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Review #1, by notreallyblonde44 The Thunder Rolls

2nd October 2015:
o.OOO so dark! So intriguing. In such a short amount of time you conveyed a LOT of emotion. The song really helped set the tone and pacing, and the lyrics were nicely interwoven.

The scene was interesting. I wonder who this mysterious other woman is and why Scorpius did this to Rose :( I can't say I think he deserved death, and oh that last two lines were so emotional(!), but what he did to Rose is awful. What a jerk. I liked the scenery and the way the thunder hits at the right moments. Your pacing seems lyrical as you definitely have an internal rhythm to your writing, which is cool and hard!

Some quick typos I noticed:

'Iím so glad I made him take the car to the Jamesí bachelor party' - to James' (no the needed)

'But where could he be He should' - missing period before He
*also not sure if you need to bold this section as it's not doing much to emphasize two sentences. Usually bold would be used for one word or a few words to make the emphasis a very stark contrast.

There are a few other moments where there appears to be missing periods or something, so those should be easy to catch on a quick read through ;)

Overall, interestingly depressing Songfic one-shot...definitely have not read something like this on here before. The line that really resonates with me is "utter the words my parents taught me never to say" - Rose is clearly at wit's ends and it's so hard to witness her breakdown and this tragic ending to two lives :(

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Review #2, by love_is_magic_ The Thunder Rolls

7th March 2014:
Wow! You're right! That is a rather dark ending! But powerful nonetheless!

Okay, so I love the way you have connected the storm and Rose and Scorpius's relationship. It is such a beautiful metaphor, especially when you add in the poem that just fits so perfectly with this story.

I also love how you've done such a good job of switching between your two Scorpius/Rose fics. Obviously, their relationship is in equal (possibly) amounts of disarray in both, but they are also different, and you did a good job of balancing that.

I felt so bad for Rose when she was waiting tirelessly for Scorpius to come home, hoping that he was alright, when really we know why he was out so late. Heartbreaking, really.

I loved this one, as well, especially in the way you tied in the poem! Great one-shot, I can't wait to keep reading.


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Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing :)

When I wrote this I was in a bad mood so this was my way of venting. I might turn this into a side piece for a longer fic now that I have more time on my hands but we shall have to see how well the muses work with me and how much time I have on my hands since i've got a load of other projects to work on right now.

Sorry it took so long to respond but thanks again :)

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Review #3, by roseweasley_03 The Thunder Rolls

8th September 2011:
Can you write a companion to this story? I really want to know who that woman was that scorpius was cheating with. I feel as though there's more to this story than meets the eye. I just can't stop thinking about this. 10/10

Author's Response: I really didn't intend to write a sequel you can pick anyone you choose to be the other woman this was just supposed to be a one story thing and i really didn't put much thought into who the other woman was i was more focused on Rose's feelings and the driving force behind her actions

Thanks for the Review :)

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Review #4, by HP0247 The Thunder Rolls

11th February 2011:
Well, that was really awful. I mean it was written well - but really? Only the weakest sort of person would think and then act upon those thoughts.

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Well when you find out your spouse is cheating on you it can drive you to do insane things just like what happened in this case. You hear all the time on the news about scorned spouses that do crazy things. And you never know i didn't really give many details about their life before this happened Rose might have already been depressed and this could have pushed her over the edge.

Thanks for the Review :)

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Review #5, by LillyRoseanne The Thunder Rolls

7th February 2011:
Very dark ending... I like :D nice Challenge entry too :D Good Luck!

Author's Response: Thank You! Like I've said before it is darker than I wanted but it seemed to fit the whole "Bad Romance" thing.

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Review #6, by AC_rules The Thunder Rolls

7th February 2011:
Hey it's acrules from the forums, although I guess that's kind of obvious :)

First off, I really enjoy the song. I had it playing on the background whilst I was reading it, and it really seemed to fit the writing. However I was ahead on the reading front and my heart literally dropped with "She reaches for the pistol" and I was like woooaaahh - that was a seriously intense moment, I wasn't expecting things to be quite that bad. Definately fits under the category of 'bad romance.'

Your writing is good, but at some points I thought it lacked a bit of fluidity - I stumbled a couple of times, but overall I thought it was really good :)

Author's Response: Thanks! i do better with poetry and have trouble with the flow of a story. and i know it was a little intense but i wasn't exactly in the best of moods when the inspiration hit. It was a lot darker than i wanted it next time i'll try for maybe a simple argument...

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