I really like this story. It's very unique! Can't wait to read on!

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This was a really great chapter - I love your writing style! I've never seen anything like it. Can't wait to read more!

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I love this! I can't think of anyway to improve it! Well done!

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I'm not sure about how I like this chapter. It's interesting to have another perspective, and it does fit with the overall tone, and I can see the influence of the song. Maybe it's just me, since everything seems fine. *shrugs*

Overall this has been a really good use of the song, and I can see your inspiration came from the song.

Good job!
-Houlestar

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I like how you've added a dimension that wasn't present in the song -- the male perspective in the relationship -- that still expresses the mood of the song. It's a nice touch.

I actually don't find the chapter confusing at all. I think I like this chapter better than the first, perhaps because it's similar and different at the same time.

Good job!
-Houlestar

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Wow, you've really captured the character expressed in the song with Marlene. The mood of the song is definitely shown here, and I can really see the inspiration from "Bad Romance" in your piece here. You've done a great job using the song for this story.

There are a few grammar/typographical errors here, but nothing that make it too hard to read.

I will admit that at times, the narrative and the images/phrases feel a little cliche, but I think that just might be because I finished a course on Dostoevsky *facepalm*.
-Houlestar

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This is very different from a lot of the fan fictions on HPFF right now and that's a good thing!

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I liked this a lot. It gets a little melodramatic but in a way that comes off only as good characterization. Also, her thought process seemed realistic. Please get the next chapter up soon!

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I love it!!(: Update soon!!!

Author's Response: Thank you~. Glad you like it.

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