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Review #1, by Cleopatraa The Head Girl

10th September 2012:
Such an interesting idea to make Bellatrix the first Slytherin head after Riddle. I thought you really wrote this well. You have a nice writing style. The characterization was perfect in my opinion. I thought the way you portrayed was really nice. I liked the fact that Snape was the only one who dared to ask her name and her reaction to him ( especially the part about his hair). Itís nice she was 7 years older the only thing I did notice she didnít have any reaction about Sirius not being a Slytherin you would think that would be one of the things she would think about seeing he disgraced the Black family. Next to that I liked the parts when she was thinking about Slytherin. I always felt that a house was perhaps a bit more important for Slytherins. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thank you!
I am really glad you thought that, Bellatrix is one of my favourite character and I really wanted to do justice to her.
I did actually have that. This was going to be a short story but when I came back to the site I didn't know where I was going with it and deleted the last 300 words which lead onto the next chapter. Which was also where I brought the Marauders into it. I am going to write that back in now. Thank you for pointing it out!

Thank you again for the review :)

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Review #2, by little miss snake The Head Girl

25th August 2011:
i have to agree, its awesome!!
i like the age gap with bella and the mauraders.
hurry and post, can't wait for the next chapter!!

Author's Response: Thank you!

I took a huge break from writing recently but I will be updating soon. :)

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Review #3, by VioletBlade The Head Girl

8th April 2011:
Hey there Random! VioletBlade here with your requested review!

It was very interesting. I was very worried by the summary, because, like I said, I don't really like reading Tom Riddle stories, but I liked it well enough, and there wasn't too much about him in here, so that was good! *sighs in relief*

So one thing I had an issue with is that she knew Voldemort's real name. It seemed as if that was NOT common knowledge at all, and actually, he hated it when Harry called him Tom, so Voldemort would have probably killed any of his followers who dared referred to him as Tom Riddle. (It was just a mark of his no-good father)

I also think that if Bellatrix was made the Head Girl, she would have had to prove herself somewhat caring of the student body, and although I couldn't see her as being warm, I don't think she would have been as harsh as she was to the first years. I can see her being bored with them easily, but I think she'd have to at least pretend to care.

Other than that, it was an interesting short story that I think good maybe have some potential... (I've never read a story about how Bellatrix joined the Dark Lord, married Rudolphus Lestrange, and became, well, insane, so maybe you could do it! :))

Thanks for requesting!

Author's Response: Hello.
She knew his name because he was the last Slytherin head before her. She would have to know his name.

Really? Creative differences here then, I think she would be her normal self. Probably got the position becuase her family paid for it.

I am adding more to it gradually. :)

Ginny45/RandomRed xxx

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Review #4, by orderofthephoenix The Head Girl

7th April 2011:
Hey! I'm here with your reivew :)
This was quite short so there's not much I can say.

You did really well with writing a difficult character such as Bellatrix. You portrayed her haughtiness and pride brilliantly. I particularly liked her reaction to Snape daring to talk to her.

I wouldn't have described the Slythrin Common Room as a fond memory but it suits Bella.

Well done. I hope to read this again when you have added more to it :)

-Sophia x

Author's Response: Hello.
Thank you for you lovely comments, I don't believe she would like first years annoying her.

I have extended it to a short story for now and the Marauders come into it.

Ginny45/RandomRed xxx

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Review #5, by BrightStar The Head Girl

3rd April 2011:
Hey! Very short but i do think you got Bella right, especially her reacton to snape! never knew about the age gap between them! Her Slytherin Pride was also excellent. Really well written, well done!

Author's Response: Hello,
Thank you, I am expanding it I just needed it to be uploaded.
I know right I was so happy when I went on the lexicon.
Thank You again.

Ginny45/RandomRed xxx

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