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Review #1, by EnigmaticEyes16 Of Tacos and Firemen

15th October 2015:

I honestly don't even remember how I came across this story, but I saw the title and I was hooked. I had to read it! Because it has tacos and firemen, and that's amazing! Also, Pansy in the muggle world. I just HAVE to see that!

The beginning is a bit confusing. I'm not quite sure what's going on. At first I thought maybe they were just coming out of the war, but then Pansy returns to the house she shares with Marcus, which I don't think she would since she'd only be 17 maybe 18 leaving Hogwarts, and Marcus wouldn't be there anyway, since he graduated two years or so before at least.

And it does seem kind of random that Pansy would just pack up and leave, give up magic and everything. Especially considering she's a pureblood and has never not had magic in her life. But I suppose if she was really upset over losing Marcus, it could happen.

I did really enjoy the ending though with the fireman, that was so cute that he came back to take them out to dinner. And I feel bad for Pansy for trying to make it on her own and kind of failing, at least this one night, and hope she decides to give the muggle world a second chance.

This was a sweet little one-shot and I very much enjoyed reading it!


Author's Response: Thanks for the review :) I kinda wrote this in a hurry and so the quality sort of reflects it and I know there are a ton of plot holes. I really need to go back and rewrite this so that it makes more sense.

Thanks again for reviewing


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Review #2, by notreallyblonde44 cont Of Tacos and Firemen

5th October 2015:
My review got cut off, so I'm here to finish it as a guest, SORRY

Example: Pansy’s “No” -needs periods after o. Comma example: your original sentence: It wasn’t a very strong one and actually a simple stunning spell however it was expertly cast by none other than Harry Potter. The sentence with commas: It wasn’t a very strong one, actually a simple stunning spell, however it was expertly cast by none other than Harry Potter. Notice the difference in pausing and how commas help break up the sentence and mimic speaking breaks?

I’m happy the fireman was a cutie, and nice person and wants to take Pansy and her son out to dinner. It’s really sweet, and she’s due for some kindness and support!! It seems like the Muggle world could work out for her, and I totally understand her guilt for “betraying” Marcus, but I hope she allows herself to be loved again. Everyone deserves that :)

xx Ellie
~pit october review swap buddy~

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Review #3, by notreallyblonde44 Of Tacos and Firemen

5th October 2015:
Hi MCG, here again for another review :) M TACOS!

AW :( Her husband died and she pregnant and she felt like she had to leave the magical world, which is honestly a very smart idea/move on her part! IDK why Texas, but she definitely needed to get out if everyone she knows and loves is being hunted down or something (for things they may or may not have done)….Yup you build up the reader’s sympathy really well here with all these details and, if I was her, I was want to poof too.

Sad they never got tacos in the end...I love tacos. They are glorious. Poor Pansy, she really gets drained by life here. Being a single mother and then setting her house/food on fire while trying to survive in the Muggle world. The premise of this story makes me wonder if anyone ever visited her or wanted to make sure she was surviving? Just a though on my end, but knowing how the pureblood world may work post-war makes me think that’s unlikely.

Some things I noticed:
‘Of course latefr I was foud innocent of all the charges that were placed on me and was released.’ – spelling errors: later and found. I have to note that while Pansy may have forgotten what these charges were, I think it’s important for the reader to know what they are. Without knowing the full setup of the story, it doesn’t make a lot of sense that Harry’s coming up to attack them in, what I assume is broad daylight, without a known cause and killed Marcus, but Pansy was charged?

There are a few times that your writing/clarity is hindered by punctuation errors, mainly missing commas and periods between sentences. Without these little details some of the pacing because confusing or distracting. These are very minor things that a Beta reader could catch if need be :)

Example: Pansy’s “No”

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Review #4, by TreacleTart Of Tacos and Firemen

6th September 2015:
Hi Tasha,

I'm here for our review swap!

I have to admitt that I was drawn to this story by the title. Anything involving food and I'm there. Particularly tacos. Yum.

I thought it was really interesting to see Marcus Flint paired with Pansy Parkinson. I don't think I've ever seen anyone do that before, but in a way it makes sense.

I was a little vague on why exactly Marcus got killed. I mean I understand that he was protecting Pansy from a curse, but why was Harry shooting curses at them to begin with. And then if Harry was the one that accidentally killed Marcus, why would Pansy need to be cleared of charges at all?

I giggled loudly when I found out that Pansy would be moving to Texas. (I actually wrote a story myself where she moves to Los Angeles). I just can't picture a prim and proper woman like Pansy moving to Texas.

The idea of her giving up magic was an interesting one. I wish you would've explored it in just a bit more depth because it seems like such a drastic move to make for someone like her.

Mmm...Tacos. I agree fried taco shells are a billion times better than baked taco shells. Poor Pansy. It just all seems to go downhill so fast. She just wants to make dinner, but everything is going wrong. There was one thing in this section that I couldn't move past, so I just have to ask...Guacamole with mayonnaise in it? Never in my life have I heard of or seen such a thing. Is this common? Is this a Tex-Mex sort of thing?

Anyway, I was glad to see that the handsome fireman saved Pansy from being interrogated and was pleasantly surprised when he showed up at her house to take her out to dinner. After everything she's been through, I'm sort of rooting for her to have a happy ending.

I always try to leave just a small bit of constructive criticism, so here's mine. I thought this came across a bit rushed. While I think the plot is unique and quite funny, I'd love to get a bit more of the story. I think adding a bit more detail throughout would make the story richer and slow it down a bit as well.

All in all, I thought this was enjoyable. I certainly chuckled a couple of times throughout.

Good job!


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Review #5, by love_is_magic_ Of Tacos and Firemen

7th March 2014:
Back yet again! This one looks like it promises to be a little bit more cheery! At least, if the title is any indication.

Okay, so I think I was right in deeming this one to be cheerier! Aside from the beginning, that is. You do have a really great way of showing the loss of somebody close to you, especially when it's a life partner. The little bit about her being pregnant was really the straw that broke the camels back for me, though. How heartbreaking. At least she gets a little piece of Marcus, though!

Okay, so there were a few typos, but those are easily fixed by yourself or with the help of a beta if you ever felt like going back and editing.

I really enjoyed reading this one and was so impressed at the diversity you showed in your writing of different genres. This one was definitely a break from your others and was done very well!


Gryffindor vs. Slytherin Blackout Battle 13/15

Author's Response: Hi! Sorry it took so long to respond but thanks for reviewing :). Thanks for saying I have a way with writing loss...I'm still trying to figure out how as other than devastating break ups I've never really lost anyone close to me but for some reason I can write about loss and depressing topics but have an issue with writing happy stuff so if I ever write anything longer than a one-shot it will be interesting to see if i can manage to write fluff... as far as the typos go I'll have to see about finding a beta and/or finding the time to go back and edit.

thanks again

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Review #6, by anythingcouldhappen Of Tacos and Firemen

7th March 2014:
Hi! Reviewing this for Blackout Bingo :)

This was adorable! I mean I can't stand Pansy usually, but here I just found myself laughing at her mishaps! Starting a fire by cooking tacos and holding Alex and trying to do dishes? Well if you're going to start a fire, that's the way to do it I suppose.

And of course, instead of thinking about the damage immediately, she thinks of the cute fireman in front of her. Well why not? He sounded rather dreamy. It makes sense also, because I imagine you might be a little in shock after an incident such as that! It was good though that you had her getting upset a little later, when she had to walk in and see her destroyed kitchen with no food. I like that she was concerned over feeding Alex! And then the end, when Christopher comes--that was great! Made me smile definitely. he best part was when Pansy was thinking maybe the muggle world wasn't so bad. That's kind of completely out of character for her, but considering the nature of this story, it was great!

I think the one thing you might do to improve this is expand the beginning a little. It all goes by kind of quickly.

Great job!


Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! this was something simply thrown together because of something that happened on the forums and not my best but i'm glad you liked it.

Thanks again for the review and I'm sorry it took so long to respond.


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Review #7, by luvinpadfoot Of Tacos and Firemen

29th June 2012:
Aw, this was cute. I liked the realism of Pansy and how she mourned for Marcus while moving on. It was very sweet. =) And the taco thing made me laugh!

Author's Response: AWWW Thanks! :) This was the first time i've tried to write anything funny. If you've read my other fics you might have noticed they tend to be darker so this was interesting to write. I'm glad you liked it :)

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