Aww!!! This is WolfieAli from the forums by the way :D Reviewing your story as promised.
I'm not normally a big fan of Remus/OC as I'm a huge Remus/Tonks shipper however I really enjoyed this. You really felt for Remus when he realised he'd attacked Stormy and I loved that bit about him being outside of his body and looking in. It was a whole out of body experience type thing.
I loved all the imagery at the beginning also. It really set the scene and you could definitely imagine where they were and what was going on. Also describing the scent of her hair was powerful also.
I think you captured Remus' character well also, good job there :)
One quick note, did you realise you wrote "Then a great white stage" instead of what I'm assuming you meant to be stag?
Anyway great job :) I had fun reading it.Author's Response: Thanks for the great review... Stage, HA HA nope didn't realize that, I will fix it. I really love Remus/Tonks too that's my favorite ship, so writing this was hard at first, but I felt it gave a brief explanation as to why he found it so hard to get involved with Tonks, at least from my point of view. Thanks again Report Review
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