I think the idea of more visions is fantastic, I'm really curious as to who the girl is. It's an interesting idea and I think you could go quite far with it :).
I noticed that a couple errors for example you've written the 'Chudley Cannons' as the 'Chubbly Cannons' and I'd also like to think that the Weasley's considered Harry a part of the family before he saved Ron from the poison or Mr. Weasley from Nagini. That of course is up to you but I just thought I would mention it.
Other than that I think you have a very interesting idea and I'm really interested to hear where you go with it! Great job :)Author's Response: Thank you for the return review.
I have a rough idea where this story is to go, but for some reason the ideas are not quite coming to me.
But since your encouraging review I think I'll edit the first chapter and start to get back into the swing of things.
Thanks for the read and review. It's been so encouraging. Report Review
This was a good first chapter! I really enjoyed it. 10/10. :)Author's Response: Thank you for your wonderful 10/10. I should be adding the next chapter in a few days, there are one or two other chapters to other stories I want to get out first. Thanks again fror reviewing. Report Review
Heyy, you left reviews for me, so I decided to check out one of your stories. I have to say, this is a good beginning, can't wait to read the rest of it :)
P.S. Update soon please...Author's Response: Thank you for the great review. I will be updating as soon as I can. At the moment I have a new chapter for my story Son of Potter vs Son of Bellatrix going through validation (should be up sometime in the next several hours) and after that I'll be putting up the beginning of another story that I suddenly thought of several days ago. But rest assured I will update after that. But in the mean time please feel free to read my other stories and tell me what you think. Thanks again for the fab review and happy reading. Report Review
this is so normal so far. like nothing happened yet so theres no big cliffy yet. stupid Knights of Walpurgis... tryin to kill mah Harry. 10/10 tho. ive latelt been uninspired for the next chapter of my story... care to help me out? thanks!
~~VAuthor's Response: Things will pick up soon. Now to try and help you with your writers block. You could have victoria having a nightmare about the way her father (not Voldemort, invent new character) seduced her mother and also the plans that he had for her service to the dark lord. When she is born, her mother runs away and gives her her last name. When she awakes she tells no one and tries to settle back into school life. How about fitting in that she has multiple personalities and one of them tries to seduce Harry. Though the hatred towards Snape is still there give it a rest for a chapter or two for now and concentrate on Victoria. Leave him unconcious in the hoispital wing. Well thats a few ideas of mine, please feel free to use them if they are of any use to you. Report Review
A good first chap... and I'm expecting more from the next one...
Keep writing... :)
P.S. I also write with the name 'annie snape' so the reviews from any of the two names are mine ^_^Author's Response: I'll try and get the next chapter out soon. I wrote the first chapter to this story of the top of my head. I had the idea, and before I forgot it wrote it out. But I'll work on the update and try and get it out soon. Thanks for the encouraging review. Report Review
Hey I really liked the story summary for this! It sounds like it could develop into something really unusual and interesting. I think this chapter could use a little more introduction to really set the scene and also add some length! Just a nice chunk of description or something, you know? All in all, I can see this developing really well if it's refined a little! :)Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'll take on board the things that you've said. Report Review
Yet another fantabulous chapter of an incredelicous story my an amaztastic author!!! Great job
I got a good laugh when you accidently wrote chubby cannons instead of chuddly cannons, though ;)
10/10 for the story
11/10 for the authorAuthor's Response: Oh thank you I'm Blushing. Thank you for the two fandabidosie scores. Will post update soon.
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