NOOO!!! Don't stop writing this story! I love it too much!!! Pretty please with a cherry on top?
Great Quidditch practice. Gwen's is just great, the way she was happy to get beaten up by Bludgers. I like the way Fox treats her like a real trainee, not some weak woman (I already love him, but now he gets bonus points). Also, I'm glad you didn't make it boring and have her do perfectly on her first try. I have to say I'm very impressed by the way you avoids cliches.
Please update! Keep writing! I love this amazing story! Report Review
The Fox is just my favorite kind of character :D I bet he's an awesome, but strict teacher. Love the whole 'common enemy' thing. Polio, so sad. But I think it is a good idea. I am glad it's not the cliche/boring Quidditch accident.
Gwen, once again, has managed to convince people to do what she wants (I love her!). She's really good at that. Cunning and all. I really picture her as a Slytherin. Except without the whole 'evil' house image... She's such a spitfire. Going to take the Quidditch world by storm, of course. She's a great character :) Report Review
I just love Gwen's letter. Such a great apology. And she's so stubborn. The bit at the end about him being a practical man was just brilliant. I can definitely see how she's as conniving as the politicians in her family. She seems like a sly Slytherin to me. Or perhaps a gutsy Gryffindor. I don't think you mentioned which house she was in...
"The Fox" is such a great name for a Quidditch player. I'm excited to see how he reacts to being asked to train a woman. (and agree with Upton on the nepotism point)
I like Gwen's wand description. It's so her! (of course) I like that it is a male wood. Very fitting. Report Review
Great first chapter :) I love Gwen's character. She's fiesty. I couldn't resist looking her up and I can't wait to see how you do that.
I also like the way you incorporated muggle history. I definitely think it would have affected wizards and so I'm glad you didn't leave it out.
I was in stitches just thinking about your description of women's Quidditch. No wonder Gwen hates it. Sidesaddle on brooms (that just sounds difficult) and no beaters or seekers (sounds boring). I can't wait for her to play real Quidditch :) Report Review
I always hate it when people say "You can't do so-and-so" right after you do it. Obviously, you did, so what are they going to do about it? Definitely sympathizing with Gwen here! :)
I loved learning about Gwen's wand, and thought it seemed to match her personality very while! A little spitfire - I like that description. :) And a male wood... but of course, she doesn't seem ordinary!
She does seem very well prepared and everything has been thought out for her plan. A smart girl indeed! I wonder what house she was in? (I'm leaning towards Gryffindor, because of her passion, but also Ravenclaw with her logic. Heh, sorry, I just love sorting characters! :D) Glad she didn't back down, even in her letter.
Upton really seems to love her. Lucky girl! ;) I'm excited to meet Fox and to read the rest of this story! It really is fabulous and original, unlike anything else I've read!
Unfortunately... I can't think of who Upton's based off of. Drat! I'll have to get back to you on that one. Excellent job!Author's Response: I found a website that talked about wand materials, and I was like Oh, this is perfect for Nepotism! I had to include it. I'm glad you liked that bit too.
I actually don't know what house Gwen was in... I should probably figure that out. I need to get my muse back for this story! Report Review
Oh, I like Gwen very much! :) I love her fiery personality and how she isn't afraid to speak her mind.
Women's Quidditch sounds positively awful. Dresses? Sitting sidesaddle? No Beaters or Seekers? Horrible!
Monkeys on brooms. Heh. ;) Interesting mental image there!
I don't like Wallace very much. Wouldn't want to get hurt... pah.
I'm excited to read the rest of the story. You've done an excellent job at setting the plot up and drawing me in. Great job! :)Author's Response: Thank you! I had so much fun researching this era. I'm really excited to get to work history into Nepotism, and I adore the characters. I'm glad you do too! Report Review
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