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Review #1, by Loony_Scorpy Proposal of Sir Markus Wells

27th June 2011:
Haha hufflepuffs are great finders :P I really like this but it's hard reading about a bad person :P and I can imagine it would be very difficult to write her! I don't mind if you make her a good person ;P So does/will Natalie actually like ruining the relationships? I mean I know it was a dare thing but the fact that she's actually going through with it? It's a pretty awesome story though and I can't wait for you next chapter :D

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Review #2, by fairytaled Introducing, Victim #1

20th April 2011:
I like Natalie through her dialogue, it shows she's trying to be something she's not. I want to know more about Potter and Wood's relationship, did they have a history like James chasing her or best friends?

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Review #3, by fairytaled The Beginning

20th April 2011:
She's a homewrecker! This is interesting, I like Natalie. She has that drive, that she can't break a promise or let herself down. I'll be reading on...

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Review #4, by Voldys_Moldy The Beginning

20th April 2011:
sounds good. i'm liking the idea, and i'm going to read the rest of it that's up right now.

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Review #5, by Aderyn Introducing, Victim #1

19th February 2011:
Hello, this isn't a bad chapter.

My real reason for reviewing though is to ask you to rehost the banner I made for you (I'm laelia @ TDA). I sent you a PM on TDA talking about how to do this. Please respond as soon as possible.

Thank you and I'm sorry to have to resort to reviewing to say this to you--I have no other means of reaching you.

Author's Response: oh gosh. Sorry. My computer has been on the fritz so I haven't been able to go on the internet for almost a week or two. So thats why I haven't responded. I'll do that asap.

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Review #6, by Amberfire Introducing, Victim #1

15th February 2011:
Hey!
I'm liking this story so far :) It's a very interesting concept and I'm looking forward to seeing how she works on breaking up the relationships - it's not often you see an anti-matchmaker in a story! Usually it's the other way around, and I'm liking this so far :)

I think possibly you might want to go back and clear up the promise she made, it seems kind of suss. Like, she made a promise to break up every stable relationship in Hogwarts, but it wasn't a binding promise? I understand that she doesn't break promises, but still it seems a little :S for her to put herself through all the flack she is going to cop for being the anti-matchmaker. Unless that's a plot point or something? Maybe she does actually have the choice to pull out and that torments her - pride against what she knows is best? But I think maybe having it as an actual vow would be more solid if you didn't want to do that?

Oh and also, she didn't promise that she would have to break up the relationships by stealing the girl's man did she? At first I didn't even consider that she would! I thought she would use crafty ways to turn them against each other, or get one of them interested in another person. Don't get me wrong, I loved Natalie's attempt to seduce James, but I think that other ways of breaking up couples would be interesting to read about also (not sure if you were planning this anyway, but just putting it out there)

I'm also interested to see how the three times she got her heart broken pan out ;) Especially considering you started with Mr James McHottyPants Potter who I would usually think would be main pairing and still have two loves to go! I'm intrigued :D

And I agree with ':)' who reviewed chapter one and said Natalie reminds them of Emma Stone is Easy A - she so does! And Linsey Wood is 'virginal and saint-like' so she reminds me of Amanda Bynes in Easy A ;)

Anyway, thanks for the update! and I hope you write more soon because I'm looking forward to reading more :D
Love Amberfire

Author's Response: Don't worry. The only one she will seduce will be James. The girls in each relationship will also be on the receiving end of some mischief. As for the promise she made, I think that I mentioned that she signed a document in the first chapter. It's not a blood oath because that would mean that she would die if she didn't succeed, but she did sign a paper. I'll try to make it much more obvious in the upcoming chapters!

Wonderful review, seriously, that helped me a lot. The plot will probably start to get a bit more clear when it's clearer in my own head :D


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Review #7, by :) The Beginning

9th February 2011:
I love this!! :D Please please keep writing?? :) Its great! It's funny, it's original it's interesting and there's someone that's about to screw up her life! :) Hehe that's exactly what Im looking for! Seriously it looks really good so far and I love the main character! She kinda reminds me of the girl in easy A I dunno why :P Have you seen the movie? It's really good! :D Anyway sorry for my Pointless rambling :P Please keep on writing and one last thing very nice summary :)


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