Please post more. It's wonderful, and I would like to see how this will work out

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good job i really like the marauders and the story line this chapter was a tad bit confusing but still brilliant!:)

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I love stories where Hermione goes back in time to the marauders =) Also my guess is that the Ron poser is Remus. But seriously you write very well and i really like this story. More More More PLEASE!!! =)

Author's Response: Oh my god thank you! This review made my day! I've been having a lot of writer's block and very little time to write. Hopefully I'll have something new up soon :)

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really good so far! i can't wait to read more!!!

Author's Response: Yay! I really hope you'll like where it's going! :D

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Lupin using Polyjuice potion? That would be my guess. Good but wish the chapters were longer.

Author's Response: You'll have to wait and se :) Thanks. :) I'm trying to work on that, this chapter was a bit longer than usual though. But I am working on it! :)

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Your story has a lot of potential. I like it.

A few words of caution:
Make sure the dialogue sounds natural - try saying it in your head or out loud and seeing if it sounds like something people would normally say, or if it sounds too stiff and forced and robotic. For example, most people would say things like "I'm" instead of "I am".

Also, make sure the story isn't just people standing around and talking, because that makes for a boring story. Add details and action.

Good luck!

Author's Response: Will do :) Thanks for Comment. :)

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Good... I like the plot so far. Just watch capitalization and grammar - and "dieing" isn't a word. It's spelled "dying".

A suggestion for improvement: I try to go by the philosophy "Show, don't tell" when I write. Add little details here and there to help us picture the scene better.

Good luck with the story!

Author's Response: Thanks :) I've always had trouble with spelling, I'll work on that. I'll keep that in mind. I appreciate your comment. :)

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Pretty good. Looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Thank you :)

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I really like this^^

My only recommendation is to make the marauders a little less sirius.

except (oh the irony!) Sirius. I though it was a little pushed that he was upset about the blood on his robes. And they just kept talking too. I find that was a little too feminine.

But other than that it was great. Keep it up^^

Author's Response: Yay! :D I'll try to work on that. I felt like Sirius would be upset about the blood but I can see how it would seem a little feminine. I thought that it would be a little awkward if they weren't talking so I'll try to work on that too. I'm really glad that you like it though. :)

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i love this story please write more soon!!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm working on it. :)

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I'm really looking forward to the development of this story and characters (: I've read a lot of 'time-turner' stories and this one has a lot of potential to it. However, I did feel this chapter was a little bit rushed in a way, but I still enjoyed reading it.
Favoured and I'm really looking forward to the next chapters (:

Author's Response: Yay. :) Yeah the time-turner stories are some of my favorites. I'm trying to work on that. I rush things a lot. :/ I hope you'll like the rest of my story!

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Great plot, lots of potential! Keep going. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! :D

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Interesting. I do like these time travel stories. Only criticism I have is that they are too short. Still good.

Author's Response: I like them too :) I'm working on making the chapters longer, I write them down in a notebook I have and my handwriting is HUGE so I think that it's really long but then I type it up and it's too short. :/

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This story is great so far , add more chapters soon ! :)

JilyRonks xxx

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm a little stuck on chapter four but I'm working on it. I'll update as soon as I'm finished, hopefully it'll only be a few more days. I'm really glad you like it! :)

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