This is a great start! I can't wait to see where this goes!Author's Response: You just made my day. Thanks so much!! Report Review
this is so funny and unlike anything ive ever read here before! please update soon because im dying to read the next chapter!!!Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much!! I'm working my butt up to it! So it might be up real soon next year! :)) Thanks for the review again! It made my day! :) Report Review
So I like this idea, but there are a few things you could do to improve the story. One thing would be to stay in the same tense. I prefer past tense, myself, and I think that's what most authors use. It's a lot less confusing if you pick one and stick to it. Another thing is to make Kara a little bit more interesting. Does she have friends? If no, get her some, because that makes her boring. You can have friends but still be unsure of yourself. What's her family like? Siblings at Hogwarts? What's her personality like? Please, please don't make her boring. She can be sweet or quirky or something and still be unconfident. Lastly, keep it real. Kara and the Marauders should not be on super extreme opposite ends of the ego spectrum. They still have to be likable. Other than these things, the story is pretty good. Happy holidays! xo - CatAuthor's Response: Wow, thank goodness you've pointed that out! I've been dying to have someone tell me how the chapter's like! :) Well, anyways, thank you so much!! I'll keep those in mind! And yeah, I'll work up on Kara's personality. Heh. Thanks again and yes, Happy Holidays!! :)) Report Review
This story's so funny!! I loved it XD
I can't to see what's going to happen next and how they're going to manage to teach her.
Please update as soon as you can.Author's Response: Aw, thanks. I'm working on the next chapter and probably upload it sooner! Thanks for the review, really. I'm sorta losing the will to update this chapter so this review urged me to go on with it! :) Report Review
Ooh...an interesting premise. I'm looking forward to seeing where this is going.Author's Response: Yeah, stay tuned!! Thanks for being an awesome person and you reviewed!!!
Oh my. I think I'm going crazy. ;) Report Review
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