Reading Reviews for On Behalf of James Potter
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Review #1, by Quidditch On Behalf of James Potter

9th October 2015:
That was the funniest thing I have EVER read. I swear it is. I loved the part 'The first time Sirius asked James out.
On behalf of Lily, of course.'

On the behalf of Lily or not that was SO funny and I am still HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAing now!
LOL best fanfic EVER

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Review #2, by xtinjsc On Behalf of James Potter

7th August 2011:
"The first time Sirius Black declared that he would make it his life mission to get James Potter and Lily Evans to marry and produce a child that would be named Sardomonic."

Sardomonic. *snorts*

I like the whole 'reporting' format to this story, it's rather refreshing and it added more humour as well. I was just laughing out loud the whole time. Hahaha! I can never have too much crack fic and this is probably the one of the funniest one I've read so far. I like how simple it is too. I absolutely adore this, every bit of it. :)

The first time Sirius asked James out.
On behalf of Lily, of course.


Thank you so much for all the laughs!

xtinjsc (Hufflepuff)

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Review #3, by LittleMissPrincess On Behalf of James Potter

29th March 2011:
haha its really cute

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Review #4, by RJ On Behalf of James Potter

29th March 2011:
Haha this was cute, and funny.. I agree with Sidlicide - the fart thing was bloody funny..
And yeah, typos and stuff, blah blah blah - it's been said.I need to say nothing! Id like to see some more writing from you - you show lots of potential, and your idea was a bit different, which is great.
Happy writig, and keep it up!
RJ x

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Review #5, by sidlicide On Behalf of James Potter

28th March 2011:
Haha, that was so funny and cute! I'm glad you published it, it was great.

My favorite bit was this: "Lupin looked like he was trying to hold in a fart." I'm still laughing!

There were a few mistakes; I think you omitted a couple of words every here and there, but overall very good.

My one suggestion is this: whenever you write a piece let it all out. Just write and write until everything you want to say is there, neatly typed/written out. Then leave it. For a week, at least.

Then, when you pick it up a week later and slowly read through it, it'll be fresh and new. Fix any spelling errors, adjust any awkward sentences, add anything that might be missing. It may seem unnecessary but believe me, it helps.

All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed this and I hope to see you write more soon!

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Review #6, by lilyanne On Behalf of James Potter

28th March 2011:
Aw! that's so cute! I love the ending. You have some very minor typos but good job! Keep Writing!

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