I have a feeling Lily definitely likes her best friend as more than just a friend! Haha she's just in denial.

The part with Lucy at breakfast was very funny, and she seems to have a habit of vomiting on her family members shoe's!

There were typos I wanted to point out, at the beinging you say VICTURE instead of Victoire and at the end you said Slitheren robes instead of Slytherin. There were a few other typos, but mostly it was stuff like "know' insted of 'no'.

Nice chapter!
-ronsgirl29

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing it really means a lot and ya my computor spell check hates me and I cant spell FOR MY LIFE! haha so sorry about the typos.

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This was a very interesing start! I like how you characterized Lucy, how she felt so much pressure to be a perfect child that she created a whole new 'self' for her school life. Lucy is one of the next gen characters I don't really think about much, but I can only imagine the amount of pressure there is being Percy's daughter!

For Lucy's sake, I hope the father is Mason and not Scorpius! Haha, she really is quite the wild child.

The only thing I'd suggest is that you fix all the space at the bottom of the chapter, because on my screen there's a fairly large chunk with no words!

-Ronsgirl29

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! haha i'm glad you like it I kinda abandoned this story but I'm gunna write a new chapter asap...i am very busy! sorry about the typos and chunk of blank space...I dont know where that came from...


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