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Review #1, by AbraxanUnicorn Prolouge: Once Upon a Time

9th April 2017:
Hello! I'm just here to break my friend out of jail, don't mind me :)

Gosh, this is a very poignant start to a story. The opening sentence really captured my attention, and I wonder who the protagonist is and what happened to turn them from a happy, carefree child into a sad, pining woman?

The paragraph which begins with a sentence about trivial choices brings to mind the film "Sliding Doors". How one seemingly innocuous little action can have such dramatic consequences and how a single choice could effect two very differing outcomes.

It appears the protagonist, whoever she is, may be pining for love opportunities lost. Was there someone in her life who she decided not to be with and is now regretting that course of action? Although, if by following her heart, she thinks she would have ended up hating herself, then perhaps this person wouldn't have been so great for her after all. Ooh, intriguing.

This story seems to be set in a time of war, but we don't know when or who our narrator is. It's a very interesting beginning, and this prologue certainly makes me want to read on and find out more.

Great first chapter!

Brax X

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Review #2, by PaulaTheProkaryote Prolouge: Once Upon a Time

9th April 2017:
HELLO LOVELY! Iím here for CTF at HPFT. Obviously the Claws have to win. ;) You know how these things go.

I'm interested in this story mainly because it seems very different from your other jilys (abandoned or not). The fairytale style is very intriguing because thereís often this trope in jily fics that Lily is like the stuck up Gryffindor princess and Iím interested in where youíre going with it. Even if itís only for a few thousand words.

I like this idea that in the prologue we get a very early indication of what Lily's childhood was like. Ideal. It's a bit in conflict with what we get from the typical Lily. There's no mention of her bratty sister calling her a freak or any of that jealousy involving her special powers. But I think it's okay without that stuff because in reality a lot of kids (especially so young as to believe in fairytales and to still be read them every night) would probably gloss over those dark patches. And perhaps Petunia didn't have any real issues with her sister until we get closer to Hogwarts age.

The stealing cars thing threw me for a bit of a loop. Iím assuming itís all metaphorical but...but..maybe her boyfriend is literally stealing cars for a living?

Iím assuming the darkness that has stolen her youthful innocence away is probably the impending war that is looming like a dark shadow over the entire wizarding community, but especially for someone like her who is muggleborn. She can never revert back to the muggle lifestyle of comfort and innocence because she is in too deep.


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Review #3, by MrsJaydeMalfoy The Ball

28th December 2015:
I just can't contain my excitement for this! I love it so much already, and we're only 4 chapters in! I'm going to need another chapter of this!! ♥

I just LOVE the comparison of various parts of Lily's life to parts of a Fairy Tale - this is so original and amazing, and the pieces line up perfectly!

I'm extremely curious as to what was said between Petunia and Lily on the platform, and I can't help but wonder why Lily would be angry at Severus - it's not HIS fault Petunia reacted the way she did to Lily's magic. Still though, at such a young age and knowing how much she loves her sister, it's probably a little hard for her to see that.

I'm very interested to see what happens next - I really, really hope these reviews were the boost you needed to pick this story up again! This is SUCH an amazing story, dear - you NEED to finish this! PLEASE! ♥ *squishes*

Really, really well done! I love it and it's going in my favorites right now!

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Review #4, by MrsJaydeMalfoy The Fairy Godmother

28th December 2015:
EEk! I just LOVE this!

It's SO easy to see here why and how Lily and Severus grew so close and became such good friends - they both needed each other, really. And, you've conveyed their emotions here SO beautifully - honestly, this is my FAVORITE portrayal of the beginning of their friendship that I've ever read!

I can imagine how hard it must have been for Lily to believe what Severus was saying at first - for all she knew, he could have been creating fantasies in her head, Hogwarts may not have even existed. So, it shows even more just how trusting she was of him, and also how desperate she was for an explanation of what's going on with her.

And reading this makes me even MORE sad to know what's coming when they get to Hogwarts. :( Seriously, you've just completely blown my mind with this! I can't wait to read the next chapter!

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Review #5, by MrsJaydeMalfoy It Inciting Tragedy

28th December 2015:
Oh WOW. Just, wow.

First off, I'm pretty sure I've never read a story that talked about Lily's parents, how they met, what Lily's life as a small child was like, so you get major kudos for originality.

Secondly, I think it's great to have some background information to get us started, to help us see what happened that caused all the choices and events that happened in Lily's life.

And your whole emphasis on the word "normal", and how Ruth wanted her daughters to be so extraordinary, but then wound up regretting it, is just... amazing. She got exactly what she wanted, but then once she saw it, she realized it may not have been what she wanted for her daughters after all.

I like your description of Lily's temper, because she's definitely known to have one in the books. And, reading how Ruth always tried to keep from upsetting Lily, etc, really helps me to understand why Petunia might have wound up hating her sister.

This is another fabulous chapter, I really hope we get to see Ruth's reaction to finding out Lily's a witch!

Well done!

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Review #6, by MrsJaydeMalfoy Prolouge: Once Upon a Time

28th December 2015:
Hi there lovely! I'm a few hours late with this, but HAPPY HOT SEAT!! *Squishes*

This is such a haunting first chapter - seeing how darkly Lily views everything now and that she wishes she could go back in time. It's so sad to see her so depressed at such a young age - like she mentioned in the chapter, the war would have been especially difficult for the children.

I can't help but wonder where all this will lead, and what will happen along the way. The language you used here was so beautiful and I'm very intrigued. I know you asked for reviews on this because you want to start it back up, and I really hope you do - I know I haven't finished it yet, but I can already tell this is going to be amazing!

Anyway, an excellent first chapter, and I'm off to the next! Well done dear!

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Review #7, by randomwriter The Fairy Godmother

19th July 2015:
House Cup 2015!
Gryffindor ♥

This is officially my favourite story of yours so far, Katie. This deserves some serious praise, and it's a shame that I hadn't heard of this earlier!

I love your characterisation of both Snape and Lily in this. What really struck out is how you've used canonical information, but put your own spin on it. we all know Snape's parents fought, we know that Lily befriended Snape, while Petunia didn't, etc. But here, you've also painted Lily in a similar light, and that makes sense. Beyond him telling her that she is a witch and showing her how much they have in common, there's also this compelling reason that pushed her towards him. She needed a friend pretty badly. And you can tell that he's the same Snape we know, but you've evolved their relationship as you pleased by making him less doting than the usual take on child-Snape that we see. I can see these characters growing up to be who they were in the books. I'm excited to see how you develop their relationship as your story moves forward. I'm a little sad that there's only one more chapter up so far.

You're a brilliant writer. You've written a lot of different types of stories with the same level of skill. I enjoy how crisp your writing is despite the amount of information you convey. Your writing is well edited, and the words clearly work well.

I have plenty more to say, but I'm trying to keep it short. Feel free to PM me if you'd like to know anything about anything I've read :) Great work!


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Review #8, by randomwriter It Inciting Tragedy

19th July 2015:
Gryffindor for the Cup (2015)!

Oh my, Katie. This story is seriously drawing me in. I love how you manage to still keep the dark and mysterious tone alive in this as well.

The first section was simple. I liked David and Ruth. They are, as you point out, average people leading average lives. I also completely got Ruth as she was satisfied, but not overjoyed with the life she was leading. We all, at least I feel, strive to be great. We want to leave an impression. So I understand why Ruth felt that way. Also, I may not be a mother, but I also thought that er desire for her daughters to be something more than her was realistic. I've often seen a lot of parents project their unfulfilled wishes on their offspring. Here, she didn't ask anything of them. Rather, she hoped that they'd be great, and that, I get.

I also thought that, that section was quite sweet. It was nothing extra ordinary. I loved how described David and Ruth's love, and how you portrayed motherhood, and her love for her children. You managed to tell us the story of a whole lifetime in so few words, and you did it so well, without compromising on emotion at all.

When it comes to the second section, the whole thing changed. Of course we know who Lily is, or rather what she is. But I can imagine how Ruth must have felt when her exquisitely talented girl took a turn for what she believes is the worst. It was painful to read about it, almost.

What saddened me the most was how the same mother who loved and doted on her child in the first section deemed her a tragedy in the next. I don't blame her, not yet. She doesn't know what's happening, and it's natural to be worried. I just hope she doesn't do anything cruel.

As for the tone, the second section was as chilling as the first section was sweet and simple. But I loved it. I love that you've written this thing that is slowly becoming consuming in nature, and I like how're ending it in cliffhangers, because I enjoy suspense.

Great job, Katie ♥ I have so much to say, but not enough time, so I shall march on!

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Review #9, by randomwriter Prolouge: Once Upon a Time

19th July 2015:
I almost forgot to mention after this breathtaking prologue, but this is for the House Cup 2015, and I am from Gryffindor.

Wow, Katie. This took a sudden turn from everything of yours that I've read. But I love dark, mysterious things. So this is a possible favourite. In fact, I've already favourited it ^_^

I had to go back to the story shell to check if this was actually a James/Lily after reading the chapter, and now, I do feel like it may be. And that only makes me more curious to see how you integrate that into this.

My mind is burning with questions. Is Lily the narrator? How does she fall for James? Did she fall out of love with him? Who is this muggle boy? I suppose I'll have to wait for answers, but this was so worth reading.

Your writing here is absolutely perfect. And some lines just caught me, and I actually had to stop and appreciate how great they were. I can't possibly list all of them back to you without feeling as if I'm just quoting the whole chapter. But I'll give you an example:
I miss believing in the possibility of them. This is a seemingly normal sentence in the middle of a paragraph. But I just felt like it help so much weight. The moment someone stops believing in fairy tales is always a big one, in terms of growing up and understanding reality. It's clear the protagonist has lead a difficult life and she repeats on numerous occasions that she has grown up before her time. But to me, that line summed the whole thing up perfectly.

The last sentence too was pretty clever. It left me feeling so much, and while it's definitely not nice being on the receiving end of that, I can appreciate it for how the line serves as a perfect closing for this prologue.

I really, really need to know what happened to this woman, but I'll hold off. I'm upset that I can't stop to give you a whole review, like I noramlly would when I come across something this brilliant, but the House Cup calls for certain things. Let it be known that I thoroughly enjoyed this, and that I have no criticism, only curiosity. In that regard, it was the perfect prologue. But in all, I enjoyed it. Great job ♥

Author's Response: Oh my goodness, I'm so flattered by this!

I stopped writing this story because it didn't get very much praise, and honestly, I don't think I had quite the skill I needed to pull it off the way I wanted to, but I think I'll have to start reviving it :)

Thank you so much for this.

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Review #10, by Nicole The Ball

18th July 2011:
Wow this is really great!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed this!

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Review #11, by Fanifical The Fairy Godmother

18th March 2011:
Well there no denying that your a brilliant writer, that's for sure. I, personally am excited to see what you come up with, how you twist and mold the story so it's yours but still has the obvious JK Rowling characters. I'm very interested in seeing how you portray all the other characters and can't wait til you get into the Lily/James stuff and longer chapters. So really, keep writing because you have, whatever it is you have it, and I am expecting a VERY good outcome for this story. As far as good fanfictions go, this is a very good one. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

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Review #12, by LaMignonette The Fairy Godmother

16th March 2011:
This was way to short, but a good beginning to the lily/snape friendship that I despise so much.

Author's Response: I know. This was short even by my standards. What can I say? I just get excited, and want to share! :) Despite the brevity, and the fact that it involves Snape, I'm glad you like it! :) BTW, I totally understand about hating the lily/snape friendship. I'm trying to portray him fairly, but it's so hard because I hate him so much. Uck, Snape

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Review #13, by C A L M The Fairy Godmother

11th March 2011:
Loved the story so far, can't wait to read more :)

Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you enjoy it!

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Review #14, by LaMignonette It Inciting Tragedy

7th February 2011:
I'm impressed. Really, I am, and I'm usually quite the critic. I love your descriptions of the mother. They're something so sad and realistic about getting exactly what you wished for. Please update soon!

Author's Response: LaMignonette, I Know you're a critic, and that's why I appreciate your reviews so much. :) I'm so glad you like this story too. It's completely different than my other so I was a bit worried people wouldn't like it. :) I'll try to update soon, I actually want to get started on this next chapter right now, but I'm afraid that I'll have knives thrown at me or some other terrible things if I update this before Kiss and Tell is finished... lol :)

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Review #15, by emeraldeyes77 Prolouge: Once Upon a Time

25th January 2011:
Hey Sunny! I'm a dedicated follower of Kiss and Tell and you posted about this story in your authors note so I decided to go onto your page and take a look. Fairytalesque looks like its off to a good start :) I can't wait to keep reading!


Author's Response: Hello! I'm glad that you decided to come take a look! It's certainly very different than Kiss and Tell, but I'm pretty excited for it. :) I'm glad you like it so far, and I hope you keep reading! Thanks for the review! :)

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