Ooooh a nice, unexpected twist there at the end. Very interesting! Normally anything with minimal/no dialogue tends to drag and I struggle to get to the end, but you succeeded in keeping my attention through out. It was not only suspensful and interesting, but something different for me from what I usually lean towards reading. It was a welcomed and much needed change. So thank you.

I think this piece could do with another read through. Though the story itself had a nice flow, some of the paragraphs are a bit choopy and all over the place. And I really struggled with some of the sentences and trying to figure out what it was you were trying to stay. I feel as if there were just beeter ways to word some things.

Overall a great story idea! Good Job!
:)BaletGir

Author's Response: Aww thank you so much for reading and leaving such a wonderful review too! I'm really glad you found it to be something different to read! I understand that often cliches can be a bit too much so it's definitely nice to stay away from them for a bit 8D

Ooo I'll definitely take another look through it and edit it to improve it! Thanks so much for the criticism too :D

Glad you enjoyed it and thank you very much for stopping by! :D

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Great story, I suspected something, but the ending was still a big surprise. I thought that Sarah was just another werewolf, but her to be Greyback's daughter, one great twist. Liked it very much

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it and thank you for taking the time to read and review :D

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Ooh, that was so good! Well-written and with a good twist at the end! Hope you place well on the challenge. (sorry for the short review, I am tired of reviewing today :D )

Author's Response: Hey there!

Awwh thank you so much for the review!! *squishes* Short or not, all feedback is loved! Thanks so much and really pleased you liked it! :D

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