank you author for your job. well done))

I also wanna to ask would you mind terribly if i translate this fic into Russian and publish it on HogwartsNet website? I will state everywhere that I am just a translator and you are the author of the fic.Unfortunately, i dont know how to connect with you so this was the only way)

Author's Response: I'm not very comfortable with this idea, unfortunately, and am going to have to say no. :( Sorry for the late response -- I haven't had Internet access lately -- but I hope you understand.

Thank you for the review!

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Review #8, by Debo13 In Azkaban

27th May 2011:
Wow. This is some of the most beautiful writing that I have seen on this entire site. In 500 words you are able to catch every aspect of what I always imagined Azkaban to be like. You said things that I had thought of but never as able to put the words to it. In other words, you characterized how Azkaban would feel, not just look, smell etc.

This is excellent work. Now that I've read this I'll definitely be looking at some of the other work you have to offer! 10/10

Author's Response: Wow -- thank you so much for such a beautiful review. :3 It really made my day to wake up to this! Thank you!!!

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Review #9, by SaphireSmiles In Azkaban

11th May 2011:
Wow. This is like poetry.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much. Seriously - this just made my day. I am so glad you liked it. :)

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Review #10, by slytherangoddess In Azkaban

13th April 2011:
Wow. I love the sensory imagry that you convey in this fic. I think what really makes it relatable and physical for the reader is the symmetry between each of the first 4 paragraphs. With each one you name one of the 5 senses (minus taste cuz that would be gross lol ) and that really helps me as the reader focus on that portion of the body. With the smells and sounds i could actually imagine what the smells and sounds would be like because of the level of detail...
It was great that you could portray such amazing detail in only 500 words and I commend you emmensely for that :D


Author's Response: This was the result of a caffeine-induced 2-in-the-morning writing spree, and for all that I am glad of its result. :P I agree - not much to taste, except for salt air and... bile? Blegh. There is only 500 words in which to convey things, and taste, I feel, was duly left out! :D

Thank you so much for leaving such a lovely review!

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Review #11, by SeverusSnape15 In Azkaban

7th April 2011:
REALLY interesting. Good job on this :3

Author's Response: Thanks so much, this piece just about ran out of my fingers on its own. :D I'm glad you liked it!

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Review #12, by Toujours Padfoot In Azkaban

6th April 2011:

I hate you right now.

Angry face.


Argh! I was SO going to write an Azkaban-themed one-shot for your challenge! But since this one-shot blows anything I could have written right out of the water, my idea sounds very pathetic right now. Boo.

Your imagery is just.agh. I want to throw mud pies at you because I am so jealous. Like this part:

The bitter salty brine of the ocean, snaking up the outer walls so far from your own prison, and wrapping itself in your senses, reappearing each time you think you've found respite.

I am so green. So green right now. It's just not fair.

If you do not channel your talent into some writing-related career, I am going to do something drastic! Like bake a dozen cookies and then throw them away! Not that anyone would want to eat them, anyway, because I always burn everything. But there you have it.

I tell you, for such a short one-shot, this packs a lot of power. Could you humor me in saying who you imagine the prisoner to be? I am curious. XD

I like how the lines start off with "The --- are many, but they are none of them --- one wishes to ---." It keeps a steady rhythm to it, and it has this hypnotic, relaxing quality to it because I can hear the crashing of the sea against rock and the loud, wailing screams and it's just...gahh.

Stop writing.

You're not allowed.

Alright. You're allowed. But put little disclaimers in your summaries that everyone who reads your stuff is going to start second-guessing their own writing and feel a sudden urge to go delete all their stories because they feel all grrr.


And I would do the little heart symbol thing, but it would just delete it, so pretend it's there! :D

Author's Response: PLEASE write me an Azkaban one-shot!!! I absolutely adore your work and if you do not write it, I shall be THOROUGHLY MIFFED. And I shall do something nasty. Like give Sirius and Scorp-o wet willies.


I do not understand your jealousy, though, because I took a lot of inspiration from your style in "Silhouettes" when writing this. :D So truly, you are jealous of YOURSELF! Ponder that with some tea for a moment.

*pondering time ensues*

As for the prisoner... at first I imagined it to be Sirius, but then it grew into something more hopeless than I ever pictured Sirius to be in Azkaban. Then it turned into a sort of nameless Death Eater, but I couldn't imagine one of them feeling quite like that. So I imagine him/her as a sort of OC - unknown to me, in fact nameless to me.

IF I CAN'T WRITE YOU CAN'T WRITE EITHER. So there. *squish* Thank you for the sweetest review I've recieved since... the one you left me on 'The Wedding'. :)

*heart symbol*

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Review #13, by gingersnape In Azkaban

4th April 2011:
Hello dearie, tis MOI here from zee swap, and I decided to review this one becuse it's short and unloved, so VOILA! Je suis ici! (I can hardly think in English today, so pardon my French! :P)

So, this was amazing because it was so consise yet so powerful and I loved every word... all 500 of 'em! :) It was creepy yet beautiful and really just wonderfu! I have been stalking reading some of the entries for this and I really love them all, but your has to be one of my new favorites because it is really something else! :)

Have a great day twinny, (and sorry this is so short! I can't think of anything else to say other than :O You rocked this!)

Author's Response: Bahaha! I just love your French. :D Thank you SO much for coming by and reviewing this! It's definitely one of the darkest things I've written, if not THE darkest, so I am so, so, so, so glad you liked it!!! :D You're so sweet.

Have a lovely day, my twin! *squish* I love you, and thank you so much for the lovely review!

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Review #14, by Aether In Azkaban

4th April 2011:
Beautiful one-shot. I love how you never identify what the prisoner has done wrong, and how you instead capitalize on the sensations of being in prison. At first, I was a little skeptical about that - wouldn't the prisoner feel guilt or remorse? But I ended up liking how you made that unimportant - the despair and horror drowns out any other more human feelings. It also makes it easier for the reader (the "you" - I also loved the second person) to connect to the one-shot. Great writing! 10/10 :)


Author's Response: Thank you for your lovely review! I actually had no prisoner in mind in writing this, so I suppose it's just as well. :D Azkaban is a place of such hopelessness and despair, I don't see how much guilt or remorse could help you out there, anyway.

Thanks so much! I'm so very glad you enjoyed it!

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Review #15, by Aiedail In Azkaban

4th April 2011:
oooh this gave me major goosebumps! i love the way that you manipulated the accepted verb/subject/object/modifier order in the repeated sentences of the first three paragraphs; it set a sort of smooth and even stage, propelling me forward into the next sentence. i love that you use verbs sparingly; the lack of action in the majority of the piece sort of reflects the place itself that you describe. the tone is perfectly monotonous, though not uninteresting. you put things the way that they are, without sugar-coating them, and yet they seem too blasť to be true, almost. but when you push past the barrier that the mind sets up for us for protection, it just sort of hits you. things you can read of a hundred times are actually things that would drive you, and people much better and stronger than you, absolutely mad.
i thought that the last sentence sort of culminated all the straight-lined sentences like a dark black period. it was nice, and shocking in its way, although you sort of knew it was coming. and it's ironic that all of what you describe in the earlier paragraphs--all 498 other words--lead up to that, to nothing. that you can spend 498 words talking about something to have its summary be nothing. it's chilly, and brittle, but dense all at once.
i don't need to tell you how skilled you are at this, but i will anyways. all of your stories are touching and, that really sets them apart from so many other things that one could be reading.
well done, jane! :)

Author's Response: Goosebumps?! That's awesome! :D Writing this piece was very different for me, as it kind of broke all my usual style and tossed the pieces out of the window. As it were. :D I'm very, very, very glad (and relieved, to be honest) to hear that you liked it!

You're so sweet, Lily. Thank you so much. :) *squish*

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