I really appreciated the progression of Lily's opinion of James. You can't change almost 7 years of experience in a moment. But you can ask for another chance to be given. You did a great job of the build up to what we all know eventually happens. I loved your take on "the beginning". Well done! Report Review
Nawww I love it when Sirius plays Cupid :P I also love that you haven't made the story progress at an unrealistic speed - I think you've finished it on a good note, leaving the rest up to the reader's imagination. Having said that though, I'd love to see how the rest plays out as you imagine it :) Particularly loved the opening and closing paragraphs!Author's Response: Thank you! I was really just trying to give a glimpse into the beginning of their relationship, so I'm glad you thought that it was realistic. I love James/ Lily, so maybe I will go back to this someday. Thanks for the feedback and review! Report Review
I just want to say, the first thing that drew me to this story, was the beautiful banner. Then i read the story and was so glad i did! it is fantastic, the only disappointment is that it is just a one-shot! Please consider writing a novella?
10/10Author's Response: The banner is definitely gorgeous. I got it off of the Up For Grabs section on TDA, they have great stuff there. Lol I'm writing a novella already at the moment, and opening too many projects always leads to my downfall :( However, I agree that I did not want to stop writing this version of Lily and James. It's going to be filed under my "to return to" stories. Maybe someday :) Thanks for the review! Report Review
I really enjoyed it.
"Yeah, I'd hate a guy like that, too."
I thought it was clever you had Lily tell Sirius who she thought James was, and then have Sirius counter with who he thought James was. To show that there's different sides, and that misconceptions can mean a lot.
Or maybe you just wrote it and it turned out cool like that. Either way, it's pretty awesome.
Bravo to you.Author's Response: Thank you for taking time to leave a response and I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) I tried to format the whole story to kind of play off of "two sides to every story" with jumping back between Lily and James' different reactions to the same event and then different points of view with Lily and Sirius, I'm glad you appreciated it :) Thank you again. Report Review
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