Very cute little piece. You can only improve as a writer! Try to read over it out loud to make sure you got any little mistakes and to make sure your dialogue sounds right! Nice job!Author's Response: OMG THX SO Much for th rviw, i will read it outloud like u said thx agan Report Review
This story has potential, but it's very hard to read. You need some spelling corrections, punctuation, and grammar revisions. I would be happy to beta this for you.
The idea was nice. It seemed a bit like Speak Now, a song by Taylor Swift. Any inspiration from that?
You should also start a new paragraph each time a different character talks. It makes it easier to follow.
Overall, nice, but hard to read. Congratulations on getting your first story up!
~massieAuthor's Response: OMG OMG A REVIEW! thx thx thx!
on to th e respond part lol
it has poterncil? However u spell it, u get it. it has it! yayay! yeah i know i shouldve corrected that stuf, but I didn't want to. You dont need to beta, thx for ofering.
I lurv speak now! lol no
ok i will
thx thx thx!
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