Hi! So, since you reviewed my story, I just HAD to return the favor.
So. Um. Well, I was preparing to pretend to be nice, and be all fake and say 'I loved this story!' even though it was actually awful.
But, OMG, it isn't! I found it really sweet, with all the 'extraordinary' and the 'not wanting to be beautiful' things. I've always envied the beautiful people, but because of your story I've sort of learned that their are pros and cons to being beautiful too!
Great story. 10/10. Nuff said.Author's Response: lol! :D :D :D i totally know what you meant, i sometimes do that too *guilty* but there's nothing we can do! some stories are just AWFUL. but im glad you liked mine! :D Report Review
This is AditiDraco95 from the forums with the review you asked for. Sorry for the long wait!
Okay, dropping the professionalism, this was my first reaction when I finished reading this one shot-- Aw!!!
It was so sweet and simple and really "beautiful". Very well written though there are quite a few (or actually a bit too many) grammatical errors (especially in the start of the fic) here and there that kind of dampen the mood. But you could correct them if you re-read or you could assign a beta to edit it for you. Then your fic will be PERFECT.
The characterization is wonderful. Flow is also good. Its realistic and nice. The work overall is good, though as I said, grammar needs some working upon.
Overall a very nice story, and the way you portrayed everything was lovely.
A tip--Add in a bit more of description. The more descriptive it is, the more it engrosses the reader (though I'm not saying to cram up every possible thing in here that makes it boring).
Rest all was good!
Hope I was of help!
ADAuthor's Response: hi! nah, its okay, i get that people have lives :p
yay!!! im glad you like it. I realize that now and I will be getting a beta for this, if I don't find time to do it myself. but yay, you think that (minus the horrible grammar -must check my word spellchecker!) its perfect! :D
description? I'll look into that. no worries, I will be editing this and then maybe ask you to check it again and see if its perfect now :D
yes you were of help! of course!
thanks :D Report Review
I really enjoyed reading this. I've read a story about Victoire before. I was pleasantly surprised by the way you wrote her character. In my head I imagine her to be more like her mother so to see her take be very different was nice. This was very well written also. I also enjoyed the voice you gave to Teddy since I haven't read anything with him either. This was a lovely read.Author's Response: hi! so happy you liked this. i always write Victoire like Fleur but everything she questions in this were things I was questioning myself. And I thought it would make a nice change :D i also thought we always make ted too nice and he should be more like this hot shot dude that wont clean his apartment :D thanks! Report Review
Hey I really liked this! Ted so so cool! I'm glad you had vic actually question her right to beauty... the whole veela thing was well done, really interesting to think about! id like to see more wizards go on to institutes for further education! geneology and photography sounds awesome!! I'm just saying random things at this stage like grrr fleur.! Anyway AWESOME one shot once more! Yay you!! :)Author's Response: yay im glad you liked! of course, Ted is a cool bloke ;) i always thought that Victoire should maybe have a say on that type of thing and it does interest me, too bad it doesnt exist... :( and yeah! Fleur. i dont know what is it with her, im begginging to believe i hate her :p thanks so much! Report Review
That was really cute!
I really liked it! :)
-Siriuslover177Author's Response: great, thanks so much! Report Review
You are been the only person to ever make me like Victoire as a main character..literally ever.
Your characterisation and description were both brilliant! I loved the general idea of the fic.
I thought your Teddy was good. I loved how you had the pink bra..*Snickers*
But I loved this it was a wonderful one-shot, which you should totally turn into a Novella ;)
Hannah xAuthor's Response: hey! really? awesome! im okay for victoire, not really mind her much, you know :D im glad i got that covered! characterization is hard sometimes and the idea i got it from a line in an episode of no ordinary family :D
Teddy is awesome. smoking hot heartbreaker *pink braa* originally there was a girl with him on the flat so she had to leave. maybe ill consider it :D
yay! im glad you liked it! a novella... interesting. will be thinking about it, for sure!
thanks! Report Review
Awww sweet. Great job!
10/10Author's Response: oh, great! thanks so much! Report Review
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