Alright, I love the unique bit that is painting Rose in a bad light, considering she's sleeping with a married man! There's something I've not seen before, and it's very refreshing in a wonderful way. =P
'Were not living in a novel, you know,' this line so had me giggle, as you can imagine. I loved the characterization for Scorpius and Rose, and the fact he tried to make her jealous and ended up with her cousin! Rose also has such a good point -- she really is the one that will suffer the most, especially betraying her cousin like that and coming from such a close knit family.
The end was awesome since it's not ending happily! haha I don't know why but things not ending happily, and knowing they'll likely continue to fight, is so much more realistic for me. ^^
Good job! Only thing I'd say is maybe snag a beta and watch your tenses!
Cappie/HufflepuffAuthor's Response: Thanks! I really loved writing those characters, and I'm glad you like them too. I definitely think it's a more realistic dynamic between the two of them than a lot of ways they are portrayed. I know it needs editing, I had to get it out super fast for a challenge and never quite got around to rewriting - however, this summer I have a lot of free time so I'll likely work on it then.
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