This was heartbreaking! D: His parents sound perfectly awful... It did provide an interesting look into Avery's past, and while, didn't totally justify all his actions, did provide an explanation.
Aleiah was so sweet and innocent, and I could definitely see how her death could unhinge Avery.
Great job - a fascinating look in his mind!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I worked hard on this one-shot, and the only way I could see it working was if I understood the character. I'm pleased to hear that you were able to see the 'inside' of Avery's mind. Thank you so much for your wonderful review! Its made my day :) Report Review
Aleiah. Avery. I still remember the way I feel when I look at my baby brother. He is my world, my first child by every way other than biological.
:')Author's Response: Thank you so much. I kno just how you feel, i was thinking of my baby sister the whole way through writing this story (: thank you again for the review! Report Review
I'm so glad you mentioned this to me. Though it made me incomparably sad, it was truly beautiful. I have never read anything so magical - I adored it. Truly an amazing one-shot that really hit home for me. Well done, MayAuthor's Response: I'm so happy to hear that it got to you... Though it's sad, I really wanted this one shot to stand out to its readers ... I really put my heart and soul into it, so much so it almost broke my own heart!
Thank you for the review, my dear (: I can always count on you xx Report Review
I am in tears at the moment.. That was the most sad/sweet one-shot I have ever read... So beautiful, well done!Author's Response: I'm sorry you are crying, but I'm really glad you could relate to this story. It really pulled my own heartstrings writing it. Thank you so much for the review (: Report Review
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