Reading Reviews for Dancing in Fields of Yellow
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Review #1, by marauderfan Daffodils

20th March 2016:
Hi Ellie! I'm here for your first prize review for the Least Favorite Challenge. I have to say, it was hard to decide what to read on your page because everything looks so good, and you've got such a variety of writing on there! I do love me some Founders though, and they're much less often written than other eras so I don't get to read them as often as I'd like.

I love how often you step outside your comfort zone - at least based on my challenge and the prompt for this one - it kind of means that your comfort zone includes practically anything now! I'd never have guessed that you don't write Fluff often - this was wonderfully fluffy and sweet, and I think you succeeded with the humor as well. It wasn't like, LOL-funny, but it was a kind of subtle humor that I think works really well with fics of this era. Essentially, even though you say neither of these genres is your forte, you did so well writing them that I'd never have guessed.

The most impressive aspect of this story is the description. Maybe because Fluff stories don't often feature much plot, it gives a lot of room for branching out with other things, like you did here with your stunning visual descriptions and the abundance of color in the fic. And the effort you put into describing exactly what Helga was making while she cooked. Mmm. The way you keep referencing the harvest and the way their lives really revolve around the seasons gives it the appropriate historical feel.

Oh and I love the hints at Helga/Rowena. :D :D Beautiful.

I'm not sure if you want me to mention this, as I'm aware the story is a few years old, but I caught a few errors - a couple of times you used the word 'burrow' when I believe you meant 'borrow.'
And a minor historical note - Potatoes and tomatoes were originally New World plants and were only discovered by European explorers in the 1500s, meaning Helga wouldn't have had access to them in the year 900 or 1000 or whenever exactly this takes place.

Obviously, the story is still amazing, picky historical details notwithstanding. I love your characterization of both women, how you show so much in a short scene, and your wonderful use of descriptive language. I think this is a prime example of 'showing, not telling', as even though it's not heavily plot-based, there's a lot going on. Helga's treatment of her house-elf was so lovely as well and exactly as I'd imagine her interacting with house elves.

Wonderful work on this story, I loved it!

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Review #2, by The Ninth Month Daffodils

30th September 2015:
Hello, my dear child!

It's me, September, the month of grape harvest, Autumnal Equinox and, most importantly, your birthday!

And so I'm here to celebrate with a review this very important occurrence, even if I'm a tiny bit late for it.

First of all, let me tell you that I really enjoyed your description in the beginning. It had this autumnal flavour, which tastes so familiar to me. And talking about flavours... I loved the cooking theme, your description of all the earthy goods, the colours, the seasons...

The way you portray Helga is so fitting and just beautiful. You show her love for nature, her spontaneity, her cheeriness, her kindness, her simplicity!

Rowena is more serious and... aristocratic? Could it be the right word? But she's still sweet and with a carefree side. And the fact that she thought of Helga and brought her the flowers was just so sweet too!

And I loved the final scene with the dream, with the two women dancing in the field of daffodils. It is such a beautiful and poetic image.

Great job on this, my dear! I loved the tone, and the descriptions, and generally the sweetness and delicacy of this lovely little piece!

And now, I really have to go. I still have to visit so many of my sons and daughters before I have to give way to October.

Happy belated birthday. Hope you had a lot of fun.

With love,
The Ninth Month

Author's Response: What a lovely month you are!! Thank you for the most random and swell review :) So sweet! I had a lovely birthday and this review is a great gift, I appreciate it.

Yes Helga embodies earth (and hearth) and I'm glad you felt that I captured this, and your delicious month so well! Mm root veggies haha. Helga is a darling. I enjoyed writing her. Rowena is more aristocratic certainly. Great word for her! I glad you enjoyed the description and the tone. The subtleties were important to this piece, so I'm glad you appreciated the delicacy of it all!

Cheers darling Ninth Month, enjoy the rest of the season,
xoxo Ellie

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Review #3, by Karou_Marauder Daffodils

8th July 2014:
Hello! This is me reviewing for the 2014 House Cup Review event.

Plot: I thought it was really sweet how Rowena brought the daffodils for Helga. Also the idea of Helga cooking before Hogwarts got big is interesting - but surely someone would help her? Godric or Salazar? I'm pretty sure that wizards and witches were always viewed equally, even back in the Founders' time. It was very interesting though.

Characterisation: The way you portrayed Helga is very close to the ideals of Huflepuff house: loyal, hard-working and friendly. I thought you got that across very well. Also Rowena was quite aloof and knowledgeable, like Ravenclaws, so that was well-done.

Description: I loved the way you described Helga at the start, with the fire and earth. JKR once said somewhere that the houses are supposed to represent the elements, and Hufflepuff is earth, so that fits well whether you meant it to or not.

It was also nice how you fit the daffodils into the dream too.

-Karou :)

Author's Response: Hello Karou!

Thanks for stopping by and taking the time to review. I'm glad you felt that I captured the essence of the houses, characters, and era. This is definitely one of my favorite pieces of writing on here, so I'm glad you enjoyed it too!

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Review #4, by Cirque Du Freak Daffodils

23rd December 2011:
Considering I haven't had much exposure to fluffy things as of late I kind of sort of really did enjoy this haha!

It was interesting, because even though (as you said) that you hadn't much experience in the era - you did amazingly well, in my opinion. I've always been quite intrigued in the era and have been starting to branch out towards it and this definitely helped. :)

I really liked this because your writing is so easy to read and I feel like I'm enjoying it and it isn't a hassle either. The description/dialogue ratio is perfect and you make things interesting enough.

The language is easy and I've always thought of having to write in Founders era (or anything before the 20th century, for that matter) would be forced and hard and tiresome. You've made, even the speech, understandable but still holding that "olden times" tone to it in the arrangement of your words.

I particularly like that you pinpointed on Helga being different compared to the other Founders, because she originally was a "peasant" and she wasn't used to being treated as anything but. I love the characterisation you have for her and I think you've fit it very well with your challenge too. :)

All in all, I really enjoyed this! :D

Author's Response: Cirque,

Your winter gifts from TGS bring some many smiles to my face! Seriously, I love your reviews, they make me feel so good about my writing. I feel like you're my personal booster-upper and I love it! Haha.

I'm happy that everything I did fit the era and prompt in your opinion. I did take me awhile to write this, because I wanted it to be as close to perfect as I could it. I like the way it turned out, but I like it even more when readers say that it's not dreadful :P Seriously, the language wasn't as bad as the characterizations. You should give the era a shot sometime!

Thanks again, I'm glad you enjoyed!


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Review #5, by _Leo_ Daffodils

30th September 2011:
Hey there, back for another review!

Lol, it has daffodils :D
But seriously, I thought you did a wonderful job with the prompt. Slash or not, it was a nice affectionate gesture.
I liked the way you characterised Helga, from the way she deals with the house-elf to her thoughts of the other three founders. Nice thought that she might have cooked for the first students herself; that's something I can imagine from how she chose her students.

Especially the first paragraphs were really impressive, they painted the scene for me quite nicely.
This line made me chuckle:
"Onions and Rowena's diadem were notably absent as well."
I love it when some canon detail is woven in so casually!

Really great story, it really deserves the Dobby nomination!
Cheers, Leo

Author's Response: I know right! Daffodils bring about great stories haha!

Thank you very much for the kind review. *blushes* it means a lot to me that you thought I deserved the nomination. I was so shocked when that happened!

I'm glad you felt that this piece was so canon-compliant and great! This is always something I strive for, canon correctness.


Bear hugs,

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Review #6, by Evanevieve Daffodils

7th September 2011:
I think it's beautiful :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Evanevieve! I'm glad you enjoyed this one-shot :) I appreciate the review!


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Review #7, by leannemariesnape Daffodils

11th August 2011:
I've never read Founders before, so I know little about it, but I do like what you've written in this one-shot. The interraction between Rowena and Helga was really nice, and the Daffodils were a nice addition. I also liked how Helga interracted with the house-elves, which I thought would be very in character. It was a very cute one-shot and a nice introduction into the Founders era. I also liked your characterisation of Ravenclaw, which I think would have been perfectly in character.
Well done!
Leanne (leannemariesnape, Hufflepuff)

Author's Response: 'Ello Leanne! Thanks for stopping by, I'm glad you enjoyed the one-shot :) I'm glad you felt that I got the characters of Helga and Rowena down, that's a huge compliment considering JK left us with only snippets of what these women meant to her HP world. Thanks for the review again!


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Review #8, by schoenberg12 Daffodils

6th August 2011:
beautiful diction! beautiful imagery!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm glad you found the one-shot to be so beautiful :)


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Review #9, by GinnyWeasley_13 Daffodils

25th July 2011:
This was fantastic. You worked so well with description; it really lit up the story and made you feel you were there. I think you've got Rowena and Helga perfect - the way they would have acted and talked. I liked the name you gave to the house-elf too.

Author's Response: Thank you very much, GinnyWeasley_13! I'm glad you felt like you were there and that I did justice to Rowling's characters, Rowena and Helga. I appreciate your review and your kind words :)


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Review #10, by WhiteAzaleas Daffodils

12th May 2011:
This is gorgeous! You really have a way with words :) I love the Founders era but it's so hard to find a good story to read. Thanks for sharing this!

Author's Response: Aw thank you so much, WhiteAzaleas! I adore the Founders too and so I'm glad that you found this to be a good story, yay! Thanks for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it :)


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Review #11, by Jenna822 Daffodils

5th May 2011:
This is really really good. Like, seriously. You clearly did your canon research and it showed. Wonderful story. I'm bad at reviewing today. :/ Love this. ♥ --Jenna

Author's Response: Aw, thanks, Jenna!! I'm glad you enjoyed this and find it to be wonderful :) I read a lot of Founders and am still trying to do the era as much justice as I can haha. Thanks again for the read and review!


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Review #12, by maskedmuggle Daffodils

10th January 2011:
I love this. There are so less founders stories compared to Marauders/Next-Gen, and many of those are about Hogwarts specifically. I really like your story because this missing moment that you wrote about is so special, like nothing I would've imagined.

Your writing is so descriptive, particularly at the beginning where you were describing the setting, and I could just imagine Helga and the whole scene.

Lovely writing, lovely story, an enjoyable read :)

Author's Response: Hi, maskedmuggle!

Wow! Another unexpected and lovely review :) I never thought anyone would read this, let alone review it haha. Thank you for taking your time to review this one-shot, I'm glad you enjoyed the missing moment. *blushes* And thank you for all the kind words about my writing, I really appreciate them! I'm glad you felt I added an enjoyable read to the Founders Era on HPFF. Thanks for this!

(Also, good luck in the challenge too!)


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Review #13, by CheeringCharm Daffodils

7th January 2011:
This piece was very pretty, I love the way that you paint pictures and sceneries with words.

You have made a great story I do however find some parts a bit too long and they lose my intrest.

I really like the way that you have Rowena and Helga in your story and how you have their relationship just underneath the surface. According to me you have pictured their personalities very well and I really like Helga and when you have the house-elf you make her traits all the clearer.

I could not find any things in the text that seemed weird except for a double usage of were (?) "Potatoes and were carrots were on the left" :)

Very good story!


Author's Response: Aww thanks, CheeringCharm!

This is such a random and lovely review, I really appreciate it! Thanks for the feedback about the lengthier parts, I will look those over ;) I'm glad you found my characterizations to be accurate and that you enjoyed Helga. And thanks for pointing out that error, I always make a few >.> Sigh. Haha this was very sweet of you and I'm glad you thought it was pretty too.


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