5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Melou Prologue: You'll Always Find Me Here

23rd August 2012:
Oh the grammatical errors! This story could be good, but the story needs to be desperately gone over by someone who knows how to put a sentence together properly.

For instance your intro should read as follows:

Once discarded beings, brought back by one man's mission to own the wizarding world. While the Ministry of Magic stands there telling us, "it is no pain to add worry upon" (what do you even mean by that?). Well, my dear people, the Ministry has lied! Lied to us all. It is not just the werewolves or vampires you need to be afraid of. (Tried to add the 'or yourself' in there, however it didn't seem to fit. Why would you need to be afraid of yourself?)

In any case, pretty much everything i've read needs to be edited. I had a hard enough time getting through the first chapter, so I don't think i'll be able to get through the rest of the story without compulsively rewriting the entire thing.

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Review #2, by rupertlover (not logged in) Prologue: You'll Always Find Me Here

21st March 2012:
I actually think this is pretty interesting! I honestly didn't think it was going to be that good because of the lack of reviews but I did enjoy it. I look up to you that you still continued even when you only have 3 reviews :)

Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words!!! And yes I know I have a lack of reviews which actually does not keep me down because I have a really good friend who reads everything I write!!!

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Review #3, by Fred Impossible

2nd December 2011:
Who would be so stupid as to ask the girl who just admitted cheating on him to marry him?

Author's Response: Regardless of the fact that she cheated on James with his best mate he loved her and on some level Isabella loved him too...I mean dude I am right there with you if someone cheated on me then asked me to marry him I do not think I would even answer him but the two of them share something different which for Isabella when she cheated it made her realize that James was the better choice so in a way, strange and twisted as it may be sleeping with Adam one last time showed her that he was not going to change for her nor the child she was carry hance why she went back to James because Isabella knows that he will always take care of her like a man should

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Review #4, by Fan Someone Like You

11th October 2011:
Your story is wonderful!
The plot is brilliant!
t'snot typical next Gen!! (soppy romance)
and I'm inspired by you and the fact that you have 1 review yet you still keep writing!
10/10 for everything!


Author's Response: thank you!!

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Review #5, by apotter  Prologue: You'll Always Find Me Here

2nd February 2011:
I found it really interesting. I was a bit confused in the beginning but everything soon cleared out of who the characters were and where the stood in the story. I liked it :)
Keep writing


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