Wow, what a twist at the end! :) Nagini? Tom named his snake after her! :) Undeoubtedly, the end surprised me, but it was extraoridinary. It was very creative. ;)
You've got a nice story there, but i would suggest getting a editor-I do spot a few comma splices (run-ons) and lack of punctuation.
This is just constructive criticism, not a flame ^^ ;) Report Review
That is such a good ideaa!! I really liked that, especially the ending(:Author's Response: Awhh thank you ^.^ Report Review
That was pretty good! I liked the idea behind the story, and it certainly gets to the point well
There are quite a few errors with the flow of the work, and one or two spelling errors, but nothing that can't be sorted out by a good edit. It is overall a good start to a potentially amazing plot.
Leanne :) x Report Review
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