I like Jake but it seems so wierd how he just popped up when Alice began talking to the Marauders. I greatly await the next chapter :)

Author's Response: Well, I tried to make him more realistic because, honestly, most guys aren't jerks. Almost every fiction I have read involves a guy being a real jerk. But some of them are just normal people that can be quite annoying, haha. Yes, well, I wanted to portray Jake as more of a shy person.

But, if you recall, Alice does "bump into him" at one point in the fiction, it's just that his name is not given. *I know that readers will probably forget small moments like those (bumping into someone in the hallway) but I wanted to make sure that Alice "met" him in some way before actually introducing the character (whether directly or indirectly) *

If you look back at the first few chapters you will read it. Then, afterwards, she receives the note and formally meets him.

Thank you so much! Well, it's coming, I just need to write the second half of it. It's going to be quite long.

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Hey I like your fic. However, you may need to do research on how a quidditch team is set up. You forgot a keeper and had extra chasers, there's supposed to be a seeker, a keeper, 3 chasers and 2 beaters. And, some of your facts didn't match up, a couple of chapters ago, you said that the first match of the year would be between griffyndor and hufflepuff, and then you changed it to griffyndor versus slytherin. You should probably make sure your facts match before you add a chapter. Overall, though, your story is really great and i love, love, love the way you represent your characters.

Author's Response: Oh, no, I know.
I just don't mention the name of the keeper on the Gryffindor team. Sorry, I should have but I guess I forgot to write in the keeper's name. Hm..yes, well, I should. It's just that for the past year I have revising this entire story (re-reading it and then re-writing it) so I guess I got a bit confused, but I'll fix that.
But thank you!!
=]

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Team Remus! Haha but seriously, update more often because I really love this story

Author's Response: Hey! I know! I think at this point the majority of people are on Team Remus. THANK YOU! I do try, the next chapter will be up definitely before the end of September! =] THANK YOU!

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Please uPdate soon!!! :D i am really luving this fic!!! :D

Author's Response: I do try. The next chapter is currently a work in progress but I have the majority of it written. Now I just need to write the conclusion and revise it! THANK YOU!!! THANK YOU!!! =]

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I quite like this story and I can't wait for you to add the next chapter, but I do not like Jake. He is just too self conscious for my liking and a bit of a stalker.

Author's Response: Hey! Wow, thank you so much! That's really kind of you! =] I am going to be adding to this chapter and then writing the next chapter, so just look for an update! Yea, I didn't want to make Jake a cheater or someone who was a complete arse because not every guy is like that. I wanted to make him more realistic. THANK YOU! =]

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FINALLY
Chapters are kinda short so please make them longer
! Please,keep writing I love this story

Author's Response: Aha, I know that there have been people waiting for a new chapter to come out. I'm really sorry for the wait but I did need to revise the previous chapters and I am glad that I have that done.
I always try to make them 1,000-2,000 words (if not more).
THANK YOU SO SO MUCH!! I really do appreciate it!
I'll try to make some of them longer! It's just that sometimes it feels like it's the perfect ending of a chapter.
BUT THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! =] I didn't really think anyone would love the story, maybe like it, but not love it.
I REALLY, REALLY, REALLY, REALLY, APPRECIATE IT!!! =]

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I can't stop reading this.
So hurry up and write the next chapter!!!
xoxoxo

Author's Response: Really? Wow, thank you, honestly, I am blushing. Definitely, I am done revising the story and now I am writing a nice, long chapter for you all.

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You are a great writer!
I love this story.
You are the second JK Rowling :)

Author's Response: Oh, Merlin!!! I am so surprised right now. Me? A great writer? No, anyone else but me. You probably don't believe me but I am so grateful for your review, views, and compliment.

That is the best compliment I have ever been told, officially. But J.K. Rowling is too good, I am certainly not the second J.K. Rowling.

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KEEP WRITING
This story is soo good, honestly i check this story evry day to see if a new chapter has been added. Definetely one of my faves. Keep writing, cant wait to see what happens next. AND I WANT A NICE LONG CHAPTER NEXT!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you!!! =] Really? I'm so sorry that I didn't put a new chapter out (because I feel it necessary to get all the revision done and then add another chapter - some of the lines and words have changed but the story line has stayed the same). When I'm done I will put out a nice, long, exciting chapter dedicated to you! =]

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A-mazing!!! write more chapters or break my heart;)

Author's Response: I'm blushing, honestly! =) Thank you so so much for your review, it definitely boost my confidence level for this story. At the moment, I am going through revisions but I'll try to get a new chapter out as soon as I can! THANK YOU!!

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i luv your book it is so good. WRITE MORE. HURRY UP WITH THE NEXT CHAPTER>

Author's Response: Really? I'm trying to make the characters as realistic as possible but still keeping their personalities with them - without making them bland. But thank you! I will definitely get a chapter out there as soon as possible. What do you expect will happen next?

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Good story! You reviewed my story, but for some reason, it wouldn't let me reply, so I just wanted to thank you for reviewing. :) It really motivates me. :D i already got a banner on hold for me, so hopefully that'll attract more readers. Keep on going! :)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! That's okay, but your welcome - you have a good story going on there, I just hope people will view it, banners attract them. So, good luck and thank you!!

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Wow, such an awesome story. I love how it's.. more real than most stories. Alice seems like a complete character, and I'm looking forward to finding out more about her!
Update soon!

Author's Response: Aha, THANK YOU!! =] That is the effect I'm trying to go for! You know, because, most stories on HPFF are about this drop dead gorgeous girl who gets boys throwing themselves at her or she is dating a marauder/makes a marauder fall in love with her. Now, don't get me wrong, I love those stories but I wanted to make mine a little bit more realistic. So I asked myself what if I went to Hogwarts?
I didn't base Alice's character off of my own, I based her off of the idea of realistic - how someone's life would really be if they went to Hogwarts. Obviously, not everyone can be popular like the Marauders and get dates so easily nor be gorgeous.
But Alice is pretty, not really popular, and lives a "normal" life (it gets more interesting now that the story is starting to really pick up).
Unfortunately, the story is going through revision due to the fact that I don't think that the earlier chapters were that good - but I'm on chapter 5 now!

THANK YOU, again! I truly and honestly appreciate your feedback! =]

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Hey~ I really like your writting style and everything! Please keep writting!!! I want to know what happens to Alice!!! Talk about a cliff hanger!!!

Author's Response: Hey! =) Wow, that's such a flattering compliment. I'm blushing, I swear. Haha, thank you! It's just that right now I feel that the first few chapters need serious revising because they were done so sloppily and they hardly have anything so now chapter 1 -3 is done with the writing revision. Now I have to just do 3 or 4 more.
But do keep reading! The story goes on and it's definitely starting to pick up speed.
THANK YOU! =)

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Great chapter and a great story :) I am really enjoying reading it. It makes me laugh :D

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! But the storyline is going to be changing just slightly so I just want to mention, once again, that the story is still under major revision - the beginning chapters are. But THANK YOU!

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YAY NEW CHAPTER! =)
I like it. Jake is so cute. But I can't see him with Alice. I think he's too gawky for her. But he's so adorable, I kinda want to eat him. But not in a cannibalistic sense. He's just SO CUTE!

Author's Response: Ahahaha! =)
I'm glad that I can make someone cheerful! THANK YOU!
That is the exact word to describe him, he is the average, gawky teenager.
Hahahaha. I'm just going to take a guess here and think that you really like Jake. Exactly, when you take a guy like him (nervous, shy, quiet) and put with a girl like Alice who is also shy but not purposely, she just comes off as it.
haha, yea, in a non-cannibalistic sense, you want to eat him. Yea, I guess he is. I'll have a chapter image of him up soon!

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I love your story I cant believe this is the first time I'm reading this! And I love the banner too and the last sentence and well the whole chapter :)

Author's Response: Oh, wow, thank you 19whitehorse! I just checked out your story 'Change of Heart' it's awesome! Thank you so so much for giving 'Alice Liddell' a chance.

Oh, wow, thank you. The banner, though, I have to give credits to someone else who does not have any account which I can give credit to.

THANK YOU SO MUCH!



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Whoa. I love this chapter. Seriously, it's amazing. GAH I don't know what to say, cause I just love it so much! My reviews are usually long and incoherent and scatter-brained. But there's nothing to criticize, it's just AWESOME! But the word 'awesome' doesn't do it justice. I'm trying to think of a word to describe how I feel. It's... heart-wrenchingly beautiful.

Author's Response: haha, Thanks! =) I love you! Aha, THANK YOU SO SO MUCH! Ahhh! You're killing me with your kindness! I guess we're all just scatter brained people. THANK YOU! I honestly cannot tell you how appreciative I am. YOU'RE AWESOME! You're a beautiful, kind, amazing, incredible, cool, awesome person, Lelioranges! THANK YOU!

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This chapter was really good, but sad at the same time because I feel so sorry for Jacob!
Poor thing, he seems so cute and adorable and I just feel sorry for him :(
- Ellie :)

Author's Response: I know, it was a sad, glum chapter. But thinks do pick up - I promise! Well.
Yea, Jacob (Jake) - feel bad for him too. But Alice has her reasons - she is not used to loving people so...
Well, and she doesn't know him.
Aha, yea. I'll probably have a chapter image of Jake soon - I don't know. But, yeah. You'll see, though, what will happen. Right now it's only November in the story (and November in reality, haha). By February, everything will change - in a bad way, maybe. Or in a good way?
I just want to try to make this story as realistic as possible. The question that I asked myself, in the beginning when first writing the Alice Liddell, is 'what would happen if you were enrolled at Hogwarts?'
I would have been a regular, normal student doing her studies and watching along with other bystanders the glorious, or not so, lives of the Marauders.
Anyways, BUT THANK YOU SO SO SO SO MUCH, Ellie!



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Too short! Really good otherwise! But it surprised me that you said that you spent hours and hours on this because it doesn't seem like a lot of material to edit.

Author's Response: Aha! Yea, sorry about the shortness of the chapter. Thank you, Catherine, again - you have been quite a faithful reviewer and I appreciate it so much, I hope you understand that. I didn't spend 'hours and hours', I spent an hour or so for 4 days adding material, deleting, and revising. Trust me, before, this chapter was completely different and was a bunch of gibberish - and then I revised it, deciding it was terrible. So I deleted certain parts. And then rewrote another plot line for the chapter.
Oh, well. That's what I do, I don't write that much but I do edit a lot. I promise- well, - that the next chapter shall be longer.

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Hey. I like this story. It's getting terribly late and I've been reading pretty much non-stop, I'm tired, so I'm sure I didn't give it the attention it deserves. But I liked reading it and you're a good writer. I like her. Alice. And I like your Marauders, Lily, Kirsten, Emily, Olivia... Even the Hufflepuff, I guess.
I like how she's an animagus. And I wonder what's gonna happen next, what with the Marauders out under the full moon, and her transforming as well...
Why did Remus leave her at the party?? Oh, and Sirius and James are hilarious. You put some pretty amazing jokes in there...
Only one thing: are you sure you know what the word 'alas' means? The way you've been using it, it doesn't really make much sense to me. A couple other errors as well, but on the whole not too bad... ;)
Good work!

Author's Response: Oh, well thank you and I am terribly sorry for keeping you awake.
Wow. thank you... so much. Well, here's a hint: she might not discover as much as you think she will.
You see, Remus is a gentlemen but quite outgoing too. He wanted to give her privacy and was quite uncomfortable being in between the two of them.
Thank you so much! It's hard for me to come up with jokes that aren't boring but can also fit Sirius's/James's characters.
Oh, sorry for my error. But, I do know what it means. I guess that what's in my head doesn't always come out quite right on the.. erm, laptop.
Thank you! =)

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WHY MUST YOU UPDATE THE DAY NANOWRIMO STARTS?!?!?!?! I hate you :P This story is so distracting, and I should really be focusing on writing, but no, you had to go and update and now I'm not in a writing mood anymore, I'm in a reading mood. If I don't win, I'm blaming you.
Anywho, this is awesome! =Dd I love it! Just wondering, does she die? That would be tragic.
DON'T UPDATE SOON! Just kidding, update cause I do want to read more, but like I said, it's your fault if I don't win because I'm spending too much time reading your stuff.

Author's Response: Hahahaha! Well, thank you for hating my, LeliOranges (kidding). Ahaha, you are killing me - but I really shouldn't die because I have to keep writing this story. Aww... I'm sorry =) for distracting you. I know how that feels, you read a story and then you don't feel all that motivated to write. Happens to me all the time.
Ahahaha - okay, fine, I'll take the blame. But that's only because I thank you for taking the time to review and read! THANK YOU SO MUCH!=)
You are awesome, period.
Well, now that you gave me the idea of her dying... nah, I'm joking. But, no, she does not die - as far as now.
Hahahaha - I won't to soon. Just for you. Well... THANK YOU, ROCKIN' AWESOME REVIEWER!

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This is my fav chapter so far! You get all the characters personality's spot on and its really believable! Can't wait to find out what happens next :)

Author's Response: I am so flattered right now. Thank you so so so very much for leaving a review. You honestly, probably, don't realize how much this means to me. It means a lot to an author to have feedback from their readers. THANK YOU SO MUCH, BLUEBELL_FLAMES! =)

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I love this story, it's a favorite now(:
Going back and reading it again.
By the way, I love your chapter images!

Author's Response: I've been feeling so down today, and lately. And, now, when I checked onto my account and I saw four new reviews and smiled and, while slightly teary eyed, danced the flutterwacken (the dance that Johnny Depp dances in one of Tim Burton's films).
xjamesandlilyx (YOU HAVE AN AWESOME USERNAME), Thank you so so so so so so much for taking your time to leave, not one, but two reviews!

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I love it still! Can't wait for the next update!

Author's Response: And I still love you. Aha, sorry if you are uncomfortable by that statement!
Thank you so much. You are. I'm speechless, thank you so much. I cannot stress how grateful I am. And, right now, I should really be doing a project but I can't because I just need to say thank you.
Oh, and thank you for liking my chapter images (some of them I made, and some are made by, well, a close friend of mine who doesn't have an account on here). THANK YOU!

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