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Review #1, by Rachael Riddle

10th May 2011:
Very well written :)

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Review #2, by morningstarroost Riddle

25th April 2011:
i love the though pattern at 4. it makes sense that that is wht a little kid might think.

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Review #3, by PenguinsWillReignSupreme Riddle

6th March 2011:
I absolutely understand why this made it to your TGS MTA; character studies go underappreciated but I think you've done a most magnificent job with this one. I can't believe nobody else has reviewed yet. It's a complete travesty. After Lee Anne recommended Tom's War in the tag thread, I meant to go and read it but with a busy few days, I forgot. Seeing you as last poster, I couldn't resist but drop by your page and spied this poor thing without a review and couldn't resist.

Tom is so difficult to write. I've never managed it, only ever from someone else's POV looking at him. I've tried. It's one of those things I've been dying to do but I just can't so I admire anyone who tries. You did more than try. You succeeded, without any shadow of a doubt in my mind.

I love the structure; the progression of him from the age of four up to sixteen and the changing of the language and syntax to suit. The opening is so simple, so childlike which is obviously exactly what you want to see from a four-year-old narrator. I think that was the longest part and possibly my favourite. You had me completely enraptured. I love the way you phrased everything 'The Light Thing' etc. The way you used capitalisation was fabulous and worked to great effect.

I like how you brought the Tom we know out. I thought that was so cleverly done, the way you linked the first two sections. In all fairness, Luke probably deserved it and I think that having Tom start out in that way, bringing this upon those who did something to him rather than the innocent is a great touch.

Twelve was quite sad, I thought. I think Tom coming to realise he's only half-blood in the future would be so interesting to look at and the way he's searching actually makes me feel for him a lot, in a way that stories about him don't tend to. I like his arrogance and how early that is set in, same goes for his isolation and lack of love or appreciation for those around him. Brilliant.

And sixteen; he's growing up and oh my gosh, it was so haunting. The malice, the hatred, the ease with which he thinks about that murder. It's shocking (in the best possible way for you). The structure of that whole part I thought was wonderfully done, the events and the overlapping of what 'normal' teenagers do and what he does. The parallels are so stark.

I think this is one of the best last lines I've ever read. It chilled me completely. I think the fact that this is so short, the way it jumps between these significant moments in the change of his person really makes that end seem even more haunting.

There are a couple of typos (attack rather than attic, and a THat instead of that - the two that I can remember at the minute) that knocked the flow a little bit but it's nothing that can't be fixed with a quick edit.

Overall, I thought this was stunning. Well done.

- Rachel
xx

Author's Response: I can't even tell you how happy I was when I saw in the thread that you reviewed this fic. When I wrote it, I did so with no hope of it ever becoming a popular or super-appreciated story, because honestly, people just don't often to looking for a Let's Read About Tom Riddle's Childhood! Story. Even so, because it was written in a very stylized way for me, and kind of a break from my usual writing, I hoped to get a little feedback on it so I would know it was complete rubbish. I basically gave up after a few weeks and let it remain, a little one-shot to prove that I have written nonromances.

When I first started writing the story, the whole thing was going to be from the four-year-old perspective, but I changed my mind about midway through that section. It was important to me, if I was going to study Tom's character, to see the progression, because I think looking at one thing at a time it can be difficult to understand anything about someone's character, and it is only when you see the whole thing in context, how one moment leads to another, that you really start to see where it all came from. I wanted to strike a balance between the "No one is born evil" camp and the "He was always going to be evil no doubt about it" camp. In this story, Tom isn't a nice guy, but there are also so many instances where he could have been reached and wasn't.

All in all, I just want you to know that this review really made me feel so much better about this entire story. It is more than I could have hoped for for my poor little TomStudy, and it means so much to me.
Thank you, you are amazing!


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