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Review #1, by confusedlover Lemons

29th September 2011:
very lovely.

very cute. i really loved how you brought the two of them together. it was different and refreshing. Remus and Lily do not have to always be the people writers usually portray them as and you pulled them off very well in this one-shot. great job. keep on writing!! (:

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I wanted to write how I might see Remus and Lily personally, so thank you for putting up with my characterisations ;) I've never written them before so I felt like my understanding of them was very basic, I'm so pleased you think I did well. Thank you for the encouragement, it means a lot!

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Review #2, by SiriuslyPeeved Lemons

14th May 2011:
This was beautiful. I've always wondered whether Lupin had (deeply buried) feelings for Lily, based on his comments in PoA. This is a gorgeous answer to what might have been. You've gotten both of their characters just right in my opinion, and the lyrical quality of your writing fits so well with the subject. Bravo.

Author's Response: I'm so sorry about this late response! Please don't think it means I didn't appreciate this review, because I really do :) It was so kind of you to take the time to review, and this really made me feel a bit more confidant about my writing. I'm unsure about this whole piece, particularly characterization, so it means a lot. Thank you so so much!

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Review #3, by thehyacinthgirl Lemons

9th May 2011:
I always loathed anything that wasn't Lily/James, because they are beautiful together and I couldn't see any of the Marauder's betraying James in such a way; but I adore this.


It's just so beautiful and so sweet, and so innocent. It is full of heartbreak and angst, but hope and bliss, and I just can't help but smile. Remus is happy. Even if it only lasts that night, and it is so incredibly cute.

I love your characterizations of Lily and Remus both because they seem to be spot on, though, she truly doesn't understand his inner angst I don't think [I don't think she knew what he was until after Hogwarts or maybe she worked that out on her own, I don't think the book ever says], and yet she instinctively knows something's wrong.

I also adore his initial offense to the statement that he never laughs. I am a rather serious person, myself, and I get horribly offended when my mother insists that I cannot take a joke. So I think it's a realistic emotion.

Not to mention, this is so cute, that you really can't hold it against Remus. Even if he feels guilty about it himself.

As for grammar and spelling - I didn't pick up on any grammatical snafu's so awesome job! You know how much I love those polished pieces!

This was amazing, Helena! I'm so proud of you for writing this, too, as it seems the longest of your works yet! Not to mention, it's amazing to boot.

Love always;
♥ Linders

Author's Response: OH LINDERS! Thank you for all these incredible reviews. They were really something lovely to come home to, and you always read with such care and leave such thoughtful comments. Heaps and heaps of hugs and thanks.

I definately agree, that's why I was so nervous about writing it. It's also why there is a suggestion of it not neccesarily being a lasting thing but I think that it's believable they may have had a moment of understanding or being there for each other. I'm very happy you found it sweet, I know you mentioned angst, and I was worried that might take over, but very happy it didn't. Yay for cuteness. Remus deserves a little bit of it at least :D

You liked the characterizations! I can't tell you how happy this makes me. Lily seems so difficult, I couldn't write her or pin down her character at all. I have all these contrasting ideas in my head about her character, so I was really unsure, and in the end I feel almost as if I just moulded her to my liking rather than really getting a grip of her character :P But I suppose that is something that comes with practice. But as you can see, the fact that you can find realism in how I wrote her means an awful lot.

I'm glad you liked that! Especially that you picked up on it. I know Remus is the serious one of his group, but he likes to laugh too, we all do. I don't think we always take it easily when someone tells us how we are either.

As for grammar, I'm pleased, but it was all thanks to Gillian. She was amazing at beta'ing this, and even titled it for me haha. ♥

Baww, thank you for being proud of me. Length is something I need to do more of I know ;)

You are far too lovely, this made my day so much.


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Review #4, by datbenik513 Lemons

4th April 2011:
Well, I certainly haven't expected this. Maybe it's got to do with the fact that I don't read Marauder stories. Full stop.

Up until now.

Remus was one of my very favourite characters in the books. The lycanthropism that stamped him as an outcast, an "other", made him practically impossible to make friends, until he met those three.

You showed here an other side of Lily than most people imagine her. Everyone depicts her as the brilliant student, the fiery redhead and god knows what cliches else. Your take on her is different. She is lonely and misunderstood and struggles to find herself in her relationship with James.

And... where two lonely souls collide, something inexplicable and beautiful can happen...

It's an amazing piece of art.

Author's Response: Hello again! I'm so sorry I haven't replied to this yet, I was a little intimdated and blushing at all your incredible kindness.

Remus is definately an interesting character, one who has always intrigued me. Lily is, a mystery! She is seen as perfect by everyone in the books, practically, so it's very hard to get a grasp on her character. I'm not particularly pleased with how she came out in this, but I'm really glad you were able to sympathize and understand where I was coming from with this side of her. However, like I said, I'm not quite happy with it. She's a very elusive character.

You are incredibly kind, always. Your words of encouragement mean so much to me, and I cannot convey how much I appreciate it that you take the time to leave these wonderful reviews! Needless to say, I owe you! Thank you.

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Review #5, by ericajen Lemons

26th February 2011:

Only you could make me like Remus/Lily. I mean that. You have an uncanny ability to write ships so amazingly well that I immediately begin to like that ship. Scorpius/Dominique ring any bells here?

Your characterizations were amazing. Honestly. Remus was spot on perfect the entire way. I absolutely adored him. And you wrote him so adorably and sweet that I wanted to jump into the story and give him a big bear hug. Lily was great, too. It makes me cringe to see her written as a neurotic and crazy loony, so I was incredibly happy to see this soft, sensitive side of her. It was perfect.

I loved their interactions and dialogue. It was a little bit awkward and I mean that in the best way because I felt it right that they would be a little bit awkward at first. But they really connected, and I could feel that while reading.

Another great touch was that you mentioned how Remus knew that it would likely not be a lasting thing. We all know Lily is meant to be with James, but I just love that you decided to explore other aspects of what might have happened in their adolescence.

This is an absolutely gorgeous story, Helen. You have done it again. And always remember that I am your number one fangirl(:


Author's Response: Erica! I'm sorry how long it took me to reply to this review. If it's any help, it's only because it's absolutely amazing and I wanted to give it a decent response.

Remus/Lily is definately a strange ship, I'm not sure how I feel about it and like you said that is why I didn't write it as a lasting thing. Thank you so much for being open minded and giving it a go though! :D And wow, that you think I write ships convincingly means a lot. I'm always nervous about romance :)

WHEE YOU THOUGHT I WROTE REMUS GOOD. I don't think I need to do anything extra to Remus to make him huggable, he's adorable. :) Thank you so much. But even more, that you liked this side of Lily was reassuring. Personally, I don't/didn't feel the characterization was very strong. I find her such a hard character to write! I was worried she might be too soppy in this, but that you were able to believe in that side to her is really reassuring.

Haha, glad to hear it! Yes, awkward is good!! I don't necessarily see Remus as a ladies man, and I thought he might be a bit thrown off by the whole situation! So happy you felt they connected! :)

You are so so kind Erica. This review really made my day, your reviews are absolutely amazing. Thank you so much for leaving this indepth review. This is definately going in that 'favourite review' thread :D THANK YOU ERICK!

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Review #6, by Illuminate Lemons

8th February 2011:

This was such a lovely oneshot. You have such a romantic style, and I think you wrote Lupin's internal conflict perfectly. And both characterisations were excellent.

Well done!

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you. It's the first piece of fanfiction I've written in a while, so thank you for creating the challenge to inspire me! Romantic? Really? I always feel nervous about romance so that's really encouraging. Thank you so much for taking the time to review!

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