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Review #1, by lilypotterfan123 Flashes Of The Future

16th April 2011:
Congrats on third place! Your prize is 5 reviews however I'm excluding the review I made on your entry. So when you get another story validated PM me the link! I loved how dark this was and how you maintained this all the way through. You kept it to the point and made it flow increasingly well, there was the odd spelling mistake but we all make them don't we! I loved Tom's characterisation, he was mature yet immature and how you made him seem like a bully to Mrs. Cole too! I liked how you fitted it all with the snakes, the rabbit and weaknesses, it helped the characterisation of Tom more believable!

-LpF123 x

Author's Response: I apologise completely for taking so long to reply to this - I've taken a little bit of a break from fanfiction.

Thank you so much for the placing in your challenge. I enjoyed writing this piece so much, so thank you for the prompt! The challenge truly was great.

I will go through the story to correct the spelling mistakes. I'm a little worried to go through my writing after such a long time, but I'm back now. :)

Thank you very much again! xo


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Review #2, by CheeringCharm Flashes Of The Future

10th April 2011:
Quite fascinating, I think you make Riddle a bit different to what I feel that he is, but you came quite close. I like (well it's horrible but) the way you picture everything happening and that the reader gets to have his/her distance to the character, seeing as he is very unpleasant and the thoughts quite intimidating.
I quite liked the story, the many synonyms made me a bit distracted from the text but it was very good :)
*huggles*

Author's Response: I apologise completely for taking so long to reply to this - I've taken a little bit of a break from fanfiction. However, I really do appreciate your review. :)

I am so glad you liked the characterisation of Tom. It was a hard thing to write a character like him, but I find him absolutely fascinating.

I have such a problem with synonyms, so hopefully I can edit this to take some of them out!

Thank you very much for your lovely review! xo


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Review #3, by ShelbyBlack Flashes Of The Future

25th March 2011:
Hey dear, I'm here to review! ^_^
Firstly, thank you for entering my challenge. It has been such a pleasure to read your story! And for your question, the quote is great, it worked perfectly...but more on that later!

Okay...I've added it to my favorites, so obviously I love it!

"They had begged for death and he hadnít complied. He prolonged their suffering. He had laughed along with the reptiles; it was the most happiness he had ever felt. He wanted it again. Craved that happiness, that sense of belonging, of importance. That feeling of power, control."

This part was also one of my favorite parts, it was brilliant, I had chills! You've captured his personality so vividly, his emotions and opinions are so carefully thought out and precise. I could feel the sense of authority and power he has. And the fear that the young boy Billy felt.


You have used both of the criterion perfectly! The quote most definitely was my favorite part.


"Nobody would care if they died, nobody would cry for them. They were worthless. He would be different to them, to everybody in existence. He would be remembered, yearned for, worshiped. He was destined to be something, somebody special. Everybody would know the name Tom Marvolo Riddle."

^ This is the epitome of what Tom is. Tom's dedication to his success, his greed...his determination to define himself, to be heard and to be remembered! You have used the quote to the best extent possible, you might not have exactly used it in your story, but you've used the values behind the quote and written a story that completely defines the true meaning of what it's try to convey and for that I bow to you.

Thank you so much! I loved this story, it was such a pleasure to read ^_^

xx

Author's Response: Hey!

First things first, I am so sorry for taking so long with this review reply. I really do appreciate you taking your time to read and review this story; real life has been hectic lately, so it's taken me away from HPFF.

I am so glad that you enjoyed this story. Your challenge was so ... challenging, I guess, especially because I decided on a more difficult/hard to characterize person to base it on. I think your challenge was a great opportunity for me to write something I'd be too afraid of in other purposes, so thank you so much for such an amazing challenge and quote.

I'm also so glad that you feel the quote was used correctly. I was so afraid because I hadn't used the quote itself, but to know this is okay is extremely reassuring. :)

I am also so glad you enjoyed the last paragraph. It was actually the first part I had written with this story and what the plot was based around, so I'm happy that it worked out. I tried to base his character and personality around that, too, rather than painstakingly trying to characterize him manually. :)

Thank you so much for all of your kind words, the favourite and an absolutely amazing challenge. I really enjoyed writing this piece.

-- Jordan


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Review #4, by strawberrydarhling Flashes Of The Future

19th March 2011:
When I started reading this I wasn't expecting something so dark... so twisted...

But despite that I still really enjoyed this. Lately I have become obsessed with Tom Riddle and this on-eshot gives me a perfect insight into his mind.

Megan
xx

Author's Response: Hey!

Firstly, I am so sorry for taking so long with this review reply. I really do appreciate you taking your time to read and review this story; real life has been hectic lately, so it's taken me away from HPFF.

Haha, I am sorry for pulling you in, only to be surprised by the darkness of this. It's probably quite misleading, considering how calm it starts off.

However, I am so glad you enjoyed this one shot. It surprises and excites me when people compliment my stories, so thank you very much for that. I am also obsessed with Tom Riddle, so I'm happy that I've fed another Riddle obsessive with this piece. :)

Thanks again!
-- Jordan


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Review #5, by maskedmuggle Flashes Of The Future

19th March 2011:
WOW.

Gahhh once again, such a brilliant one shot. I could rave all day about your stories :P

HOW DOES IT FEEL TO HAVE A PERSONAL STALKER?
(i bet you think i'm weird now xDD)

coughcough. Anyway, I LOVED the simple plot in here, it's quite simple, but so amazing, especially the WAY YOU WRITE!!!

I would never even be able to attempt a Tom Riddle, so I love your versatility and the characterisation of Tom in here! You made him really in character, I thought.

A really lovely read, and it is pretty dark! But very enjoyable, and I simply love your writing :P

Author's Response: Hey love!

First things first, I am so sorry for taking so long with this review reply. I really do appreciate you taking your time to read and review this story; real life has been hectic lately, so it's taken me away from HPFF.

Woah, you are seriously way too kind to me. Like, seriously, I do not deserve such amazing praise heaped upon me, but I do appreciate it so much.

Personal stalker, huh? I'll take you anyday! XD

I am so glad you enjoyed this story. The darkness of it all made me think that I'd put people off, but I'm so glad that it hasn't.

Also, I am so happy that you think Tom's in character. I was afraid that he would be too evil for a realistic child and too out-of-character for a future Voldemort.

Thanks so much again! You're awesome. :3
-- Jordan


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Review #6, by Victoria LH Flashes Of The Future

18th March 2011:
I think you did a good job, I don't think I could tackle this right now.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind review! :)

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Review #7, by Selene Flashes Of The Future

18th March 2011:
Oh wow, this is dark. It made me sit back and be afraid of Riddle. You weren't overly descriptive with the violent bits, you gave us as readers just enough detail to send our imagination into overdrive. Wonderful job on that, some writers will go into way to much detail and make a reader squeamish.

You're depiction of Tom was actually inspiring, if that makes any sense. I feel like a light bulb has gone off in my head as I find Tom/Voldemort the hardest character to write. He's just so evil, that I wind up making him seem a pansy since I don't know how to even start pulling him off right. Heck this whole thing is inspiring in a way, not just in a dark sense but in a writing sense.

I'm adding this to my favorites when I submit this review. Thank you for the read!

Author's Response: Hey!

First things first, I am so sorry for taking so long with this review reply. I really do appreciate you taking your time to read and review this story; real life has been hectic lately, so it's taken me away from HPFF.

My response to this review is just: wow. Thank you so much for your kind words; it means more than you will know.

I definitely agree with you about the darkness of this piece and that was honestly something I found hard to deal with. I have never attempted something so dark and twisted, so it was really difficult. I am so glad you think I didn't go overboard with the description, though, as being too adjective-friendly is something I've always had a problem with.

As for Tom's character: thank you so much for the compliments on that. I found him so difficult to write, especially as a child. I didn't know whether he was out of character or too evil to be realistic, so your review is very reassuring.

Thank you so much once again!
-- Jordan


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