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Review #1, by katebabelovesharrypotter A Midsummer Night's Dream

8th March 2011:
I loved it! I think this is likely to win. Thank you for entering my challenge and doing a great job! :D
-candycoatedhappiness

Author's Response: Hi!

Thanks, but I'm sure someone will upstage me soon enough haha. Thanks for the challenge! The quote really helped me end this fic in a good fluffy way!

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Liberty


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Review #2, by TheProphecy A Midsummer Night's Dream

8th March 2011:
Awww

I adored this! I thought you did the characters really well, I loved the midsummer nights dream reference!

I thought it was well-written and entertaining with a good plot-line.

I thought you did well making the twins two different people and not necessarily carbon clones of Luna.

Well done m'dear, I really enjoyed this.

Hannah x

Author's Response: Hey Hannah!

The Midsummer Night's Dream reference was inspired by Lysander's name and the No Bad Dreams challenge-I adore it too!

The fact of the matter is, Luna is a special type of person. I doubt her husband is the same and I didn't want her sons to be the same as her. However, I tried to show her influence on them. (The references to Moon Frogs were in there. And they were Ravenclaws too!)

Thank you so much for the review and the compliments!
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Liberty


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Review #3, by LoopyLemon A Midsummer Night's Dream

3rd March 2011:
Hey this was really really cool!!!
I've never really been into next generation stuff but this was awesome :)
Very well written. I really enjoyed reading it without getting distracted by bad grammar and such.
Good job :)

Author's Response: Hey!

This is my first Next Generation story, I was never really into that era either. I'm glad that you still enjoyed it even though it's not really your era and all.

So glad there's no glaring errors! Thanks for the review! :)

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Review #4, by orderofthephoenix A Midsummer Night's Dream

3rd March 2011:
You deserve more reviews on this story. I didn't understand where you were going at first; I couldn't see the relationship between apparition and the three characters. But after the flashback, when Dominique ended up in Lorcan's hoop and he ended up in Samantha's hoop, it became obvious.

I think it's brilliant how you wove those two challenges together. You're quite a talented writer and I'll definitely have to check out more of your writing :)

If you're interested in Britishisms, 'realized' should be 'realised' and 'emphasizing' should be 'emphasising'. I couldn't find anything else to criticise on. It was very good!

-Sophia x

Author's Response: Hey!

I'm glad people are starting to review it, I was a little worried that it was a failure when there was no feedback.

The whole apparition plot event used to happen much earlier in the fic, but I thought there wasn't enough character in it, so I extended it so there was several character-developing-ish scenes before the climax. I'm glad that everything became obvious, I was so worried I was being too vague and no one would get my plot twist, but so far, people seem to know what my words strung together mean!

I'm glad you think the 2 challenges complimented eachother alright, instead of being totally random and unrelated. I'm glad this story has given you a good impression of me as a writer, it's a big worry of mine.

Britishisms! Oh no! I always forget to go over my stories with edits! I'll need to fix that..someday.

Thank you so much for the review and compliments! :)

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Liberty


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Review #5, by Aiedail A Midsummer Night's Dream

1st March 2011:
aw i think you did a good job with threading in the whole Midsummer Night's Dream thing! that's my favorite shakespeare comedy :)

the thing with the twins was interesting, although as soon as lysander (who was lorcan at the time!) started telling her about all of the secrets she'd told him, i wondered if...

i can't say what it is about this that was so charming. even though it's a one-shot i got a good idea of the characters and i was really interested to hear their stories! you have a way of creating a flow that makes things easy to read, and seems to propel the reader on and say "read me, read me!"

you have some really cute/funny lines in here. such as:

He and his brother had been there for her when her Pygmy Puff had died after all, so she set off to find him.

“You’re wasted, completely intoxicated. Please sit down, and try not to die,” she said, eyeing the sharp boulders at the bottom of the hillside.

there are a couple others, but i'd just get redundant if i started listing them all!

i liked this story a lot :) it's an interesting idea even though it doesn't have too much concrete movement, and i loved all the dialogue and interaction between characters!
--lily

Author's Response: Hi Lily!

I'm glad you like the Midsummer Night's Dream reference, I was afraid it'd be too cheesy.

I was trying to not make the twist obvious, but I wanted to hint at it at the same time. I hope I came to the right balance!

I know that some people judge one-shots because there's not as much room for character development, so I'm really glad you liked the characters despite the short time frame I used.

Thank you so much for complimenting my writing style! I'm always so dreadfully insecure about it! Those lines are some of my favorite too!

I know there isn't a large time frame put in here, but I didn't want to extend it over time as I think the idea would've gotten boring. The dialogue and characters are what I focused on the most, so it's great that you loved it!

Thank you so much for the review!

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Review #6, by Fleur Delacour Potter A Midsummer Night's Dream

24th February 2011:
I'm so glad it got validated quickly :)
This was a nice piece, I like how the twins confuse Dom and everything. It's quite original. Good job!

Author's Response: Hey!

So am I! It was a little late for your challenge though, wasn't it?

I didn't originally plan that as the plot, but I sort of thought about twins and all the accidents that can happen from confusing the two of them and this just came about.

I'm so glad you think it's original! I'm always afraid of sounding just like everyone else...

Thanks so much for the review and the challenge! I'm actually proud-ish of this fic and it would've never come about without the challenge.
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Liberty


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