Like your other story, I like this one alot. Though I agree with the other reviewer there are a few spelling and grammer errors, they are hardly noticeable. I only spotted them since they were mentioned by your last reviewer. Anyway I understood the story very well the way it has been written. Again I have to give 10/10. A very good start to the story. Please update ASAP. MERRY CHRISTMASAuthor's Response: Lol, I fixed a lot of mistakes and I know there's still more but I will get to them when I have more time. Thanks for you review and I'm glad you also like this one. I will update soon and again, Merry Christmas. Report Review
This is a good story, with a great take on Harry and Sirius. There are numerous grammar and spelling errors though, and quite a few run on sentences. I hate to say this, I really do, but that stuff ruins the story like a T-Rex at a bar mitzvah. :)Don't be scared to write a really short sentence. They're actually a lot more powerful when they contain well-chosen words. Oh, and last time I checked, Cornelius Fudge was nosy, but not very noisy. ;)Author's Response: Lol. Sorry about the errors, I will fix what I can :P Thanks for your advise and review. Report Review
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